for Soul Slayer10/19/2020 c2 Guest
...it’s painfully obvious you don’t know how to use the correct verb tenses. It’s readable, with an interesting setup, but it’s a complete chore to read all the way through. I think it would’ve done better if I just skimmed over the chapters instead of reading them.
...it’s painfully obvious you don’t know how to use the correct verb tenses. It’s readable, with an interesting setup, but it’s a complete chore to read all the way through. I think it would’ve done better if I just skimmed over the chapters instead of reading them.
10/21/2020 c29 zeonstar360
By the way she acts I'm betting the only thing she can't do is have children
By the way she acts I'm betting the only thing she can't do is have children
8/11/2020 c23 Guest
Good story so far looking forward to seeing what heppens next
Good story so far looking forward to seeing what heppens next
5/12/2020 c2 
6XXxxxadisxxxXX
Gave it a try, grammar errors all throughout make it tiring as hell. I can tell you understand the English language enough to write things as readable, but this is discouraging.
I'm just gonna make a shortlist
-Misuse (or not using at all) of punctuation marks
-suffix errors
-verb tense errors
-Missing words
-not using identifiers in speech (you use them sometimes but other times they are just not used whatsoever)
-general spelling errors
I'd suggest looking for a beta or trying to go through and fix a lot of these. Usually, in my stuff I go through and reread it until I don't notice any. This just has a lot of miscellaneous ones. Fun story though.
6XXxxxadisxxxXXGave it a try, grammar errors all throughout make it tiring as hell. I can tell you understand the English language enough to write things as readable, but this is discouraging.
I'm just gonna make a shortlist
-Misuse (or not using at all) of punctuation marks
-suffix errors
-verb tense errors
-Missing words
-not using identifiers in speech (you use them sometimes but other times they are just not used whatsoever)
-general spelling errors
I'd suggest looking for a beta or trying to go through and fix a lot of these. Usually, in my stuff I go through and reread it until I don't notice any. This just has a lot of miscellaneous ones. Fun story though.
3/18/2020 c14 Bolis67
It wad going SUPERBLY well until the "IM FROM ANOTHER DIMENSION" OMG retarded ass thinking what was the point all those secrecy before now laid waste.
Retard really RESPECT IS EARNED so is TRUST. Not gonna read it you are one of those writers that lacks logic and reasoning
It wad going SUPERBLY well until the "IM FROM ANOTHER DIMENSION" OMG retarded ass thinking what was the point all those secrecy before now laid waste.
Retard really RESPECT IS EARNED so is TRUST. Not gonna read it you are one of those writers that lacks logic and reasoning