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1/7 c33 Can'tComeUpWithName
Do you get off misery and torture? Cuz this story is nothing but trash torture porn with each chapter it keeps getting worse.

This isn't a dark story, this is what an edgy 12 years old think a dark story should be but it's nothing more than grimderp bullshit. I find myself just rolling my eyes reading the story. There is no emotion when reading it, just a sense of "What's the point of all of this?"

I'm dropping this here. You probably don't care and think you've written some amazing story. Well, you didn't.
12/31/2022 c4 SMB
I was right. This is a terrible story. How did they know what class to go to? Their head of house doesn't give out the schedules until they go to breakfast, which they skipped, and Snape would have seen their terrible states.
I hate it when authors intentionally ignore things for plot purposes. It would have been better if he confronted them, admonished them for disgracing the house with their outfits, and taken points. That would have shown that they wouldn't get help from him and then you could have had the confrontation from McGonagall with the same outcome of them not admitting anything.
I'm not going to read any more of this nonsense. A pureblood witch not knowing any magic after growing up in a magic household? Why would she go to Slytherin if she knew how they would treat her? That's just moronic.
12/31/2022 c1 SMB
Fateful encounter? Nothing actually happened. Also, Harry was OOC, since he wouldn't have been either happy or outgoing. He didn't speak at all to Malfoy until Malfoy spoke, so your Harry didn't act at all like canon Harry. His attitude would have turned Daphne right off and she wouldn't have given him the time of day, let alone shaken hands, which Harry never offers! He doesn't like casual touching! The event in the pub where he was swarmed by the public turned him right off of that act!
12/8/2022 c41 6ecchansama
Wow, this story was a journey and a half.
So much suffering and pain, so many heinous acts. It even made it hard to keep reading at times, so I can understand the people that were not able to push through. For a while, a bit after the middle of the story, I was close to quit reading, but I kept on since I held the belief that this would end up being an impressive story overall.
And it was. Some really major twists and turns, and several life lessons really. I do not regret at all staying with this story to its end.
Thanks for sharing this marvelous story from your demented mind. ;)
Well written, good plot, and very truthful to the characters you used. Kudos.
12/3/2022 c1 Ltbutterfly287
I get the feeling your going to play up the ice queen shit. It’s painful to act like a even year old child could have a cold mask to the point that nothing leaks through. Honestly I feel like your going to play up the pure blood supremacist number and generalize slytherians. Also the reactions doesn’t really work unless your going the route of the greengrass family being dark and death eaters which is something I never like because it’s only done for the sake of creating meaningless drama that ends up driving the majority of the story.
11/25/2022 c19 77766777
Well. That's it for me. Great story, you're a great writer, but I just despise this plot point. It's way too common and feels like more of a waste of a character than anything else.
11/25/2022 c17 77766777
I feel like the dementors would also make him hear Daphne telling him that their partnership was over with how much they're dependent on each other
11/18/2022 c41 nighttimereader-viper
I should be sleeping but I couldn’t stop good job
11/16/2022 c1 20vlad the inhaler
For the last few years I avoided this story because of some clunky English in the first few paragraphs, but then I read some of your short stories recently and realized English was your second language and that I should give this story a real shot as clearly your English has improved.

I'm glad I did. This is quite frankly one of the best stories I've read in the Fandom. Thank you. A fresh plot and interesting original side plot and OCs but without ever feeling like you were trying to just shoehorn it into a Harry Potter story. The angst was balanced to not be overbearing and actually pushed the plot forward. And you did a fantastic job of making these people real and pulling them back from the brink. All the relationships grew or deteriorated in ways that felt organic and responsive to one another. Just 10/10 fantastic work.

But the thing I appreciate the most is you stuck to your guns. You had your story to tell and it was a good story and you didn't shy away from the consequences of actions, whether or not those actions were accidents or things later regretted. More than anything, I thank you for that. I'm glad you didn't let reviewers talk you out of Sirius's tragedy, or Daphne's issues.

Just...yeah, tremendous.
10/27/2022 c23 KenyanHammer
You got me good there.
10/22/2022 c34 Marcus
it is trash megalomania
10/7/2022 c41 K
Brilliant, brilliant story. Thank you so much for it. Now all I have to do is catch up with all the jobs I put aside to read it.
9/15/2022 c41 silvasky541
So, I absolutely loved this story. In fact I couldn’t put it down. I just kept reading and reading. Hats off to you for such an amazing and well written story.

I’m really hoping that you’ll do a sequel to it as it almost felt like the end was building up to something that would continue in the next story.

Here’s hoping!
9/8/2022 c33 Guest
your story's premise just became very dumb. first very powerfull the very dumb, make up your mind
8/14/2022 c10 God Of Fatality
I thought this Harry was a smart and cunning Slytherin but now he's running actively into danger after he heard a mysterious voice that's utter bullshit stay consistent with your characters dummy
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