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4/27 c5 iwewia
The way this chapter starts with an experience of being able to walk at night after this big change is something that I feel deeply as someone who identifies as a woman and has insomnia. If I did the same as miss Cécile it would definitely be one of the first things in my mind in terms of what I could finally do.

One of the things you do best is tying knots in the King-verse and I love how her victory against Dimples has so many layers of closure - it's honestly poetry! Her sadistic side as well as her fighting abilities were showcased fully even if it wasn't exactly a long fight at all. She channeled the confidence she needed just in time for a quick revenge.

When Dimples said he was "the king of the castle" it was such a subtle foreshadowing of the end of the chapter! Details like these make reading feel so exciting. A new dignified King is born in what is now one of my favorite works from you (how many times have I said that?).
4/7 c5 131jojoDO
HELLLLLZ YESSSSSSSSSSSS!

That was beautiful, illy. It was almost like a... a... a shot of something good in your bloodstream (I swear I'm not a druggie). It was short, quick, just a little BURST... but boy was it just utterly satisfying to experience.

I never doubted King's ability in the fighting department, OR the word department. Her attitude is just too accustomed to this world. She's a tough ass Aries, not one to take even a single lick of verbal shit without having ammo to fire back with. I knew these guys didn't stand a chance against her. That was amazing. The CHERRY on top was that the bouncer just so happened to be the same dickhead that was part of the Jack Posse that night. Whew... utterly... satisfying.

Our girl did it! I'm so happy! The Legend of King begins!
4/7 c4 jojoDO
Whew! That got intense. I was getting a little hot under the collar. I guess things are okay for now, but... this is obviously the prelude to the "Horrible Breakup" (tm)

So first of all... as someone who has a fond memory of eating a boatload of Doritos and vomiting one Thanksgiving... thanks for rekindling that utterly NOT fond memory! x,D

Secondly... boy howdy. That was a fight. But you know what? It felt very much like the King you've pushed us all to believe she is. A super duper Aries, right? Because holy shit did she EXPLODE on Jessica, and then a minute later they were back to girlfriend banter lol. I just... wow. I would never survive an interaction with King. She'd probably make me cry and then say "hey did you want ice in that?"

Lastly, this chapter did a good job of showing just how much King has prepared for this. She's seriously covered all the bases, I think. You made it sound utterly genius, what King is attempting to do, and she has an excuse for everything. I think she's going to nail this. NAIL it.

Let's find out!
4/4 c5 36RobertCop3
You did it! King's origin could not have been told better! I mean, I was expecting that, since she's your bae and all. But this... this was perfect.

There was a minor hitch in her plan, but it turned out for the better. It allowed Cec to show her stuff, AND get some payback, and the subtlety with which the origin of her new name gets explained... that was beautiful.

Another wonderful addition to your ongoing King saga. I'm so glad you finished it sooner rather than later. Well done!
4/1 c4 RobertCop3
Poor Cec... we've all had that bout of puking where we retch up a lot of acid, to the point where we can't breathe without coughing. But whiskey and Doritos... man, that's harsh.

And already I sense hard times ahead. Cec HAS clearly given this a lot of thought (and I love all the little moments throughout reminding us of that), but Jessica can't get behind it. And I loved Cec's moment of righteous anger. I felt for King a lot after that, I really did. Most of us can't relate to being in that situation.

And now, I assume the next chapter is either a job interview or her first day. Either one should be very interesting.
3/29 c3 RobertCop3
Cecile's plan is really taking off now. I love this whole "proto-King" you've got going. So many little quirks to remind us that she's not yet the person we're more familiar with, such as her never being drunk before and trying whiskey for the first time. It reminds me of my own project I'm currently working on.

And in true Cecile fashion, everything is being figured out through trial and error. She seems like she'd be a very "hands-on" learner, anyway. So I love her just diving in and trying out various "guy" things. And... oh, snap! We finally meet the famous Jessica. Was not expecting that. And I gotta give her props... she's dealing with a drunk girlfriend and a blown date better than most people would be. But then again, she DOES get to take advantage of Cec.

Sorry it took me so long to get to this. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
3/29 c4 iwewia
While their day is just beginning, a lot has been brought up between Cécile and Jessica. The soon-to-be King has made various points here that her girlfriend as well as the reader need to keep in mind as the foundation of the fighter she will become. It's emotional, impulsive, analytical. All of that during a normal saturday. Kick ass slice of life is your specialty.

I'm not gonna lie, I am curious about why their breakup was so bad. Jessica disagreeing with the plan isn't something outrageous, she was just worried trying to process the new image, but I'm guessing this very new imagine and new King will trouble them in the future? The King-verse is so in-depth that I just know the details will be dealt with eventually.

Thanks for taking the time to update while we deal with this pandemic and stay safe yourself.
3/15 c2 RobertCop3
Wow, already this has moved into high gear. For one, Cec has probably passed the point of no turning back by walking out on her psyche exam. And for another, we get a great look at the inner workings of her mind as she tries to figure out the logistics of masquerading as a guy. In particular, I liked the leg hair argument and also that she might need to pretend she’s had a blowjob in order to relate to her contemporaries.

It’s coming together for her. Can’t wait to see what else is in store.
3/12 c3 131jojoDO
Ugh. It's no wonder King has what feels like a very lopsided ratio towards women on her bi-ometer. Men have just been such trash to her. I will say this: I felt a very warm spot inside me reading about how her father is the one man she admires most in a world of trash men. That was beautiful ;3

...A KING IS BORN! Haha, you finally got to do your athletic tape thing. I bet it felt SO good to put that in words ;) lol Doritos and porn eh? Very manly things... but, and I apologize for the inapppropriate joke here, but... probably not something you wanna do in unison *sweatdrop* okay I'll just end that there lol

Aw man, Jessica is Horrible Breakup Gal? That makes me sad, because she's so cool and sweet here! T . T great, so that's gonna be a tragic story for another day... that just makes me so sad to think about tho. I'm gonna be thinking about that the whole time they interact ; . ;

I am so onboard with this. I freaking love it!
3/10 c3 iwewia
This analytical approach to the experience of women and men is the foundation of her character. All of what Cécile is experiencing here would become such a major part of her life that simply saying she's "cross dressing" is not enough.

I like the new details about her family life. She cares about family, just not about aunt Maddy's bullshit. It's bittersweet the way she remembers her father.

Well, a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do. It could have been taken such an creepy turn to ask a guy what it feels like so the trusty laptop will help. She goes to the extremes in order to learn which is so fun to read honestly because hardly anyone is super calculating about what they do. Sometimes you read fic and the character just KNOWS everything that needs to be done and...gurl, how?!
3/6 c1 36RobertCop3
Wow.. seems we both have an origin story idea. Though I know you've been cultivating this one for a while now, so I'm pleased to see it finally coming to fruition. And it's your bae, so I knew you'd be nailing it.

As evidenced by the first chapter. You don't need to waste much time, since most of the fandom knows the whole AoF backstory, so we're diving right in. Lots of great moments here between King and Jean and the OCs of the family that people who have read your past work will appreciate. Though maybe I should call her Cecile for now, because I love how you are cognizant of the fact that she is not "King" yet. Can't wait to see where the name comes from... ( :

And Cec is right. Unless you're going to be a math professor, computer programmer, or involved in the space program, all Math after grade school is boring and useless. And then we have that nice little moment that gets the wheels turning.

And Kudos for doing so much research. For my current project, I'm doing only a compulsory once-over on the foster care system in our country, and child welfare, and juvenile courts and such. You are definitely humbling me.

Can't wait to read more...
3/2 c2 iwewia
This one goes super in-depth! It has all of the hard work Cécile had to do that we usually don't stop to think about. She puts her body under a magnifying glass to sort it out. It's how dedicated she is and how much she loves Jean.

The way SNK reveals her secret in the sprites and losing animations is...distasteful. Then again, I have no experience making video-games so they probably had something else in mind, like, "no one cares about fighting games' stories so we have to show it clearly visually"?

It's funny how it seems like I know King more than I know myself. Your dedication to the character in every single detail is so good that I almost feel like I could shake her hand in real life and order a drink. Your writing is amazing!
3/2 c2 131jojoDO
Lots of fun stuff in this one. First off, trying to pronounce the words was hilarious. Secondly... the athletic tap. Hahahaha... ah, illy, I knew that one was coming. You've been dying to do that one for a very, very long time. So many times I've heard your passionate criticisms about King and her pink bra. Finally this is your chance to make amends! xD

Bruce Willis is definitely good manly research. And lastly... oh god. CH3, King visits Pornhub XD if that even existed yet. I dunno. She could probably rent some X rated movies. I'm sure you can think up some hilariously dirty titles :D

CH3 could be REEEEEALY interesting. I so want to see what crazy research King does next O _ O (the porn LOOOL)
2/27 c1 jojoDO
Amazing. Think about how long King has been your gal, how long you've been writing her, doing artwork of her, campaigning for aspects of her to be made canon... and now look at this. Even today, you're treading new ground.

I've always thought you've had a wondrous and quirky King, and now... we get to see where she came from! Amazing! This is going to be so fun :D

I want to get one main point across in this review... I admire you SO MUCH for the care you put into this. Your notes say you spent hours researching pediatric illnesses! But I bet that's just nail in an entire board. I wouldn't be surprised if you watched Just One of the Guys five times to prepare for this story. You put so much effort and research into your writing, and I admire you for it.

I cannot wait for this arc. Seriously. As King once famously said... "this will be great!" xD
2/25 c1 Decero
Nice! Muay Thai is fun sport, definitely going to have my kids train when they're a little older.
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