for This Captain Wears Red3/15 c42 AliasTesin
Wow, great emotions and struggle. And, as usual, also understanding, affection and chaotic chaos on board the Going Merry.
Keep it up, great story
Wow, great emotions and struggle. And, as usual, also understanding, affection and chaotic chaos on board the Going Merry.
Keep it up, great story
3/15 c31 AliasTesin
Your story about Luffy's past fits well with the canon and the variations, well, they are just harmonious!
Your story about Luffy's past fits well with the canon and the variations, well, they are just harmonious!
3/14 c16 AliasTesin
How exciting to relive the events of the first One Piece saga in this alternate world: fantastic!
How exciting to relive the events of the first One Piece saga in this alternate world: fantastic!
3/14 c6 AliasTesin
Yes, I confirm. The story seems completely new compared to the canonical one. Maybe because you put a lot of your previous introspection into it...
Yes, I confirm. The story seems completely new compared to the canonical one. Maybe because you put a lot of your previous introspection into it...
2/28 c42 Guest
Can't wait for new chapter
Can't wait for new chapter
2/25 c42 
5lilylys
Always a good story... I read a new times your 2 stories, devils wears white and this one, and I love as much as I love the first time... Waiting for the new chapter... And I am waiting to read how and when Luffy will tell his entire story at his crew... Did he ask ace or sabo for help or no... waiting waiting for the update
5lilylysAlways a good story... I read a new times your 2 stories, devils wears white and this one, and I love as much as I love the first time... Waiting for the new chapter... And I am waiting to read how and when Luffy will tell his entire story at his crew... Did he ask ace or sabo for help or no... waiting waiting for the update
1/20 c1 emily.carter1410
While browsing through fanfiction, I came across your story, [This Captain Wears Red], and I truly enjoyed reading it! I’m reaching out because I’d love to adapt your literature into a comic. I have some exciting ideas for it that I think you’ll really enjoy. My commission slots are open right now, so I can dedicate time to your project and am highly motivated to bring your story to life in comic form. I look forward to the opportunity to work with you and hope this will be a great experience. Let me know if you’re interested! You can contact me on Discord at pixelpartner69 or on Twitter PixelPioneer."
Just replace [This Captain Wears Red] with the actual name of the story.
While browsing through fanfiction, I came across your story, [This Captain Wears Red], and I truly enjoyed reading it! I’m reaching out because I’d love to adapt your literature into a comic. I have some exciting ideas for it that I think you’ll really enjoy. My commission slots are open right now, so I can dedicate time to your project and am highly motivated to bring your story to life in comic form. I look forward to the opportunity to work with you and hope this will be a great experience. Let me know if you’re interested! You can contact me on Discord at pixelpartner69 or on Twitter PixelPioneer."
Just replace [This Captain Wears Red] with the actual name of the story.
11/29/2024 c1 Jsmine Lucas
I hope this message finds you well. I recently had the pleasure of reading your story, "This Captain Wears Red" and was truly captivated by its unique narrative and creativity. The depth and imagination in your work inspired me alot. I think this is the best story which i never ever read the way you described and the emotions like each and everything is incredible. It's too good would love to hear about your upcoming stories. I'm an artist if you would like to give me a chance to draw some of your characters for your stories or something like coverart for your story so that would be my truly honour to work with you also i'll share some dope ideas with you feel free to dm.
Discord: jasminelucas12
Instagram: jasmineluc_official
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I hope this message finds you well. I recently had the pleasure of reading your story, "This Captain Wears Red" and was truly captivated by its unique narrative and creativity. The depth and imagination in your work inspired me alot. I think this is the best story which i never ever read the way you described and the emotions like each and everything is incredible. It's too good would love to hear about your upcoming stories. I'm an artist if you would like to give me a chance to draw some of your characters for your stories or something like coverart for your story so that would be my truly honour to work with you also i'll share some dope ideas with you feel free to dm.
Discord: jasminelucas12
Instagram: jasmineluc_official
Email:
11/19/2024 c1 ZoyeZest
Hey there! I hope you're doing great!
I just finished reading your story This Captain Wears Red, and I absolutely loved it! I'd be thrilled to adapt it into my comic style or even animation. I'd work on it as a commission, and I think you'd really enjoy the final result something you might even want to share!
I'm a digital artist open for commissions and have a few spots available. I work on various types of artwork, my rates are reasonable, and I always deliver high-quality pieces. If you're interested, let’s discuss it further!
You can reach me here:
- Discord: baran59354
- DeviantArt: baran59354
- Twitter: ZoyeZest
- Instagram: baran59354
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Hey there! I hope you're doing great!
I just finished reading your story This Captain Wears Red, and I absolutely loved it! I'd be thrilled to adapt it into my comic style or even animation. I'd work on it as a commission, and I think you'd really enjoy the final result something you might even want to share!
I'm a digital artist open for commissions and have a few spots available. I work on various types of artwork, my rates are reasonable, and I always deliver high-quality pieces. If you're interested, let’s discuss it further!
You can reach me here:
- Discord: baran59354
- DeviantArt: baran59354
- Twitter: ZoyeZest
- Instagram: baran59354
Looking forward to hearing from you!
11/8/2024 c20 3greenarrow679
I think im going to have to let this one go here. Its a cool story, cool idea, cool series you have going, but the execution leaves much to be desired. Intentions asode, this reads like a rehash where the only change is that the reader is constantly made aware of what Luffy can do, but he either never does it, or it changes nothing in the end.
so what luffy has all these other extra abilities? Noone believes him after proof, they dont assist him in any meaningful way, and he doesnt have real control over them to try and use them in a meaningful way. No reading aura to take premptive action or be more prepared for what he can see coming. The only time his smell has really paid of so far was an awkward conversation with Nami. He had the prediction of Johnny and Yosaku being mad at them, but didnt put anything else together. i can understand that its supposed to be Luffy, but why give him all these extra abilities if the sum total is just canon Luffy.
i can also understand that its just 20 chapters in, you're clearly building towards the pay off and we should just keep reading. but look at it like this. youve rehashed 20 chapters worth of canon and changed nothing worthwhile in their journey. you honestly couldve just done what you did with conomi island and just followed luffys POV while skipping everything else. You wouldve been better off skimming canon and just writing out the scenes like his conversations with the whitebeards, usopp listening in, etc, just so you could get to writing the real changes. Thats half your story, half the effort youve put in, wasted. if youre doing that now, how much worse will things get in the future. Its to the point where you couldve written started with Alabasta and we wouldnt have missed anything. You see what I'm saying?
Again, I can understand that its hard to write a worthwhile story with a character who blows the sea out of the water. its everyones defense in situations like this. but at the same time, its not worthwhile to write a story where a character who is beyond whats happening around him still lets those things happen. You dont even have the naruto or harry potter excuse everyone used to use about the MC "hiding from Danzo/the council/the evil 3rd hokage" or "hiding from death eaters/Dumbledore/Voldemort." This Luffy has a history in this world as a whitebeard affiliated pirate. im not saying he has to use hakibor 2nd gear on everything, but come on.
Youre needlessly rehashing canon, stretching out won fights, all while its constantly shoved in our face that Luffy could do more. He could use haki here but wont. Or he used 2nd gear to get over here, but is struggling to really keep up with Kuros speed like he wants to. or hes stuck in the execution stand and decides to just use a bit of haki on his neck but cant hold it long. ontop of that, its slapped in our faces in the worst way possible. why use haki vs arlong when he couldve just used gear 2nd to send the message that nami wasnt arlongs to play with anymore. why gamble with haki just now in the execution when he couldve just broken out or stretched himself out or a billion other different things. Why put himself in the situation to fall in the water vs don krieg. he doesnt act like even a grand line affiliate. he acts like canon Luffy who knew nothing at all beyond fighting animals in a forest and running from grandpa.
ontop of that, you try so hard to write around your changes to luffy to stay on track with canon. in fights, in his way of thinking, in how he talks with others, in how others react or approach him, in how the plot progresses, everywhere. Yeah, he can sense kuro with his haki, but he fails to stop him until youre ready to end the fight. Yeah, he can feel what nami is going through, but he doesnt feel that she is hitting a boiling point and leaving with the merry. yeah, he can sense the guy behind him on the execution platform, even feel the aggression towards him, but he isnt prepared for the follow up and is still locking into the platform. Yeah, he can feel Kuro is evil, but does nothing about it until its presented. You arent writing the story of your Luffy, youre writing how can your Luffy fit into canon. its a common issue in fanfiction that we all do, but its egregious here. Youre honestly better off rewriting this with a luffy who didnt learn haki, more about his fruit, anything to control his senses, or any real connection to the whitebeards beyond them saving him from the facility and dropping him back home, because thats the depth of what youve written in this sequel so far.
3greenarrow679I think im going to have to let this one go here. Its a cool story, cool idea, cool series you have going, but the execution leaves much to be desired. Intentions asode, this reads like a rehash where the only change is that the reader is constantly made aware of what Luffy can do, but he either never does it, or it changes nothing in the end.
so what luffy has all these other extra abilities? Noone believes him after proof, they dont assist him in any meaningful way, and he doesnt have real control over them to try and use them in a meaningful way. No reading aura to take premptive action or be more prepared for what he can see coming. The only time his smell has really paid of so far was an awkward conversation with Nami. He had the prediction of Johnny and Yosaku being mad at them, but didnt put anything else together. i can understand that its supposed to be Luffy, but why give him all these extra abilities if the sum total is just canon Luffy.
i can also understand that its just 20 chapters in, you're clearly building towards the pay off and we should just keep reading. but look at it like this. youve rehashed 20 chapters worth of canon and changed nothing worthwhile in their journey. you honestly couldve just done what you did with conomi island and just followed luffys POV while skipping everything else. You wouldve been better off skimming canon and just writing out the scenes like his conversations with the whitebeards, usopp listening in, etc, just so you could get to writing the real changes. Thats half your story, half the effort youve put in, wasted. if youre doing that now, how much worse will things get in the future. Its to the point where you couldve written started with Alabasta and we wouldnt have missed anything. You see what I'm saying?
Again, I can understand that its hard to write a worthwhile story with a character who blows the sea out of the water. its everyones defense in situations like this. but at the same time, its not worthwhile to write a story where a character who is beyond whats happening around him still lets those things happen. You dont even have the naruto or harry potter excuse everyone used to use about the MC "hiding from Danzo/the council/the evil 3rd hokage" or "hiding from death eaters/Dumbledore/Voldemort." This Luffy has a history in this world as a whitebeard affiliated pirate. im not saying he has to use hakibor 2nd gear on everything, but come on.
Youre needlessly rehashing canon, stretching out won fights, all while its constantly shoved in our face that Luffy could do more. He could use haki here but wont. Or he used 2nd gear to get over here, but is struggling to really keep up with Kuros speed like he wants to. or hes stuck in the execution stand and decides to just use a bit of haki on his neck but cant hold it long. ontop of that, its slapped in our faces in the worst way possible. why use haki vs arlong when he couldve just used gear 2nd to send the message that nami wasnt arlongs to play with anymore. why gamble with haki just now in the execution when he couldve just broken out or stretched himself out or a billion other different things. Why put himself in the situation to fall in the water vs don krieg. he doesnt act like even a grand line affiliate. he acts like canon Luffy who knew nothing at all beyond fighting animals in a forest and running from grandpa.
ontop of that, you try so hard to write around your changes to luffy to stay on track with canon. in fights, in his way of thinking, in how he talks with others, in how others react or approach him, in how the plot progresses, everywhere. Yeah, he can sense kuro with his haki, but he fails to stop him until youre ready to end the fight. Yeah, he can feel what nami is going through, but he doesnt feel that she is hitting a boiling point and leaving with the merry. yeah, he can sense the guy behind him on the execution platform, even feel the aggression towards him, but he isnt prepared for the follow up and is still locking into the platform. Yeah, he can feel Kuro is evil, but does nothing about it until its presented. You arent writing the story of your Luffy, youre writing how can your Luffy fit into canon. its a common issue in fanfiction that we all do, but its egregious here. Youre honestly better off rewriting this with a luffy who didnt learn haki, more about his fruit, anything to control his senses, or any real connection to the whitebeards beyond them saving him from the facility and dropping him back home, because thats the depth of what youve written in this sequel so far.