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3h c44 Guest
Waiting for unification wars
19h c39 Mason Rupp
Why is Jon’s actual name Jaehaerys Stark? It makes no sense that he wouldn’t have the Targaryen name. He’s trueborn iirc so he’d be a Targaryen. If he’s a stark because Robert legitimized him, then even if he’s a bastard, he’d still be legitimized as a Targaryen
11/7 c15 Donald Duckk
"where it belonged" lol mf reallt thought he have a chance
11/2 c44 Redlegiggy
One of my favorite stories now. there is a great depth with character development and you paint a good picture with your words. some few grammatical and content mistakes, but that is what editors do anyway. not enough to take anything away from the story you are telling. excellent work, i do hope it continues.
10/30 c43 Guest
I feel like the author is getting excited and trying to rush the story
10/30 c44 Agent Frank
I caught up at the worst time, the story has been leading to this war for so long. I love this story; I'm looking forward to the chaos Robb and especially Jon cause in this war
10/30 c43 Agent Frank
Another excellent chapter. I like what you've done with Mace.
10/29 c40 Agent Frank
Rereading and catching up to all of the new content that you've added over the years has been incredible. This is one of the best ASOIF stories on this site and it's impressive that you've managed to keep the intrigue despite having so many powerful characters on one side.
10/20 c41 OPPRESSOR OF NIGGERS
Long "stories" like this have a tendency of being shit.
10/17 c43 SpiceyBoy
Just caught up, loving the story. Can't wait for the next update!
10/16 c30 2Daemius
A medium with poor thermal conductivity is as difficult to heat as it is difficult to cool down, generally remaining hot for longer periods of time. "Valyrian-Beskar"'s thermal properties would make it a great shield against energy weapons, as is the Star Wars canon, because momentary contact with plasma bolts or even lightsaber strikes would fail to heat it up and any thermal load would almost immidiately be dissipated in the surrouding atmosphere, though prolonged contact (focused laser beam or lightsaber) should eventually be able to damage it. The metal's unique thermal properties might better be attributed to some force-infused hocus-pocus though because physics don't agree. Sorry if I come off too nitpicky, but it's only because I truly enjoy this fic.
10/14 c41 ItsAMeReviewer
I believe that the reviewer above me was referring to the previous chapter, at least from the review's content. And even though I might agree with him partially, I would hope that he/she/they continue with the story, just like I am...
10/14 c41 1BattlemageABK
I can't believe that such a great story gets ruined after so much reading.

Throughout the story, we learn how Ned Stark is learning how to actually use his brain, along with his brawn, but conveniently, he forgets both in the time of need.

Lightsabers and the force become easily overcome just because 'plot convenience'.

All throughout, as you built up the 'war' before the Others war, I was hoping, maybe some new players, Illyrio, Varys, Doran or someone would make a play, maybe even Stannis with Melisandre. But conveniently, all alliances are forgotten, Starks, who have the support of North, some Riverlands, some Vale, Dorne, much of the Reach, don't even have enough men to fight or even run away and we get this terrible repeat of canon for no reason.

And, the game changers, namely Nox, Jon or even Robb are so far away, because why not. Winter the wolf is not there, the other apprentices are not there, when actually they were supposed to be in Kings Landing, but conveniently, they zoomed back to Winterfell or whatever (so ironic, considering how Nox keeps lamenting about the slowness of travel).

Honestly, with the amount of character development Ned got, and how much he had to suffer with Catelyn, Rickon and all, I was rooting for him, but midway through this chapter, I just want him to be finished like canon, because all that development just vanished, and he became the same dumb Ned Stark of canon.

I would accuse you of being afraid of moving away from canon, but you moved away when you decided on adding a Sith, so I don't know why you would have things repeat for no reason.

Well, giving the story another chance because I've liked it a lot till now, but lets see...
10/14 c44 Guest
With taking Astapor, I hope Daenerys secures her rule rather than simply leaves it and moves on. Nox would probably give this advice as a Sith needs to secure their powerbase and command in their territories and not just conquer. I have a feeling the High Sparrow or something could be a Jedi or at least a force sensitive who found and gained access to a Jedi Holocron with a Jedi's teachings to hate the Sith. I think Nox's long term plan is not the throne but being a somewhat power behind it with Jon's reverence to his Master's wisdom and advice. Nox's plan is to somewhat rule from behind the scenes as he places Sith everywhere in key points of Governments and lordships in Planetos and with him being the wise master, all the rulers, Jon, Daenerys, Joy, Gendry, Robb etc. shall revere their teacher and thus heed him as Nox succeeds in establishing the Sith as the dominant power and in long term (after his death) and becoming a Holocron program or Sith Spirit, unite the Sith controlled territories to form a new Planetos (Sith) Empire. The Iron Bank could support it depending on them maintaining financial power over the people as well as having heavily deep investments into the bank and having their proteges becoming Sith. Sam Tarly and the others scientific minds would make the foundations of tech.
10/12 c1 1Menaphite
Hey, I finished binging this yesterday and have been thinking about some constructive criticism / things not adding up. It's revealed the Nox immediately knew Jon wasn't Ned's son yet there was all this pussy footing around with the Lannister children with a plethora of supporting evidence... Yet Nox didn't get it. I know this was to build conflict and get the story going but it's really sloppy and not a great method. There are also scenes that seem out of place, like that random one with Nes hiring a whore. Not only does this seem OoC, but I'm not really sure what the point was? Unless it's going to come up again later. Another thing that is interesting is the talk of force power levels, like there's been times Nox has stated that Jon is going to surpass Nox but that seems really unlikely with everything you have presented us. I'm also a little confused how Nox didn't pick up on Baelish / monitor him more. Ultimately, I know most of this is to keep the plot going and have some sort of conflict but at the same time it feels like there is a flip flop between nox being OP and not OP when plot calls for it

All that being said, I love this story and it's well done, I'm looking forward to Nox going crazy
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