for Chance Meetings11/28/2019 c1 
4TipsyKitsune
I like the premise. Hope this leads to Team 7 friendship
Once the story picks up a bit, it would be nice if the descriptions were cut down.
4TipsyKitsuneI like the premise. Hope this leads to Team 7 friendship
Once the story picks up a bit, it would be nice if the descriptions were cut down.
11/25/2019 c1 2NeoMare
Hi!
I will be totally honest with you regarding this story. It has a really interesting premise and you could certainly develop a great fanfiction.
Your writing is good, even though your descriptions are a bit over the top and you have to be careful with your comma usage. Your spelling is good and your lexicon is ample enough.
Overall, it has the potential to be a fascinating story.
PS. If you want more attention publish a summary.
2NeoMareHi!
I will be totally honest with you regarding this story. It has a really interesting premise and you could certainly develop a great fanfiction.
Your writing is good, even though your descriptions are a bit over the top and you have to be careful with your comma usage. Your spelling is good and your lexicon is ample enough.
Overall, it has the potential to be a fascinating story.
PS. If you want more attention publish a summary.