for A Second Chance9/30/2022 c10 RandomGuest
I forgot Stass Allie and Adi Gallia are related. I always thought they were the same person LOL XD up until I read this chapter I realized, "Crap I thought they were the same person, just had their name changed." I love how I just misunderstood 80% of star wars lore XD
Kudos, this fic is good.
I forgot Stass Allie and Adi Gallia are related. I always thought they were the same person LOL XD up until I read this chapter I realized, "Crap I thought they were the same person, just had their name changed." I love how I just misunderstood 80% of star wars lore XD
Kudos, this fic is good.
9/26/2022 c12 
11Katla1
Urrrrrg YAS! My favourite angst trip has been updated! What a treat! As usual I loved every second. This is one of those stories I would BUY if I could. Great chapter! So excited for more! I will follow this my whole life of that’s what I need to do. Thanks for posting.
11Katla1Urrrrrg YAS! My favourite angst trip has been updated! What a treat! As usual I loved every second. This is one of those stories I would BUY if I could. Great chapter! So excited for more! I will follow this my whole life of that’s what I need to do. Thanks for posting.
9/25/2022 c12 mark.lyons.3682
“Gave in” to temptation, not gave “into temptation”
Wow! You’re rounding the corner with this excellence! This chapter was a GREAT continuation.
I got sidetracked by first names thrice during this chapter: when you mention Ashoka and each healer by their other names. I figured it out pretty quickly, but it was an interruption to my enjoyment each time. Maybe I wasn’t focused enough? I don’t know. Notice what others say.
Keep up the magnificent work! Love Dad
“Gave in” to temptation, not gave “into temptation”
Wow! You’re rounding the corner with this excellence! This chapter was a GREAT continuation.
I got sidetracked by first names thrice during this chapter: when you mention Ashoka and each healer by their other names. I figured it out pretty quickly, but it was an interruption to my enjoyment each time. Maybe I wasn’t focused enough? I don’t know. Notice what others say.
Keep up the magnificent work! Love Dad
9/25/2022 c12 17DS2010
Get the medical attention everyone needs especially Obi-Wan.
I look forward to see how Anakin react to fixing the bonds with Obi-Wan and Ahsoka
17DS2010Get the medical attention everyone needs especially Obi-Wan.
I look forward to see how Anakin react to fixing the bonds with Obi-Wan and Ahsoka
8/15/2022 c11 5MurdockianQueen
Ayiii... it's been a while since I've been able to comment like this, but I want you to know that this is so well written that it makes me emotionally unstable.
I'm also banking on the fact that as the healing happens the writing will still be amazing, but in a way that heals all the wounds I've ever had in my life and that star wars has ever had.
like, I'm not joking when I say that I adore this last chapter particularly. It hurts my soul because the pain is tangible that Vader and Anakin has felt and feels, that's still fresh and stinging... I also am really looking forward to what is hopefully a change in Barriss' story, and Ashoka's at the same timepoor Ashoka deserves to not be ratted by her literal best friend. You write the turbulent teen really well, and of course, Vader is SO WELL DONE.
My favorite thing though is the fact that (even though he closed it when he saw Barriss) Anakin has kept his bond open with Obi-Wan this whole entire time, basically. I can already feel the healing that is going to be happening in their relationship and IM DYING OVER IT.
So I'm excited! Great work, I have no critiques except I'm gonna die if the next one doesn't come out soon and I don't get some comfort here lololol
Hype to the max
-Queen
5MurdockianQueenAyiii... it's been a while since I've been able to comment like this, but I want you to know that this is so well written that it makes me emotionally unstable.
I'm also banking on the fact that as the healing happens the writing will still be amazing, but in a way that heals all the wounds I've ever had in my life and that star wars has ever had.
like, I'm not joking when I say that I adore this last chapter particularly. It hurts my soul because the pain is tangible that Vader and Anakin has felt and feels, that's still fresh and stinging... I also am really looking forward to what is hopefully a change in Barriss' story, and Ashoka's at the same timepoor Ashoka deserves to not be ratted by her literal best friend. You write the turbulent teen really well, and of course, Vader is SO WELL DONE.
My favorite thing though is the fact that (even though he closed it when he saw Barriss) Anakin has kept his bond open with Obi-Wan this whole entire time, basically. I can already feel the healing that is going to be happening in their relationship and IM DYING OVER IT.
So I'm excited! Great work, I have no critiques except I'm gonna die if the next one doesn't come out soon and I don't get some comfort here lololol
Hype to the max
-Queen
8/12/2022 c10 A Mysterious Hooded Figure
Very good, very good. Maybe trying to work in the appearances of the characters named would be a good thing. The characterization is very good as well. Which brother of yours?
Very good, very good. Maybe trying to work in the appearances of the characters named would be a good thing. The characterization is very good as well. Which brother of yours?
8/12/2022 c9 A Mysterious Hooded Figure
Two little things, in the first paragraph there's a redundant/messed up sentence about Ashoka feeling Anakin's tenseness or something, and the other is that Ashoka "tearing out her holocommunicator" made me think of her first prying it out of her skin and then think of digging it out of a pocket or clothing. Which wirh her very simple style of dress if I remeber right it was in her cuff or on her belt. So that line threw me too.
Other than that it was really really good.
Two little things, in the first paragraph there's a redundant/messed up sentence about Ashoka feeling Anakin's tenseness or something, and the other is that Ashoka "tearing out her holocommunicator" made me think of her first prying it out of her skin and then think of digging it out of a pocket or clothing. Which wirh her very simple style of dress if I remeber right it was in her cuff or on her belt. So that line threw me too.
Other than that it was really really good.
8/12/2022 c7 A Mysterious Hooded Figure
Good job. It somehow manages to have the energy of Padme and Anakin's fiery romance and a 5 minute silent elevator ride between people that don't like each other. Seems pretty legit.
Good job. It somehow manages to have the energy of Padme and Anakin's fiery romance and a 5 minute silent elevator ride between people that don't like each other. Seems pretty legit.
6/25/2022 c1 Guest
Question why is he reverting to Vader? Vader died on the DS2?
Question why is he reverting to Vader? Vader died on the DS2?