for It Started With A Spill6/25/2020 c1 Shadowghostnatalya
Hmmm
Interesting concept.
However, Four and Tris are a little out of character.
Could you make Tris a little more agressive and Four quiet?
Other than that, yes, I liked the idea of this fiction.
Good job! I almost cldnt tell that u wer a first time writer.
Hmmm
Interesting concept.
However, Four and Tris are a little out of character.
Could you make Tris a little more agressive and Four quiet?
Other than that, yes, I liked the idea of this fiction.
Good job! I almost cldnt tell that u wer a first time writer.
6/5/2020 c1 
1GreekFangirl74
I love it, I've just started my own fanfic, and I enjoy the story so far!
1GreekFangirl74I love it, I've just started my own fanfic, and I enjoy the story so far!
5/15/2020 c12 Unicornpotato4
I love this series and I wait for every day to see if theres a update it is an amazing story to read and I cant wait for the next chapter also every time I read a update I always smile at the quality work you do
I love this series and I wait for every day to see if theres a update it is an amazing story to read and I cant wait for the next chapter also every time I read a update I always smile at the quality work you do
5/11/2020 c12 nasa0.0
ahhhh no why ahhh! you should probably work on making the chapters a bit longer and i really hope four is fine and didn't get a serious injury from the accident
ahhhh no why ahhh! you should probably work on making the chapters a bit longer and i really hope four is fine and didn't get a serious injury from the accident
5/1/2020 c11 LunaLovegood48
This story is amazing! You are an awesome writer! Also, great name - I am called Rose too! Keep writing! This is amazing!
This story is amazing! You are an awesome writer! Also, great name - I am called Rose too! Keep writing! This is amazing!
5/2/2020 c11 SugarPlum36
NOW I'M WRECKED! You MUSTTTT write more sooooooon *bawling my eyes out over here*
NOW I'M WRECKED! You MUSTTTT write more sooooooon *bawling my eyes out over here*
5/2/2020 c5 SugarPlum36
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW i am squealing! and my sister is looking at me like i'm insane but AWWWWW *ugly cry*
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW i am squealing! and my sister is looking at me like i'm insane but AWWWWW *ugly cry*
5/2/2020 c3 SugarPlum36
"hand" is what you said, it is "hang". "cuckle" when you meant "chuckle". also you forgot some periods. Some names weren't capitalized. "Zeke ansWers my qUestion" and i also think it would be "pointedly" not "pointingly" but i am not sure on that one. I plan to be an english major so i am probably being annoying but i thought i'd let you know! While i may be giving corrections, it is only because i love divergent and love this fan fic! 3 Maddie
"hand" is what you said, it is "hang". "cuckle" when you meant "chuckle". also you forgot some periods. Some names weren't capitalized. "Zeke ansWers my qUestion" and i also think it would be "pointedly" not "pointingly" but i am not sure on that one. I plan to be an english major so i am probably being annoying but i thought i'd let you know! While i may be giving corrections, it is only because i love divergent and love this fan fic! 3 Maddie
5/1/2020 c2 SugarPlum36
Hehe. I laughed at this chapter because it is their names and they are talking about missing each other. it is so cute but why wouldn't they recognize each other if it has only been a few years? I am new to this site so idk if you can respond to me Rose, but i'd love one. I love your writing, keep it up girl. Love, Maddie.
Hehe. I laughed at this chapter because it is their names and they are talking about missing each other. it is so cute but why wouldn't they recognize each other if it has only been a few years? I am new to this site so idk if you can respond to me Rose, but i'd love one. I love your writing, keep it up girl. Love, Maddie.