for You had your chance5/26 c39 VamPyr00
Shouldn't he just be able to use Orochimaru's custom Substitution jutsu to completely heal himself? Why is he acting like he doesn't have any method to heal?
Shouldn't he just be able to use Orochimaru's custom Substitution jutsu to completely heal himself? Why is he acting like he doesn't have any method to heal?
5/26 c38 VamPyr00
You are seriously nerfing the shit out of his Curse Seal forms. I am honestly sad that it is basically just a glorified pair of wings/hands at this point and seems to give him no boost in power or CHAKRA whatsoever.
He also seems to be slowly transforming into full-blown Sasuke Uchiha rather than his apparent mixture of identities. With each chapter he seems to get more arrogant, ignorant, and actually seems to believe all that Uchiha nonsense.
You are seriously nerfing the shit out of his Curse Seal forms. I am honestly sad that it is basically just a glorified pair of wings/hands at this point and seems to give him no boost in power or CHAKRA whatsoever.
He also seems to be slowly transforming into full-blown Sasuke Uchiha rather than his apparent mixture of identities. With each chapter he seems to get more arrogant, ignorant, and actually seems to believe all that Uchiha nonsense.
5/25 c24 VamPyr00
I actually feel bad for Tayuya. The MC has almost zero control over his emotions (or even thoughts for that matter) and her attitude seems to bring out the worst in him. I really hope he can learn to control himself instead of acting like an angsty kid throwing tantrums all the time.
I actually feel bad for Tayuya. The MC has almost zero control over his emotions (or even thoughts for that matter) and her attitude seems to bring out the worst in him. I really hope he can learn to control himself instead of acting like an angsty kid throwing tantrums all the time.
5/25 c21 VamPyr00
Sweet Merlin...this is bad. Like, surprisingly bad — considering how the rest of the story has gone so far. The fight scene with Hidan was a bit 'meh' but THIS one is just terrible.
You didn't use his Sharingan genjutsu, his fire jutsu, any of his copied jutsu, snake summons, Orochimaru signature moves, Uchiha signature moves, SASUKE signature moves, or even a simple substitution in the entire fight.
In fact, you are even nerfing his Chidori; since he could do the original Chidori without hand seals by this point in the timeline. Not even mentioning how you are only using the ORIGINAL version of the Chidori and ignoring Sasuke's custom Chidori Stream and Senbon.
You ALSO nerfed his Sharingan so he couldn't keep it active and needed to 'rest' his eyes — despite him not even having the Mangekyo Sharingan yet. Keeping a 3 tomoe Sharingan activated for prolonged periods of time should be extremely easy for ANY UCHIHA, much less the incarnation of Indra (who has massively enhanced chakra).
You are also completely ignoring the power-up he should recieve from his Curse Mark. Stage 1 AND Stage 2 of his Curse Mark should enhance his physical abilities, chakra levels, and jutsu SIGNIFICANTLY. Curse Mark Stage 2 should be roughly equivalent to 3 tails jinchuriki cloak in sheer power and stage 1 is probably half of that or at LEAST around a 1 tail cloak in power. The fact that you are using the entire transformation as a glorified extra limb for restraining people is pathetic.
Even ignoring all of that, you are SOMEHOW even managing to nerf the Kiba Blades. The user is supposed to be able to control them remotely and they should be able to cut through basically anything. Neither of these aspects has been used or hinted at all in his fights.
Kakuzu is certainly a powerful opponent and Sasuke WOULD struggle with the fight solo, but my issue is more with HOW the fight happened rather than the end results. You are ignoring almost ALL of Sasuke Uchiha's skills and abilities in favor of spamming the ORIGINAL Chidori (with handseals), Kiba Blades (nerfed), and Kirin.
Even more cringe worthy are his little 'one-liners' about: 'not using fire against an Uchiha', 'a stepping stone to my immortality', and 'Akatsuki dies and Yugure is born' or whatever. That is some of the most CRINGE shit I've ever read in a non-crack, semi-serious story.
Seriously, I suggest going back and rewriting this fight scene after re-reading the wiki pages on Sasuke and all his relevant abilities. The story is really good so far; so seeing this just makes me sad.
Sweet Merlin...this is bad. Like, surprisingly bad — considering how the rest of the story has gone so far. The fight scene with Hidan was a bit 'meh' but THIS one is just terrible.
You didn't use his Sharingan genjutsu, his fire jutsu, any of his copied jutsu, snake summons, Orochimaru signature moves, Uchiha signature moves, SASUKE signature moves, or even a simple substitution in the entire fight.
In fact, you are even nerfing his Chidori; since he could do the original Chidori without hand seals by this point in the timeline. Not even mentioning how you are only using the ORIGINAL version of the Chidori and ignoring Sasuke's custom Chidori Stream and Senbon.
You ALSO nerfed his Sharingan so he couldn't keep it active and needed to 'rest' his eyes — despite him not even having the Mangekyo Sharingan yet. Keeping a 3 tomoe Sharingan activated for prolonged periods of time should be extremely easy for ANY UCHIHA, much less the incarnation of Indra (who has massively enhanced chakra).
You are also completely ignoring the power-up he should recieve from his Curse Mark. Stage 1 AND Stage 2 of his Curse Mark should enhance his physical abilities, chakra levels, and jutsu SIGNIFICANTLY. Curse Mark Stage 2 should be roughly equivalent to 3 tails jinchuriki cloak in sheer power and stage 1 is probably half of that or at LEAST around a 1 tail cloak in power. The fact that you are using the entire transformation as a glorified extra limb for restraining people is pathetic.
Even ignoring all of that, you are SOMEHOW even managing to nerf the Kiba Blades. The user is supposed to be able to control them remotely and they should be able to cut through basically anything. Neither of these aspects has been used or hinted at all in his fights.
Kakuzu is certainly a powerful opponent and Sasuke WOULD struggle with the fight solo, but my issue is more with HOW the fight happened rather than the end results. You are ignoring almost ALL of Sasuke Uchiha's skills and abilities in favor of spamming the ORIGINAL Chidori (with handseals), Kiba Blades (nerfed), and Kirin.
Even more cringe worthy are his little 'one-liners' about: 'not using fire against an Uchiha', 'a stepping stone to my immortality', and 'Akatsuki dies and Yugure is born' or whatever. That is some of the most CRINGE shit I've ever read in a non-crack, semi-serious story.
Seriously, I suggest going back and rewriting this fight scene after re-reading the wiki pages on Sasuke and all his relevant abilities. The story is really good so far; so seeing this just makes me sad.
5/25 c17 VamPyr00
I personally think it's really stupid to reveal his insecurities with one of his so-called subordinates. Now she will be doubting his ability to lead them, much less fight these S rank monsters.
I personally think it's really stupid to reveal his insecurities with one of his so-called subordinates. Now she will be doubting his ability to lead them, much less fight these S rank monsters.
4/29 c36 DaHaze
Tsunade seems to be a mix of Hiruzen and Danzo and it’s kinda off putting these is being mad at sasuke and then there is doing stuff that even naruto would hate her for
Tsunade seems to be a mix of Hiruzen and Danzo and it’s kinda off putting these is being mad at sasuke and then there is doing stuff that even naruto would hate her for
4/6 c42 TrumpasaurusRex
Way too much relationship drama and the MC is too preoccupied with sex.
He shouldn’t waste time messing around until after all the threats are neutralized.
He spends 90% of the time talking, plotting, and dealing with drama. Disappointing.
Way too much relationship drama and the MC is too preoccupied with sex.
He shouldn’t waste time messing around until after all the threats are neutralized.
He spends 90% of the time talking, plotting, and dealing with drama. Disappointing.
13/31 c42 AssiriosDM
Your fic is surprisingly good, admittedly I don't remember much besides this and the last chapter, but it's good to see this back.
Your fic is surprisingly good, admittedly I don't remember much besides this and the last chapter, but it's good to see this back.