for Song of A Northern Sorcerer11/30/2020 c11 Guest
Will nox get he's own sigil?
Will nox get he's own sigil?
11/23/2020 c11 E
I like how you're pulling in more of Legends Force lore. Force Storm is an absolutely absurdly powerful ability, especially in the hands of someone as powerful as the Reborn Emperor Palpatine. I like how Nox is learning some of that through experience. Obviously, he's not quite Reborn Emperor level as he was even more powerful (canonically) than Vitiate, who was a God in all but name. But none the less, I like it when a main character learns.
Some criticism: lightsaber styles are near-useless practically applied to normal swords. Almost every single style is based around leveraging the all-sided blade of a lightsaber. Normal weapons only have one or two ways they can cut into someone, and as such most of the forms are way less useful as applied to such a weapon. Not a huge criticism, but just thought I should point it out. Also, please for the live of God, do not make Jon the Chosen One. They way he was spoken of between Nox and the Archon near the end was very reminiscent of how Maul and Obiwan spoke of Luke in Rebels, right before Disney went full retard and said Luke was the Chosen One. Which makes Anakin's character lose all its value. I'm straight up dipping out of this story if some random kid on a meaningless planet is more powerful than a child of the Force itself. I'm fine with him being Azhor Ahai, as that's a destiny that effects only Planetos and doesn't overwrite pre-established characters, but I'm gonna be real mad if Jon somehow replaces Anakin and balances the Force.
I like how you're pulling in more of Legends Force lore. Force Storm is an absolutely absurdly powerful ability, especially in the hands of someone as powerful as the Reborn Emperor Palpatine. I like how Nox is learning some of that through experience. Obviously, he's not quite Reborn Emperor level as he was even more powerful (canonically) than Vitiate, who was a God in all but name. But none the less, I like it when a main character learns.
Some criticism: lightsaber styles are near-useless practically applied to normal swords. Almost every single style is based around leveraging the all-sided blade of a lightsaber. Normal weapons only have one or two ways they can cut into someone, and as such most of the forms are way less useful as applied to such a weapon. Not a huge criticism, but just thought I should point it out. Also, please for the live of God, do not make Jon the Chosen One. They way he was spoken of between Nox and the Archon near the end was very reminiscent of how Maul and Obiwan spoke of Luke in Rebels, right before Disney went full retard and said Luke was the Chosen One. Which makes Anakin's character lose all its value. I'm straight up dipping out of this story if some random kid on a meaningless planet is more powerful than a child of the Force itself. I'm fine with him being Azhor Ahai, as that's a destiny that effects only Planetos and doesn't overwrite pre-established characters, but I'm gonna be real mad if Jon somehow replaces Anakin and balances the Force.
11/21/2020 c11 Guest
I become more and more intrigued with each chapter.
Enjoying your work.
I become more and more intrigued with each chapter.
Enjoying your work.
11/19/2020 c11 s.k.f.f.f
wow, that was an amazing trip, I can't wait for the return, those peeps will be stuff of legends. and hopefully jon grows out of his naivety .
wow, that was an amazing trip, I can't wait for the return, those peeps will be stuff of legends. and hopefully jon grows out of his naivety .
11/15/2020 c4 Bridd
Wow what a retarded moral compass, supposedly he doesn’t tolerate rape because of what happened to his mom but his mom was also enslaved and brutally murdered, but those two are actually fine soooooooo, rape is bad? I didn’t know dude, have being having my surprise sex my whole life it would seem its the wrong path. In seriousness where the fuck is his sith title of rapist (convoluted) slayer, I bet he compromised alright for all atrocities the empire spilled, rape included, the whole tone of the chapter was like seeing a man smelling his own fart but own well, at least with that there no more talks of rape yeah? Nobody is dumb enough to rape some kms from for he’s no sith, he’s the rape police.
Wow what a retarded moral compass, supposedly he doesn’t tolerate rape because of what happened to his mom but his mom was also enslaved and brutally murdered, but those two are actually fine soooooooo, rape is bad? I didn’t know dude, have being having my surprise sex my whole life it would seem its the wrong path. In seriousness where the fuck is his sith title of rapist (convoluted) slayer, I bet he compromised alright for all atrocities the empire spilled, rape included, the whole tone of the chapter was like seeing a man smelling his own fart but own well, at least with that there no more talks of rape yeah? Nobody is dumb enough to rape some kms from for he’s no sith, he’s the rape police.
11/15/2020 c2 Bridd
Well, here we are with another blind dude that’s not blind, haaa, really man? Why bother with, heyhey I got no eye, its all it’s for at this point, not only that it makes little sense he could have gotten some implanted eyes, could he not? Instead of using the force for every little thing to “see” at all times just like if you lose an arm you don’t have to use the force to fight with lightsabers because you get a fake arm, if he could not get news eyes I would understand but this is just one of those I felt like it moments, dudes is a fighter and every inch of attention counts in the fight against an equal or superior foe but he’s gotta waste a bit of it seeing with the force. Granted if in the Star Wars universe there’s no eye implants then the point is invalid.
Well, here we are with another blind dude that’s not blind, haaa, really man? Why bother with, heyhey I got no eye, its all it’s for at this point, not only that it makes little sense he could have gotten some implanted eyes, could he not? Instead of using the force for every little thing to “see” at all times just like if you lose an arm you don’t have to use the force to fight with lightsabers because you get a fake arm, if he could not get news eyes I would understand but this is just one of those I felt like it moments, dudes is a fighter and every inch of attention counts in the fight against an equal or superior foe but he’s gotta waste a bit of it seeing with the force. Granted if in the Star Wars universe there’s no eye implants then the point is invalid.
11/15/2020 c11 
1Alendi
I am fully expecting Sarella to go to Winterfell. Nox doesn't discriminate based on sex so she would definitely want to learn from him. I don't think Nox would refuse. Not only is she smart but also resourceful. With North and Dorne in future alliance it makes all sense to have her there. Also Oberyn loves his daughters and he would certainly ask Nox to accept her and he made a great impression on the sith.
Another person I am waiting for is Marwyn. I think it would make a lot of sense for him to come to Winterfell.
Did Jon take any sword for himself except the short sword? Balerion's blade is available and it would be cool if Jon got it.
1AlendiI am fully expecting Sarella to go to Winterfell. Nox doesn't discriminate based on sex so she would definitely want to learn from him. I don't think Nox would refuse. Not only is she smart but also resourceful. With North and Dorne in future alliance it makes all sense to have her there. Also Oberyn loves his daughters and he would certainly ask Nox to accept her and he made a great impression on the sith.
Another person I am waiting for is Marwyn. I think it would make a lot of sense for him to come to Winterfell.
Did Jon take any sword for himself except the short sword? Balerion's blade is available and it would be cool if Jon got it.
11/14/2020 c11 20ProfessorPedant
Just read through all at once. I have enjoyed the story. I like that you give several of the ASOIAF characters powers/skills of their own, acknowledging their role in the story. I like how you are writing the extra pov characters.
I look forward to seeing Nox in Kings landing.
Thanks for sharing with us.
20ProfessorPedantJust read through all at once. I have enjoyed the story. I like that you give several of the ASOIAF characters powers/skills of their own, acknowledging their role in the story. I like how you are writing the extra pov characters.
I look forward to seeing Nox in Kings landing.
Thanks for sharing with us.
11/14/2020 c11 10MonsieurL.A
Well well well, that was interesting to say the least.
I urge you not to make Valyrian steel common, at least not before a long time. The North is already very powerful thanks to Nox and his acolytes, giving valyrian steel weapons and armors to the Starks and some noble families is good enough. Even though technically, Nox is richer than the Lannisters thanks to all of his Valyrian steel (Tywin tried to buy Heartsbane a million gold dragons I think, so that says a lot about the value of his new possessions ), he is not stupid enough to trade it for gold, so the North is still not as "rich" as the West and definitely not as rich as the Reach (yet).
Now Westeros' true power is politics, and right now it is the only true weapon any of the southern lords could use to counter Nox. I believe it is time for Jon to be initiated to the Game considering the incredible amount of value he just gained with his power and his more than likely future legitimization. (BTW, don't make Jon a Stark, it could cause problems between his great grand children and Robb's great grandchildren in the future for exemple. Nox knowing how power can corrupt will probably warn him about that, I believe it would be better if he founded his own house and renounced any possible claim he or his children might have for Winterfell. I vote WhiteFyre :p )
Jon must accept the fact that he is now one of the most covoted young men in the realm, and I assume Oberyn will help him strenghtening himself against ladies.
Now I wonder if the Tyrells went with the idea of fostering Sansa, and I wonder what's gonna be the nobles' plans for Robb, Bran and Arya. Ned will have to be extremely careful.
Since Nox spoke with Lemore, I assume Aegon Blackfyre will be part of that story too, maybe he could obtain some powers through the warlocks of Qarth, That would make him a very dangerous and interesting opponent. I really want to see Doran, Oberyn, Obara and Arianne talk about Jon, even though she is I think 3 years older than him.
Since Oberyn is Force sensitive, will Nox train some of his bastards ?
Since Gerion is probably Force sensitive, will Nox train Joy Hill ?
Now if I understand the chronology of your story, Jon is thirteen, which means that the events of ASOIF will start next year. Though I wonder if it's not too soon, but now that Jon is that powerful, he should be able to obtain the title of Sith Warrior in the same amount of time than we did in SWTOR. I assume that in order to do so, Nox will send him across the seven kingdoms and beyond the wall to complete many missions.
I also suppose that Nox will advise Ned to tell Jon about his mother, otherwise he might learn it through a force vision or worse, he could summon Lyanna's ghost. If Ned tells him, Jon will accept it with more ease and will probably tell Robb.
I wonder what Tywin and Tyrion will do with the amount of informations they gathered, we haven't heard of them in a long time.
I imagine Varys and Littlefinger plans changed with all of this, can't wait to know what they have planned.
I also wonder what will be Melissandre's opinion of Nox.
Also, since Nox is now officially a noble, what is his sigil and his house's words ?
I can't imagine that Nox came back from Valyria without some baby firewyrms, they should be interesting to study and raise.
Also in order for Jon to "prove" to Oberyn that he cares a lot about his siblings, I can perfectly imagine him making toys out of dragonbone for Rickon.
Is Maggy the Frog's prophecy to Cersei different with Nox in the game ? That would be interesting to see if she is wary of him because of that.
Can't wait for the next chapter, this is definitely one of the best fictions I've read so far. And your writing style is improving, even though you still make some repetitions and sometimes give to much description.
Keep up, and don't let us down ;)
10MonsieurL.AWell well well, that was interesting to say the least.
I urge you not to make Valyrian steel common, at least not before a long time. The North is already very powerful thanks to Nox and his acolytes, giving valyrian steel weapons and armors to the Starks and some noble families is good enough. Even though technically, Nox is richer than the Lannisters thanks to all of his Valyrian steel (Tywin tried to buy Heartsbane a million gold dragons I think, so that says a lot about the value of his new possessions ), he is not stupid enough to trade it for gold, so the North is still not as "rich" as the West and definitely not as rich as the Reach (yet).
Now Westeros' true power is politics, and right now it is the only true weapon any of the southern lords could use to counter Nox. I believe it is time for Jon to be initiated to the Game considering the incredible amount of value he just gained with his power and his more than likely future legitimization. (BTW, don't make Jon a Stark, it could cause problems between his great grand children and Robb's great grandchildren in the future for exemple. Nox knowing how power can corrupt will probably warn him about that, I believe it would be better if he founded his own house and renounced any possible claim he or his children might have for Winterfell. I vote WhiteFyre :p )
Jon must accept the fact that he is now one of the most covoted young men in the realm, and I assume Oberyn will help him strenghtening himself against ladies.
Now I wonder if the Tyrells went with the idea of fostering Sansa, and I wonder what's gonna be the nobles' plans for Robb, Bran and Arya. Ned will have to be extremely careful.
Since Nox spoke with Lemore, I assume Aegon Blackfyre will be part of that story too, maybe he could obtain some powers through the warlocks of Qarth, That would make him a very dangerous and interesting opponent. I really want to see Doran, Oberyn, Obara and Arianne talk about Jon, even though she is I think 3 years older than him.
Since Oberyn is Force sensitive, will Nox train some of his bastards ?
Since Gerion is probably Force sensitive, will Nox train Joy Hill ?
Now if I understand the chronology of your story, Jon is thirteen, which means that the events of ASOIF will start next year. Though I wonder if it's not too soon, but now that Jon is that powerful, he should be able to obtain the title of Sith Warrior in the same amount of time than we did in SWTOR. I assume that in order to do so, Nox will send him across the seven kingdoms and beyond the wall to complete many missions.
I also suppose that Nox will advise Ned to tell Jon about his mother, otherwise he might learn it through a force vision or worse, he could summon Lyanna's ghost. If Ned tells him, Jon will accept it with more ease and will probably tell Robb.
I wonder what Tywin and Tyrion will do with the amount of informations they gathered, we haven't heard of them in a long time.
I imagine Varys and Littlefinger plans changed with all of this, can't wait to know what they have planned.
I also wonder what will be Melissandre's opinion of Nox.
Also, since Nox is now officially a noble, what is his sigil and his house's words ?
I can't imagine that Nox came back from Valyria without some baby firewyrms, they should be interesting to study and raise.
Also in order for Jon to "prove" to Oberyn that he cares a lot about his siblings, I can perfectly imagine him making toys out of dragonbone for Rickon.
Is Maggy the Frog's prophecy to Cersei different with Nox in the game ? That would be interesting to see if she is wary of him because of that.
Can't wait for the next chapter, this is definitely one of the best fictions I've read so far. And your writing style is improving, even though you still make some repetitions and sometimes give to much description.
Keep up, and don't let us down ;)