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4/24/2020 c1 1SnowyOwl795
I really enjoyed reading this fic. I hope you will continue it!
12/2/2019 c1 1DeathByBombing
This is an interesting idea. I like that Jeanine lies to Marianne about her aptitude in a way that suits her own interests. That was cool. I find it a bit hard to imagine Jeanine with a daughter, but you did a good job of keeping it realistic and not straying too far from Jeanine's original character. Marianne is an interesting character. I like that her narration is very to-the-point and logical. She always seems very aware of her surroundings, which suits her (at least my perception of her) well. My one problem would probably be that in her narration, Marianne calls her mother 'Jeanine,' where in real life, she refers to her 'Mom.' It makes some sense that it would be that way in the first chapter, because want the reader to understand that Jeanine is Marianne's mother, but we could understand that from your summary, and from the way people talk to Marianne. Overall, great job! It'll be interesting to see where this goes.

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