for Ooo's Evil7/12/2023 c13 Guest
On a scale to 1 to 10 on how good your fanfiction is I would say it is about -20
Look, I don’t say this to be a jerk, and then the story written a couple years ago and I’ll probably never see his comment seriously man this is the best you can do, I mean where are you turn a Finn into a basic bitch Simp ass loser like that emo duck ass candy ass Sasuke from Naruto
On a scale to 1 to 10 on how good your fanfiction is I would say it is about -20
Look, I don’t say this to be a jerk, and then the story written a couple years ago and I’ll probably never see his comment seriously man this is the best you can do, I mean where are you turn a Finn into a basic bitch Simp ass loser like that emo duck ass candy ass Sasuke from Naruto
7/11/2023 c1 Guest
I’m legitimately sorry if this offends you I say this not to be a jerk but this is my opinion
I don’t hate that you turned Finn evil what I hate is that you turned Finn into a angsty emo duck ass simp loser like sasuke from another one dimensional caricature of a character that is obsessed with revenge because you’re O.C. Bonnie didn’t go out with your O.C. Finn or whatever reason your plot device finn turned evil for. I think it was he found a book and conjured Stalin’s long lost cousin Jason Stalin or whatever but honestly I can’t be bothered to read this boring contrived story ever again. Next time you turn finn evil maybe give and an actual reason for him to turn evil I mean Honestly now Finn being evil is just unbelievable. A good reason for finn to turn evil say for example is that bubblegum found founders island kidnapped several humans including Finn’s mom and cruelly and inhumanely experimented on them until not only are they not human anymore but we’re so broken, physically mentally spiritually, etc. that they basically turned into human vegetables
I’m legitimately sorry if this offends you I say this not to be a jerk but this is my opinion
I don’t hate that you turned Finn evil what I hate is that you turned Finn into a angsty emo duck ass simp loser like sasuke from another one dimensional caricature of a character that is obsessed with revenge because you’re O.C. Bonnie didn’t go out with your O.C. Finn or whatever reason your plot device finn turned evil for. I think it was he found a book and conjured Stalin’s long lost cousin Jason Stalin or whatever but honestly I can’t be bothered to read this boring contrived story ever again. Next time you turn finn evil maybe give and an actual reason for him to turn evil I mean Honestly now Finn being evil is just unbelievable. A good reason for finn to turn evil say for example is that bubblegum found founders island kidnapped several humans including Finn’s mom and cruelly and inhumanely experimented on them until not only are they not human anymore but we’re so broken, physically mentally spiritually, etc. that they basically turned into human vegetables
3/9/2020 c11 AlphaKenny1
Ok, this fic is good but in the latest chapters the quality is decreasing quite a lot. The main issue is that you are relying TOO much in break lines, the best way to describe chapter 10 to 13 is confusing. I got completely lost.
Is flint, Fp brother? Is Fp dead? If she was killed by demons why would Finn not be mad at the demons?
What’s going on with flint and the coffin? What’s it’s importance? Who helped Simon fight against the demons when he was getting overwhelmed? Why did Simon and Marceline fought?
You really need to start using POV instead of break lines because they aren’t working well.
Ok, this fic is good but in the latest chapters the quality is decreasing quite a lot. The main issue is that you are relying TOO much in break lines, the best way to describe chapter 10 to 13 is confusing. I got completely lost.
Is flint, Fp brother? Is Fp dead? If she was killed by demons why would Finn not be mad at the demons?
What’s going on with flint and the coffin? What’s it’s importance? Who helped Simon fight against the demons when he was getting overwhelmed? Why did Simon and Marceline fought?
You really need to start using POV instead of break lines because they aren’t working well.
3/9/2020 c10 AlphaKenny1
Wait what? Why is Flint inside the coffin? Isn’t he FP brother, why would Finn care about him ? Did I missed something, is Finn in love with Flint or some shit like that ? I’m super confused.
Wait what? Why is Flint inside the coffin? Isn’t he FP brother, why would Finn care about him ? Did I missed something, is Finn in love with Flint or some shit like that ? I’m super confused.
2/1/2020 c12 
1Cody Black
Your coming to quite the resolution, and a very good one indeed. Your character development throughout the whole story is phenomenal. Making Finn an anti-hero was genius. The best part of all this is that there's more to come.
I think the battle you've been describing for the last two chapters is epic. I like how your continually throwing conflict into the scene, but at the same time, the story seems to be moving just fine. Keep up the great work!
1Cody BlackYour coming to quite the resolution, and a very good one indeed. Your character development throughout the whole story is phenomenal. Making Finn an anti-hero was genius. The best part of all this is that there's more to come.
I think the battle you've been describing for the last two chapters is epic. I like how your continually throwing conflict into the scene, but at the same time, the story seems to be moving just fine. Keep up the great work!
1/28/2020 c10 ccarter11
amazing story, i love it so much. please do a sweet ending. but ether way it goes i know it'll be good.
amazing story, i love it so much. please do a sweet ending. but ether way it goes i know it'll be good.
1/27/2020 c9 1iwantwhisky
He's become so twisted with his plans for revenge that he doesn't see straight anymore. I've lost so much sleep reading this at night, it's been playing with my emotions and kept on the edge of my seat! I'm so excited to see what other surprises you have in store for us!
1iwantwhiskyHe's become so twisted with his plans for revenge that he doesn't see straight anymore. I've lost so much sleep reading this at night, it's been playing with my emotions and kept on the edge of my seat! I'm so excited to see what other surprises you have in store for us!
1/26/2020 c9 1Cody Black
I must say, you've made yourself quite the tragedy, writing about the depravity of a hero and his falling out with friends. You've even taken the thing he cares most about, his love.
It's so sad, yet so good! And better yet, you've been pretty consistent with your postings, a rare thing to see among fanfic writers. Keep up the good work!
1Cody BlackI must say, you've made yourself quite the tragedy, writing about the depravity of a hero and his falling out with friends. You've even taken the thing he cares most about, his love.
It's so sad, yet so good! And better yet, you've been pretty consistent with your postings, a rare thing to see among fanfic writers. Keep up the good work!
1/22/2020 c7 Cody Black
First off, I like the name change, very funny. Secondly, the cover image change I find to be quite disturbing, and frankly, off-topic to the story as a whole (just my opinion of course). Personally I thought you nailed it with the first one.
As for the story, that was a really good scene with Simon and Marceline. It did everything from character development, further the plot of the story, and even made me cringe with pain (you were quite descriptive). Without a doubt, your story is going to turn out wonderful. However, (just from a reader's perspective) I do hope that things continue to escalate in the story.
First off, I like the name change, very funny. Secondly, the cover image change I find to be quite disturbing, and frankly, off-topic to the story as a whole (just my opinion of course). Personally I thought you nailed it with the first one.
As for the story, that was a really good scene with Simon and Marceline. It did everything from character development, further the plot of the story, and even made me cringe with pain (you were quite descriptive). Without a doubt, your story is going to turn out wonderful. However, (just from a reader's perspective) I do hope that things continue to escalate in the story.
1/19/2020 c6 Cody Black
You've turned Finn into a demonic, psychotic, protagonist who struggles against his deepest darkest feelings of hatred and lust. You write about a manipulative, sadistic, antagonist who pretends to be best buds with the hero. Your main character's love interests have been physically and mentally abused by an evil Finn, which only increases their desires to be with the good Finn they believe to be on the inside.
Am I reading the fanfiction written by Hudson Abadeer himself?
Great job! you sick genius, I can't wait to read more.
You've turned Finn into a demonic, psychotic, protagonist who struggles against his deepest darkest feelings of hatred and lust. You write about a manipulative, sadistic, antagonist who pretends to be best buds with the hero. Your main character's love interests have been physically and mentally abused by an evil Finn, which only increases their desires to be with the good Finn they believe to be on the inside.
Am I reading the fanfiction written by Hudson Abadeer himself?
Great job! you sick genius, I can't wait to read more.
1/17/2020 c5 1iwantwhisky
You have fantastic fight scenes, however, i feel as though the build-up leading to the confrontation with Phoebe was a little anti-climactic, maybe you are planning something more in the next chapter?
I am excited to see what's next! i hope more people read and review because this is an actually good upcoming fanfic!
1iwantwhiskyYou have fantastic fight scenes, however, i feel as though the build-up leading to the confrontation with Phoebe was a little anti-climactic, maybe you are planning something more in the next chapter?
I am excited to see what's next! i hope more people read and review because this is an actually good upcoming fanfic!
1/12/2020 c2 iwantwhisky
I think the whole of second chapter really shows how twisted he has become, though his actions are less than good. its been a good chapter and im looking forward to the next one!
some readers might not like how finn is acting, but thats how it should be, because this isnt the goody goody finn we're all known to like. if people are disliking this finn, it only builds up the character development!
I think the whole of second chapter really shows how twisted he has become, though his actions are less than good. its been a good chapter and im looking forward to the next one!
some readers might not like how finn is acting, but thats how it should be, because this isnt the goody goody finn we're all known to like. if people are disliking this finn, it only builds up the character development!
1/11/2020 c2 1Cody Black
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I don't what to say. Other than I think your fanfiction has great potential. When I got halfway through the chapter I started thinking "Oh my Glob, this guy has crossed all the lines using Finn as
one the main characters."
Then again, I guess that's the whole point of this story. To turn Finn away from being a hero and into the villan. OR IS IT? Is Mephisto really the one controlling Finn. Is that the more Finn uses his demon powers, the greater control he has over him? What the heck is going on?!
Overall, I think you made yourself a great beginning. I'm intrigued, and want to see what happens. HOWEVER, I would be careful using such explicit scenes in this story. The amorous things Finn did to Marceline might be taking things a little too far some readers (keep in mind that your audience consist of Adventure Time fans who really like Finn).
And above all, please keep writing! The longer we wait, the more we lose interest.
1Cody Black...
I don't what to say. Other than I think your fanfiction has great potential. When I got halfway through the chapter I started thinking "Oh my Glob, this guy has crossed all the lines using Finn as
one the main characters."
Then again, I guess that's the whole point of this story. To turn Finn away from being a hero and into the villan. OR IS IT? Is Mephisto really the one controlling Finn. Is that the more Finn uses his demon powers, the greater control he has over him? What the heck is going on?!
Overall, I think you made yourself a great beginning. I'm intrigued, and want to see what happens. HOWEVER, I would be careful using such explicit scenes in this story. The amorous things Finn did to Marceline might be taking things a little too far some readers (keep in mind that your audience consist of Adventure Time fans who really like Finn).
And above all, please keep writing! The longer we wait, the more we lose interest.