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2/9/2020 c1 36Omnitrix 12
I like the concept, but it feels like you need to develop it more. It would feel much more real and significant if there were more chemistry; not just romance between Fox and Krystal, but overall. Essentially you have enough information about the characters, but nothing much else to speak of. Also more detail about how they are adjusting to the new team (e.g. Krystal's training, Falco's demeanor, Fox keeping them coordinated) would help too. You have great possibilities, but you need to follow through on them.

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