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2/16 c6 4Maia the Writer
This is an interesting fanfic you got here. I like how you are adapting the Cinderella Story to fit Galar. I like how the ball becomes a tournament! I feel so sad that you are not getting very positive reviews for this. I would encourage you to keep on writing and then go back and see if there's anything you want to edit. It's hard to write a whole story at once, but I believe you got something that is very good!
1/23 c4 20RaisingHeartExelion
I'm so glad to see a new chapter and it's a little bit longer. I'm looking very much forward to see the rest of the fanfic. I wonder what kind of shipping there will be, and who Cindy might end up with. :)

As for those three "weird" reviews you recieved, ignore and block all those users. Their only hobby is to harass random people with Pokémon fanfics here on FF to make us feel bad and uncomfortable. I know two of them sounded like they wanted to warn you about those bullies, but they should've written you a PM instead of adding the warning message in a review; that's how professionals would do. If I ever see a storystealer of a fic I follow and read, I alert the original author in a PM.
I was once a target myself for Farla and other bullies with a old PKMN fanfic that I ended up deleting years ago, but I feel more confident with my new PKMN fanfic.
1/21 c1 1SunMoon6798
Hey, welcome. So look a warning given you are writing a Pokemon story. Farla, St Elmo's Fire, Talarc, Spencer841, AshxSelene Writer, fanficmanager816, seeldewgong, and a few others are known bullies on this site who review only to destroy stories and promote drama.

They will push their believes down your throat, demand you redo your story to fit their wants and no, they are the super minority and hated by the fandom. They also tend to post pms publicly so responding to them is ill advised.

They start off with a disclaimer about honestly thinking it would help. It doesn't they want you to be screwed over as they complain about trival nonsense that got their panties in a twist.

They think Pokemon is slavery. That you should capitalize the way they want, fyi Pokemon names are not species names (but actual names according to game freak) and that's been officially recongized in modern English. So yes it's correct to capitalize Pikachu for instance. Oh, and they give out false dialogue formatting (It's "Hello," She said dialogue is a seperate sentence). Spend time putting out a text block of non issues that are not going to help you. Don't get me started on Arceus.

What's worse is they all try to pass it off as them being critics in their reviews. Any review with it in the begining should be ignored if you get it.

Oh and if they say that they are being bullied. Know that they are lying as they been doing it too this fandom for years now and are just pissed that a group are working to stop it. The admins told them to knock it off.

If that's not enough on my profile is proof its utter nonsense. oh and if there is a guest reviewer titled "Take Down Hybrid" know that is's actually Handle Criticism Maturely the biggest of all of Farla's supporters and an utter troll who only doing this shit because Hybrid gave her criticism. The girls gone off the deep end and into complete insanity.

Best to remove it.

Speaking of them they had twice agreed to stop but don't. Even after being told to stop by the admins, their friends, and even random strangers. Right now they are somehow convinced that Hybrid, a woman, is a man.

If they claim they have proof don't. Its all utter nonsense land they been told by the admins to take it down.

As for the users you need to block and how, you block by heading to heading too the toolbar were you posted a story. Click on account and you should see the option to block users. Then add their id numbers,

64005

5373533

4416847

1357526

6889405

6055643

5313772

Also as a last warning seeldewgong sends a guest review claiming we are sockpuppets. To not check out their profile it's bugged. They also promote a link to something that was both discredited by the admins and told to be removed by the posters.
1/21 c1 13Blades of Chance
I f*CKING warned you about Farla.

[[You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard]

Pokemon names are not species names. Game Freak has made clear for years now. Farla is lying.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. ]

Dialogue is written as (Hello," She said) Farla is lying about it.

[good sign when the very first line of your fic has a mistake in it. You need to proofread better.
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This is complete bully crap.

[numbers with letters.
]

Not a thing.

[This doesn't seem complete as a first chapter]

This is complete bullshit. Farla lying out there was like I tried to warn you
1/21 c1 147Farla
[Cindy was only when her father died. ]

Really not a good sign when the very first line of your fic has a mistake in it. You need to proofread better.

Write out numbers with letters.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

This doesn't seem complete as a first chapter. You introduce elements but don't complete a thought – she's Cinderella, but her life is significantly better than real Cinderella in that her name just happens to be that and all her evil family does is make her do a lot of chores, instead of her needing to sleep by the kitchen fire to not freeze, not being allowed to even wash the soot off, and then given a mocking nickname as a result. She's evilly forced into the forest to do chores with no pokemon, but also that goes fine, so it doesn't sound like she really did need one.

[Now that she was closer, Cindy could see that his leg had been caught in some sort of net trap. Cindy had to clamp her hands into fists to release the rush of anger the net caused her. ]

Plus this would suggest her family is doing things to keep wild pokemon away, which, given she's the only one in the area, would actually indicate they're trying to keep her safe. Clearly there's some secret nefarious reason for all this, but just, so far her family is being just regular mean and not fairy tale super mean. Nothing changes about her situation, not even when she encounters and helps the joltik. There's no "and then a bad thing happens as a result" that should be there to end the first chapter, like one of her family members seeing her do this and getting mad at her.

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