for Pokémon Antisocial Hero VOL1 Mask of Ice(English Version)1/25/2020 c1 
1Yeahleash
Yknow even though the plot seems like it is fun the way you present it totally sees like you dont think of what other people might say about your fanfiction. Put something like("" or *or ) to signify who is talking to whom.
About the plot even though I cant say someone hasn't written such things before but I can say that such writings is hard to come by.
I sorry If I've discouraged you but you can try to make it more understandable in the near future.
b(UMU)b
1YeahleashYknow even though the plot seems like it is fun the way you present it totally sees like you dont think of what other people might say about your fanfiction. Put something like("" or *or ) to signify who is talking to whom.
About the plot even though I cant say someone hasn't written such things before but I can say that such writings is hard to come by.
I sorry If I've discouraged you but you can try to make it more understandable in the near future.
b(UMU)b
1/24/2020 c4 thor94
some ash bashing here, especially when purple is here.
Ask how purple reacted when he noticed that the alola league ash won, was more like the unrestricted nearby district tournament where literally everyone from the corner street old baker to the random tourist who landed few hours ago or even the usual criminal thug could enter using whatever pokemon including wild or borrowed by the gentle big brother.
some ash bashing here, especially when purple is here.
Ask how purple reacted when he noticed that the alola league ash won, was more like the unrestricted nearby district tournament where literally everyone from the corner street old baker to the random tourist who landed few hours ago or even the usual criminal thug could enter using whatever pokemon including wild or borrowed by the gentle big brother.
12/7/2019 c1 Guest
Grammar could use some work.
The OC should be VERY relieved that he wasn’t sent to Warhammer 40k.
Also, I’m a little disappointed that he didn’t mug some trainer at knifepoint for money. I mean, I mean, a knife at your jugular tends to encourage cooperation, especially if you can’t reach your trapped, enslaved attack animals [pokemon in their pokeballs].
Grammar could use some work.
The OC should be VERY relieved that he wasn’t sent to Warhammer 40k.
Also, I’m a little disappointed that he didn’t mug some trainer at knifepoint for money. I mean, I mean, a knife at your jugular tends to encourage cooperation, especially if you can’t reach your trapped, enslaved attack animals [pokemon in their pokeballs].