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2/26 c2 9Belmakori
Not a bad start. You want to fluff it out a bit. Give it some more details. For example, other than and elf, what does Mella look like? Same goes for Tana, etc. Also, you could describe the sights and smells of the city, make it come alive, so to speak. You want your reader to feel as if they are apart of the story and not just reading words on a page.
Again, it's a very good start. Keep going.

~Bel

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