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2/4 c1 76Tower of Babel
It has promise, but you really need to work on your punctuation and grammar. Also, when you're expressing POV, instead of actually saying POV of a particular character, why not just put a line in between paragraphs for the POV. It would be much easier to read. Overall, I liked your story.

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