8/29 c85 Guest
Hermione is portrayed very badly. You just feel like kicking her hard repeatedly - an absolutely wretched Hippocratic selfish bint feeling entitled and encroaching on others rights

5/13 c49 dveth
This chapter is terrible. The fact that Lovegood is blatantly manipulating the public to change the rules at the last second, despite everyone having agreed on them before, should have gotten her censured or disqualified as a judge. Instead, everyone just goes along with it and gives her exactly what she wants. Not only that, Angel is told compromise is part of being a diplomat. What part of giving a blatant cheat exactly what they want is a compromise?

And if the judges are going to go along with the blatant bias going on, then Durmstrang and Beauxbatons should have just public said everyone single one of their people were going to use lethal force on the Hogwarts group. It might have gotten them disqualified from the Task after the rule change, but it would have increased their schools' chances of winning since the Hogwarts champions would be dead for the rest of the tournament.

It's one thing to have a character do something that proves they're untrustworthy. It's another for everyone else involved to just go along with their actions and give them what they want despite them proving to be a terrible, biased judge.

8/17/2022 c6 Guest
People don't name their kids Yahweh, but Jesus is a common Spanish name. As a part of the Trinity, Jesus is the Christian God. Or that's the mainstream view anyway, there are also nontrinitarian Christians.

7/18/2022 c90 37Kirbilius Clausius
You manage to actually write pschopathy as a disability, instead of an excuse to make the 'villain' do evil things. "I don't get this person's motivation. I know I don't have a normal sense of empathy, so let me think. I like hurting people and expending myself to my limits, and I'm offering her the same exact chance. So she should accept it and be grateful. Instead, she's not entertaining the offer. But I put myself in her shoes, and that's what people without my disability say I should do. I'm getting madder by the moment."

6/29/2022 c90 RedKol
Binge reading this story may not have been the best idea I've ever had but I'm glad I did. I wish I could say I dislike the way you've developed Hermione but on second (and third etc) thought it probably makes the most sense for the relationship between her and Lyra to fail. I just wish that the person who Lyra looks like she's ultimately going to end up with was basically anyone else. Heh.
That aside, I have to say I have thoroughly enjoyed this entire series up to this point, even if it does look like more words were put into the First Task than most stories have period.

6/26/2022 c90 mockury
Excellent, the best series has updates!

6/1/2022 c89 2Chairman LoneStar
This story has been one of the best rides I've been on since joining FF way back when. You two are amazing at weaving together a complete tale with enjoyable characters all around and I'm excited for whenever your next chapter comes out. Y'all are amazing, keep it up!