for Carrots and Cauliflowers8/25/2022 c39 Za-Kami
Why didn't Caulifla shoot down Piccolo Jr's. Egg? She and Goku would have had to notice the guy barfing up an egg.
Why didn't Caulifla shoot down Piccolo Jr's. Egg? She and Goku would have had to notice the guy barfing up an egg.
8/23/2022 c4 
4DarkFusion
I must say you're doing a good job with the training arc be it Caulifla's addition, giving Kuririn some character development to go with his transition from his initial character to his character during the tournament and onward. I also do like Caulifla getting Goku to learn a few other things works since given the latter's personality the best way to make whoever he ends up with be it Chi Chi or someone else is to write them as his partner and not a side character and you're setting that up well so far. Will definitely be reading more.
4DarkFusionI must say you're doing a good job with the training arc be it Caulifla's addition, giving Kuririn some character development to go with his transition from his initial character to his character during the tournament and onward. I also do like Caulifla getting Goku to learn a few other things works since given the latter's personality the best way to make whoever he ends up with be it Chi Chi or someone else is to write them as his partner and not a side character and you're setting that up well so far. Will definitely be reading more.
8/23/2022 c1 DarkFusion
Okay, this is an interesting premise and I've got no problem with a What if of Caulifla being born in the main universe. As for how she got to Earth I figure that'll be answered later but whatever it is new material for the series from games to movies basically has it that there were alot more Saiyans off world than previously assumed so I won't be bothered by that. Will definitely read more.
Okay, this is an interesting premise and I've got no problem with a What if of Caulifla being born in the main universe. As for how she got to Earth I figure that'll be answered later but whatever it is new material for the series from games to movies basically has it that there were alot more Saiyans off world than previously assumed so I won't be bothered by that. Will definitely read more.
8/17/2022 c55 Bucio
As for the name of 21, I say that you leave it as you already have it (from Checka to Vomi, considering the meanings, your idea is better)
As for the last chapter, well, that was actually a pleasant surprise, seeing in this chapter, what is the future of your other fic, where Goku's parents and Vegeta's mother survived the destruction of the Saiyans , and became allies of Cooler (Frieza's older brother); to the surprise of seeing that Raditz and Goku have a younger sister, Jica (although curious, it almost seems that Romei does not like the idea of Jica spending time with Vegeta's younger brother).
As for this, we see the beginning of Goku and Caulifla's training in the Path of the Serpent (heh, this time Hebi Hime will not have it so easy), the twins start their training, having it easier, than what happened canon Gohan, even with them already having partial control of their Oozaru forms (unlike Chi-Chi), earning them their uniform and starting training with Piccolo, and with Krillin also earning his heavy cape and turban (hopefully Yamcha , Ten-Shin-Han, Chaozu and Lunch? have good training, and Yamcha don't be the Saibamen's punching bag or get slaughtered by Kale).
The most entertaining thing is to see, the Chi-Chi x Raditz? It's quite funny to see them together, poor Raditz, he's going to know first hand, what a Tsundere is, even worse, a Saiyan Tsundere, and with Piccolo, giving him the talk of the shovel to Goku's older brother.
Good luck and keep it up
As for the name of 21, I say that you leave it as you already have it (from Checka to Vomi, considering the meanings, your idea is better)
As for the last chapter, well, that was actually a pleasant surprise, seeing in this chapter, what is the future of your other fic, where Goku's parents and Vegeta's mother survived the destruction of the Saiyans , and became allies of Cooler (Frieza's older brother); to the surprise of seeing that Raditz and Goku have a younger sister, Jica (although curious, it almost seems that Romei does not like the idea of Jica spending time with Vegeta's younger brother).
As for this, we see the beginning of Goku and Caulifla's training in the Path of the Serpent (heh, this time Hebi Hime will not have it so easy), the twins start their training, having it easier, than what happened canon Gohan, even with them already having partial control of their Oozaru forms (unlike Chi-Chi), earning them their uniform and starting training with Piccolo, and with Krillin also earning his heavy cape and turban (hopefully Yamcha , Ten-Shin-Han, Chaozu and Lunch? have good training, and Yamcha don't be the Saibamen's punching bag or get slaughtered by Kale).
The most entertaining thing is to see, the Chi-Chi x Raditz? It's quite funny to see them together, poor Raditz, he's going to know first hand, what a Tsundere is, even worse, a Saiyan Tsundere, and with Piccolo, giving him the talk of the shovel to Goku's older brother.
Good luck and keep it up
8/14/2022 c55 DBZFan
Thank you for an amazing story!
I have been following this for a while, and I wanted to stop and say thank you so much for such an amazing story you’ve crafted!
The characters have had such great development so far!
It’s so nice to see Goku, not only in a healthy relationship, but also learning more schooling wise! He seems so different yet still screams Goku to me if that makes any sense? Caulifla has been so good for him! It’ll be interesting to see, not only them but the kids and Raditz have control of the Oozaru form and give them Ikari state!
Chichi, while I wasn’t a fan in the anime, thought she could be so much more if she stopped and managed her temper and actually trained to be a Zwarrior! I wasn’t expecting to turn out quiet like this but I really like the change!
Gohan having a sister is another change I really like! Hopefully he can find a healthy balance in fighting, and living a normal life with our thinking he has to sacrifice one for the other. I can’t wait to see where they both go as the story progresses!
Something I’ve wondered, is why Goku didn’t tell Bulma about how much the change in gravity was helping him while he was dead. Bulma could have made the gravity chamber early for Piccolo, Krillin, Tein etc and they could have used it while on earth! Maybe that’s something they can mention to Bulma via king Kai when they arrive?
If it helps their chances at surviving I’m sure Bulma would do it! Plus Raditz will already by used to 10x Gravity as that’s the norm on Planet Vegeta right? So he can help them adjust!
I also love that Raditx survived! It felt like he could have been more as well, but was forgotten! I’m not sure if the Raditz x Chichi teasing will go anywhere, but it’s an interesting pairing! The only one I’ve seen is Radtiz x Launch pairing so I can’t wait to see where that goes too!
I love you’ve included so many more female fighters as well! There really weren’t any besides 18 when I was growing up, & even she was basically forgotten!
Thank you again so much for the story!
Thank you for an amazing story!
I have been following this for a while, and I wanted to stop and say thank you so much for such an amazing story you’ve crafted!
The characters have had such great development so far!
It’s so nice to see Goku, not only in a healthy relationship, but also learning more schooling wise! He seems so different yet still screams Goku to me if that makes any sense? Caulifla has been so good for him! It’ll be interesting to see, not only them but the kids and Raditz have control of the Oozaru form and give them Ikari state!
Chichi, while I wasn’t a fan in the anime, thought she could be so much more if she stopped and managed her temper and actually trained to be a Zwarrior! I wasn’t expecting to turn out quiet like this but I really like the change!
Gohan having a sister is another change I really like! Hopefully he can find a healthy balance in fighting, and living a normal life with our thinking he has to sacrifice one for the other. I can’t wait to see where they both go as the story progresses!
Something I’ve wondered, is why Goku didn’t tell Bulma about how much the change in gravity was helping him while he was dead. Bulma could have made the gravity chamber early for Piccolo, Krillin, Tein etc and they could have used it while on earth! Maybe that’s something they can mention to Bulma via king Kai when they arrive?
If it helps their chances at surviving I’m sure Bulma would do it! Plus Raditz will already by used to 10x Gravity as that’s the norm on Planet Vegeta right? So he can help them adjust!
I also love that Raditx survived! It felt like he could have been more as well, but was forgotten! I’m not sure if the Raditz x Chichi teasing will go anywhere, but it’s an interesting pairing! The only one I’ve seen is Radtiz x Launch pairing so I can’t wait to see where that goes too!
I love you’ve included so many more female fighters as well! There really weren’t any besides 18 when I was growing up, & even she was basically forgotten!
Thank you again so much for the story!
8/14/2022 c55 2GM10
Oh goodie, now Z Squad will have six big monkes to fight... How many monkes? Vegeta, Nappa, Kale... Am I forgetting someone?
Roshi probably felt like some student of his just betrayed him by using another school's gi.
A21's name you gave her here stays, no one predicted the Canon name to come out with the movie, and in my opinion I prefer the one you created.
2GM10Oh goodie, now Z Squad will have six big monkes to fight... How many monkes? Vegeta, Nappa, Kale... Am I forgetting someone?
Roshi probably felt like some student of his just betrayed him by using another school's gi.
A21's name you gave her here stays, no one predicted the Canon name to come out with the movie, and in my opinion I prefer the one you created.
8/13/2022 c55 elijahlarson03
I’d say to probably change it from Checka to Vomi (Android 21’s human name). Maybe keep Checka as a sort of alias or something?
I’d say to probably change it from Checka to Vomi (Android 21’s human name). Maybe keep Checka as a sort of alias or something?
8/13/2022 c55 Dontus -not Donut- Powerus
Yay I guess. So as to make sure this is the right 21.
You can also keep Cheka as a nickname to hide her real name.
Yay I guess. So as to make sure this is the right 21.
You can also keep Cheka as a nickname to hide her real name.