for White Roses Part 2: School of Thought3/16/2022 c19 
5Prithika
Hi...I returned to this story after quite a while.
Tony's feelings and frustration...they are so well framed and the part where he expresses his uncertainty as to whether he even wants Lisa back as his sister, that part sounded so rough, yet just perfect. It shows how his personal feelings sometimes get the better of his familial obligations.
Lisa's hoax was indeed a perfect way to separate the two groups and she has been heavily indoctrinated. I wonder what makes her think that School of Thought and Black Rose are against each other...
On the other hand, I do want to see how Evangeline, who is blind, manages to murder someone. And her two 'guards' seem to be the dumbest people on this world indeed.
5PrithikaHi...I returned to this story after quite a while.
Tony's feelings and frustration...they are so well framed and the part where he expresses his uncertainty as to whether he even wants Lisa back as his sister, that part sounded so rough, yet just perfect. It shows how his personal feelings sometimes get the better of his familial obligations.
Lisa's hoax was indeed a perfect way to separate the two groups and she has been heavily indoctrinated. I wonder what makes her think that School of Thought and Black Rose are against each other...
On the other hand, I do want to see how Evangeline, who is blind, manages to murder someone. And her two 'guards' seem to be the dumbest people on this world indeed.
11/14/2021 c18 Prithika
I am really loving this story. I have got a feeling that when the cult asked her to join them full time now that she was a runaway girl, and asked her to murder, rob and what not, she probably got cold feet.
You are doing a really good job of handing so many characters on the same scene at the same time.
Oscar Smuff did turn out to be much more helpful than I had originally anticipated. He kind of reminds me of Chief McGinis from the Nancy Drew series. I don't know if you have read of him...
I am really excited to see who screamed...and Fenton is finally giving the boys some much deserved importance...
I am really loving this story. I have got a feeling that when the cult asked her to join them full time now that she was a runaway girl, and asked her to murder, rob and what not, she probably got cold feet.
You are doing a really good job of handing so many characters on the same scene at the same time.
Oscar Smuff did turn out to be much more helpful than I had originally anticipated. He kind of reminds me of Chief McGinis from the Nancy Drew series. I don't know if you have read of him...
I am really excited to see who screamed...and Fenton is finally giving the boys some much deserved importance...
11/14/2021 c17 Prithika
Awp...that was literally the sound that escaped my lips and everybody in the room was looking at me like I was crazy or something. How did Lisa manage to escape? Did she jump out of the window? Or maybe, there could have been a tree with branches close to the window which could have made a safer exit...
I was really interested to see Lisa's reaction to Fenton's latest discovery. Seems like she is still as adamant and stubborn as ever. But I must say, she is clever, if she could escape a house full of people in a span of 15 minutes.
Smart Callie, and nice comment by Laura there. That was a nice, sweet moment between Laura and Fenton.
It is a nice idea to be asking Oscar Smuff about his intentions...let's see if he can provide something useful...
Awp...that was literally the sound that escaped my lips and everybody in the room was looking at me like I was crazy or something. How did Lisa manage to escape? Did she jump out of the window? Or maybe, there could have been a tree with branches close to the window which could have made a safer exit...
I was really interested to see Lisa's reaction to Fenton's latest discovery. Seems like she is still as adamant and stubborn as ever. But I must say, she is clever, if she could escape a house full of people in a span of 15 minutes.
Smart Callie, and nice comment by Laura there. That was a nice, sweet moment between Laura and Fenton.
It is a nice idea to be asking Oscar Smuff about his intentions...let's see if he can provide something useful...
11/14/2021 c16 Prithika
Iola, Callie and Sally's opening conversation was great. It really made me miss my pre-Covid school life. It is so greatly realistic. I think everyone has had this conversation atleast once in their life.
Iola and Callie sprinting while Oscar stood surprised was nice...it shows their impulsive nature and also how that is a good thing at times. Why do I feel that the broken key was dropped purposefully and the man was trying to help them some way?
I wonder who was the one in the car. I guess everybody feels that way...when they read this chapter.
You have got something great in store and that is evident!
:)
Iola, Callie and Sally's opening conversation was great. It really made me miss my pre-Covid school life. It is so greatly realistic. I think everyone has had this conversation atleast once in their life.
Iola and Callie sprinting while Oscar stood surprised was nice...it shows their impulsive nature and also how that is a good thing at times. Why do I feel that the broken key was dropped purposefully and the man was trying to help them some way?
I wonder who was the one in the car. I guess everybody feels that way...when they read this chapter.
You have got something great in store and that is evident!
:)
10/31/2021 c15 Prithika
That's interesting! I have a feeling that the shooter, might have got a glimpse of the photograph which led to the firing. And I am really grateful that Joe has such a great instinct.
That photograph is really something. If Evangeline had been hiding all those years, why would she suddenly have her photo taken? And that too with a name with which she could possibly be recognised...
You probably thought that the philosophical discussions made me steer away, no, I just got a little busy...
That's interesting! I have a feeling that the shooter, might have got a glimpse of the photograph which led to the firing. And I am really grateful that Joe has such a great instinct.
That photograph is really something. If Evangeline had been hiding all those years, why would she suddenly have her photo taken? And that too with a name with which she could possibly be recognised...
You probably thought that the philosophical discussions made me steer away, no, I just got a little busy...
10/15/2021 c14 Prithika
That china cup and saucer with white roses on it...that is something. I mean it rings a bell, but maybe I am just over-reacting.
I didn't like John all that much initially in part 1, but he has changed quite a lot over time, and is much more likeable.
I am not really used to commenting on the romantic aspect of things so I will skip that. Please don't mind.
That china cup and saucer with white roses on it...that is something. I mean it rings a bell, but maybe I am just over-reacting.
I didn't like John all that much initially in part 1, but he has changed quite a lot over time, and is much more likeable.
I am not really used to commenting on the romantic aspect of things so I will skip that. Please don't mind.
10/15/2021 c13 Prithika
Suspended from school for the rest of the day if you are involved in a fight, that is the standard policy? OMG. That's bad. Injustice, just as Joe says.
And being a detective is really fun. You must think so too, otherwise you wouldn't be writing stories from a detective's point of view for this long...
Mario is a little odd, somewhere, I don't know why but I have never really liked him much.
I want to know more about Lisa's condition and how she is coping with this change. I am sure she regrets getting into a fight, but I am glad she did, otherwise it would be difficult to confront her.
The case seems to have drawn into temporary dead ends...
Suspended from school for the rest of the day if you are involved in a fight, that is the standard policy? OMG. That's bad. Injustice, just as Joe says.
And being a detective is really fun. You must think so too, otherwise you wouldn't be writing stories from a detective's point of view for this long...
Mario is a little odd, somewhere, I don't know why but I have never really liked him much.
I want to know more about Lisa's condition and how she is coping with this change. I am sure she regrets getting into a fight, but I am glad she did, otherwise it would be difficult to confront her.
The case seems to have drawn into temporary dead ends...
10/15/2021 c12 Prithika
This cult is going deeper than I expected. Of course, these is my first time reading a story where a cult is involved, so I am rather unfamiliar to cultish behaviour, tbh. Lisa thinks that it is alright to lie and she is actually justifying her side even after getting an inkling that they are not who they appear to be.
I thought you would reveal what Lisa actually thought about the 'club' but maybe that is for a later chapter. I hope Lisa gets it out of her mind.
Sally is pretty smooth. I wonder what she will make of the whole thing. She needs to remove the token soon.
This cult is going deeper than I expected. Of course, these is my first time reading a story where a cult is involved, so I am rather unfamiliar to cultish behaviour, tbh. Lisa thinks that it is alright to lie and she is actually justifying her side even after getting an inkling that they are not who they appear to be.
I thought you would reveal what Lisa actually thought about the 'club' but maybe that is for a later chapter. I hope Lisa gets it out of her mind.
Sally is pretty smooth. I wonder what she will make of the whole thing. She needs to remove the token soon.
10/15/2021 c11 Prithika
Got a little busy, but I am back.
That idea of a token was really nice. It was a great way to check his loyalty.
I can understand Fenton's reaction on seeing the token but I don't think Mitch was murdered by Black Rose since they would have left their traditional token behind had that been the case. However this cult must be deeply involved with the Black Rose group.
I wonder what is going to happen to sally and I am worried about how Lisa is going to be convinced as well
Got a little busy, but I am back.
That idea of a token was really nice. It was a great way to check his loyalty.
I can understand Fenton's reaction on seeing the token but I don't think Mitch was murdered by Black Rose since they would have left their traditional token behind had that been the case. However this cult must be deeply involved with the Black Rose group.
I wonder what is going to happen to sally and I am worried about how Lisa is going to be convinced as well
10/2/2021 c10 Prithika
Oops! Poor Joe should have been a little more careful. And a little less inquisitive. But we can barely blame him for that.
I wonder what his story is going to be.
Sally is a nice character. I like her quite a lot. But she needs to get over her nervousness.
Oops! Poor Joe should have been a little more careful. And a little less inquisitive. But we can barely blame him for that.
I wonder what his story is going to be.
Sally is a nice character. I like her quite a lot. But she needs to get over her nervousness.
9/30/2021 c9 Prithika
I really like Miss Kilpatrick. She should become a counsellor at Bayport High.
Algebra is my most favourite part of Maths, which is my favourite subject.
The speech and the interactions were quite interesting. I hope we get to see more of her in the coming story...
Lisa will probably be suspicious, or maybe she would think that Joe was casually glancing at her screen.
I really like Miss Kilpatrick. She should become a counsellor at Bayport High.
Algebra is my most favourite part of Maths, which is my favourite subject.
The speech and the interactions were quite interesting. I hope we get to see more of her in the coming story...
Lisa will probably be suspicious, or maybe she would think that Joe was casually glancing at her screen.
9/29/2021 c8 Prithika
Hey, I am back after a long time...
I was wondering, maybe Nancy could play for the character created, but I am just NancyObsessed
Alex Casey...I had half-forgotten him.
Angelo is suspicious but I don't know how.
It will be interesting to see Mario moving in with the Hardys...
Hey, I am back after a long time...
I was wondering, maybe Nancy could play for the character created, but I am just NancyObsessed
Alex Casey...I had half-forgotten him.
Angelo is suspicious but I don't know how.
It will be interesting to see Mario moving in with the Hardys...
9/11/2021 c7 Prithika
I was tempted for the second time in this story, to just click on 'Next' but I decided against it, after all.
The police officers weren't exactly very careful, it seems, if someone was following them and they didn't notice it. Could their car be tracked by GPS though, but the tracker must have been extremely prompt in that case to be sticking a note so soon.
I am interested to see the typer. But I think the person must be cleverer than that to be caught.
I was tempted for the second time in this story, to just click on 'Next' but I decided against it, after all.
The police officers weren't exactly very careful, it seems, if someone was following them and they didn't notice it. Could their car be tracked by GPS though, but the tracker must have been extremely prompt in that case to be sticking a note so soon.
I am interested to see the typer. But I think the person must be cleverer than that to be caught.
9/11/2021 c6 Prithika
'Sleuth' is a really nice name for the boat.
Frank is clearly extremely upset if he is thinking about all those things in the middle of the night. Hope he gets over it soon.
I can barely wait to see the message from 'School of Thought ' so I will keep this review short.
'Sleuth' is a really nice name for the boat.
Frank is clearly extremely upset if he is thinking about all those things in the middle of the night. Hope he gets over it soon.
I can barely wait to see the message from 'School of Thought ' so I will keep this review short.
9/11/2021 c5 Prithika
That small detail about the toy dog gifted by Mitch was touching indeed...
Joe's reaction indicates more than ever that what Jones told Iola was all the more true. No subtility by Joe... hehe
I am really excited to see what the fictitious account turns out to be like
Although Fenton's plan is risky, it is also the most probable course of action. But if Evangeline is a suspect, wouldn't it be making things easier for her?
Also, I have recently been wondering if Angelo Beretta somehow has something to do with it. He was pretty odd in Part 1, tbh. Maybe he holds the Policy responsible for his parent's death or something...
That small detail about the toy dog gifted by Mitch was touching indeed...
Joe's reaction indicates more than ever that what Jones told Iola was all the more true. No subtility by Joe... hehe
I am really excited to see what the fictitious account turns out to be like
Although Fenton's plan is risky, it is also the most probable course of action. But if Evangeline is a suspect, wouldn't it be making things easier for her?
Also, I have recently been wondering if Angelo Beretta somehow has something to do with it. He was pretty odd in Part 1, tbh. Maybe he holds the Policy responsible for his parent's death or something...