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4/21 c20 3j0k3
I like your premise, as far as this subject matter is likeable. It's definitely not a common plot in this fandom. However, your characters seem very flat. Not just Shelagh, for who it could be part of her character's state of mind. It reads almost clinically, especially the earlier chapters. There's no depth. Especially considering Patrick's history, the way Shelagh acted around him, the way everyone (except Ursula) took care of Cynthia, the characters seem unlike themselves. They don't react the way you expect them to react.

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