10/7 c4 Guest
Can't wait to read the next chapter of this story. Keep it up.

9/27 c4 Agent Frank
As always, it was great reading this.

9/8 c4 Doval Sabino
Bulma is a Genius, so make her study space e gravity Magic, creating a realmente or pocket space for training similar to the Kame lockout.
Goku more Magic training in elementos, ligthining in particular tô make the Nimbus a true Nimbus cloud, like jin mori.
Caulifa and chichi train whith master Kame, because we need Gohan as he is the 1 Demi-Sayan and hás the biggest potencial and the other need training.

9/2 c4 p6lishb6kser
It's really enjoyable, I'd love to read more so I'll follow

8/20 c4 1grvest
Sorry about your keyboard that'sreally bad luck. I've had a blackwidow 2012 since 2012 and the only problem is that I lost the little metal strip that goes on the bottom of the space bar so I have to hit just about dead center.

This is fucking great. For the months till the red ribbon arc you could just do char dev. You still have the whole breaking the truth of saiyans to kefla and the goku v roshi rematch to do.

8/11 c4 Zetsumei
Fun stuff here throwing the dynamics for a loop; have fun figuring out what you want the group to do in the Gap months before the Red Ribbon army stuff starts up. Though at this point That army's going to end up a cakewalk. Curious if you'd go the same way with the fallout of everything with the Gero family, or by there being others around Gero might spread the blame or target someone else in theri group. It'd be kinda funny if Gero thought Bulma or Kefla was to blame for unintentionally killing his son and the others accessories to it. Especially Bulma just due to that whole 'all super-genius scientists know where each-other's secret labs are' thing from the Abridged series.

I'll admit to having concerns on a Gundam SEED Fic from you. Not that you haven't proven yourself as a good writer or that I dislike the series...more that I'm one of those who Lived the multi-decade Toxicity the Western Gundam fandom spewed about it, which only seemed to subside with the re-releases of the series that allowed people to see the bile-spewers were talking out of their ass and misconstrruing what happened for a lot of what they condemned (ironically helped by those same assholes trying to evicerate G-Witch in the same ways and no-one having that), and the overwhelming positive reception of the Gundam SEED Freedom movie as the single-most-financially-successful work Sunrise has ever put out; so over time I just got disinterested in Fanfiction for it as I got tired of seeing so many people primally misunderstand the series and slander it out of hand. It reached the point that someone using the Phrase 'Jesus Yamato' with sincerity became one of those Anime-fan red flags for someone missing the point of the work, alongside things like claiming "Light Yagami/Suzaku Kururugi were heroes in the right of their stories", or buying into that "Anime was a Mistake" nonsense; since most of the things Kira did that he got flack for were not uncommon to Gundam Protagonists in the rest of the franchise so it never made much sense to single him out for ridicule in comparison to characters whose stories had been shown to age far more poorly (I.E. the recontextualization of UC Gundam being under the thumb of an illegitimate oppressive government and the Various conflicts in it all being rebellions against Tyranny the UC protagonists keep causing to fail as they never realize the greater-setting context so the Earth Federation's systemic oppression ends up lasting over a thousand years).
Not that the Cosmic Era timeline doesn't have flaws (pacing is certainly one of them I won't argue that much with), but a LOT of People didn't seem to pay attention to what the series was doing and kept making up slander about it. Such as claiming Kira's abilities coming out of nowhere...despite him being a technologies/Engineering student that allowed him to fix the Strike's OS while ZAFT-Stolen Gundams are working without such to make them fully operational to the same degree, even without counting everything Coordinator-related where his largest hindrance in the early-series is experience he gains through the battles he survives and the SEED series doing a lot to explain his abilities. Or people complaining about how emotional he is...despite numerous gundam protagonists being visibly emotional themselves or dealing with some form of deep-seated trauma and the most common criticisms are equally if not more applicable to Amuro Ray or Kamille Bidan. or people not catching Lacus was a diplomat and politician that just happened to have singing as a talent and them misconstruing her talent as her sole job...though that probably not helped by the Meer subplot in Destiny.
Which only got worse in the wake of Youtubers making bad faith arguments over the series for the sake of monetizable views.
And I just got plain sick of hearing it after the Death of the SEED Series' head writer Chiaki Morisawa in 2016 from an illness she was suffering, with her Husband Mitsuo Fukada (SEED's head Director, also known for the Series "Cross Ange Rondo of Angels and Dragons", "Gear Fighter Dendoh", "Future GPX Cyber Formula" and the currently-running "Grendizer U") finally convincing Sunrise Execs to dig out the Script for Seed Freedom that Morisawa had completed all the way back in 2006 to get it done in her memory.
And while there's certainly legitimate story critiques one can have with SEED and SEED Destiny to poke at and correct in fanfiction (ESPECIALLY SEED Destiny thanks to the afore-mentioned Morisawa falling ill during its development, leaving it to writers who were not up to the task and were or became known for bad work; among them being writer Hiroyuki Yoshino who was a major influence in screwing over the entire Story of Code Geass in both original and movie canon's), SEED's biggest issues were always tied into how Sunrise kept screwing development of the series over because they had no faith in it (A similar case would later happen with Code Geass as well); either not giving them a proper budget or animation staff (this was during the changeover to digital animation from Traditional,and everyone Competent at the new tech had been poached to work on Yoshiyuki Tomino's latest diaster known as "Overman King Gainer", and then the MS IGLOO projects and EVOLVE, and after that the Zeta compilation movies) which required the series get their eventual Remaster editions in the 2010's to correct that mistake; making them put critical need-to-know information to understanding that series in Side-material thanks to on-high mandates about needing tie-in's thanks to Sunrise's then-current marketting schemes (Specifically the Gundam SEED Astray manga which showcases Astray's protagonist Lowe Guile intersecting with the Seed Main story to Save Lacus Clyne and Kira Yamato from near-death incidents; the later of which being HOW Kira survived the destruction of the Strike Gundam as Lowe Pulled him out of it and got him immediate medical attention before he got transported up to the PLANTS where he would eventually wake up in Lacus' Care...and that's kind-of a big one considering the 'main character shields' criticisms the show experiences despite gundam protagonists having survived such incidents before) which is something that also screwed over Gundam Wing (Wing's first episode is actually episode 6 of the story as it actually started in a prequel manga) and Code Geass (the picture and Audio drama's to that show contain canon information the show itself didn't have time for that informed the story's direction; one of several key pieces of missing information found in that side content being that Suzaku Murdered his father months before the war that led to Japan being conquered and that murder prevented the nation from Gaining foreign allies that would've prevented the nation being enslaved); or the completely unnecessary inclusion of elements of UC Gundam's newtype Psychic powers nonsense even if such was done with Tomino's approval and suggestion as it's not something that was explained or validated in the series until the SEED Freedom movie 22 years after the fact. SEED was planned out as a soft modernized reboot of UC gundam, to Zig where the showcased-over-time Flaws of UC Gundam Zagged (it's been shown over time that every AU timeline gundam series with Exception to Age has itself founded upon critiques of the flaws/failings of the UC timeline), and it mostly succeeded in that by not Repeating (most of) the UC timeline's mistakes, even if the Cosmic Era has an assortment of it's own. but taken from the prespective that SEED deliberately does narrative homages to Western scifi works (Morisawa and Fukada were HUGE fans of Star wars and TOS/TNG Era Star Trek) there's a lot more of merit than the works were even given credit for for a LONG time.
I'm not a member of your patreon so I don't know what you're doing with your SEED fic at all one way or the other; but if you've not viewed the series from that perspective of it's creators...well, please take the time to consider the arc of Shinn Asuka acting in parallel to that of Anakin Skywalker's, with Athrun serving as the Obi-Wan Expy in that tale (though Athrun IS the protagonist of Destiny when one thinks about it since he is the viewpoint character for a LOT of it), and it makes a lot more sense than people give it credit for in Shinn supposed to be in the wrong to inform him eventually going full bad guy for the back-half of the series...as Shinn was intended as that series tritagonist from the start, only for the Show's replacement writers to seriously botch the relation of that story by not wanting to commit to it beyond Shinn being obstinant and not wanting to let go of his anger and Grief that he inflicts on and blames the wrong people for. With Durandal acting as a Palpatine Expy being nefarious in his plans in the background and whispering what Shinn wants to hear to get him FAITHfully on his side so he wouldn't consider what else is being done, and the show makes a LOT more sense with its narrative direction despite its faults. And Pulling back from that, Kira himself acts as a Luke Skywalker expy in how he learns how to fight despite being in an effective backwater before the war ended up on his Doorstep, and the star trek homage comes into play with the ship naval combat SEED regularly featured and the dynamic Murrue Natarle and Mu held being equivellent to that of the Kirk-McCoy-Spock dynamic of TOS even if their characterization is not necessarily the exact same. It's actually surprisingly how many don't see or consider that, which despite this being the wrong place to post about it since...this is on your Dragonball fanfic with just an AN comment about a to-publicly-debut-in-the-future fic, I just felt I had to share.

8/12 c3 TheWateringWizard
What an awesome tournament so far ! Love it

8/5 c4 yoto
bon chapitre