for An Untraveled Road11/28 c7 Daggerxxx
God, what a terrible thing. Not only does the author simply do event after event. Not only that, Naruto's arrival on Remnant, Willow's falling in love, Cynder's rescue, and the solution to the White Fang problem all fit into a one fucking week. So also these interactions between characters... They just appear out of nowhere. Either love, then a quarrel, then Nicholas’s respect, etc.
That's just ridiculous! It feels like just another week and the Grimm problem will be solved and Salem will be defeated (or rather, she will repent and become part of Naruto's harem, yeah). Bullshit.
God, what a terrible thing. Not only does the author simply do event after event. Not only that, Naruto's arrival on Remnant, Willow's falling in love, Cynder's rescue, and the solution to the White Fang problem all fit into a one fucking week. So also these interactions between characters... They just appear out of nowhere. Either love, then a quarrel, then Nicholas’s respect, etc.
That's just ridiculous! It feels like just another week and the Grimm problem will be solved and Salem will be defeated (or rather, she will repent and become part of Naruto's harem, yeah). Bullshit.
11/18 c5 Guest
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11/18 c3 Guest
The ending was nice though. I didn't expect a mini Cinder getting adopted.
The ending was nice though. I didn't expect a mini Cinder getting adopted.
11/10 c29 
12MindForged
Recent chapters have been interesting. Though I will be disappointed if, based on the previews, only Winter gets chakra from Naruto and not the other kids.
12MindForgedRecent chapters have been interesting. Though I will be disappointed if, based on the previews, only Winter gets chakra from Naruto and not the other kids.
10/11 c27 epsilon306
One observation: sometimes it doesn't feel like it's Naruto, there's no reference to ramen and also they don't say dattebayo. It would be nice if winter said dattebasa.
One observation: sometimes it doesn't feel like it's Naruto, there's no reference to ramen and also they don't say dattebayo. It would be nice if winter said dattebasa.
10/9 c28 marcon
I thought about your story once more, so you have to endure a second review of mine.
I found a problem with the children. Naruto and Willow adopting them left and right? Okay, you made it work. But looking at a possible Team RWBY I don't know how you plan to do that with Naruto fathering Weiss, Ruby and propably Blake. Part of their charme is the process of them adapting to each other, which won't work with them as (half)siblings.
Mayby Naruto shouldn't be related to every child in the story, so the children can actually meet new people and make new friends. You yourself let Naruto (somewhere) say to Cinder, that she would need to make friends, because family isn't enough.
Anyway, have fun writing the next chapter so I can have fun reading it ;-D
I thought about your story once more, so you have to endure a second review of mine.
I found a problem with the children. Naruto and Willow adopting them left and right? Okay, you made it work. But looking at a possible Team RWBY I don't know how you plan to do that with Naruto fathering Weiss, Ruby and propably Blake. Part of their charme is the process of them adapting to each other, which won't work with them as (half)siblings.
Mayby Naruto shouldn't be related to every child in the story, so the children can actually meet new people and make new friends. You yourself let Naruto (somewhere) say to Cinder, that she would need to make friends, because family isn't enough.
Anyway, have fun writing the next chapter so I can have fun reading it ;-D
10/9 c29 marcon
Good Story so far, especially the chemistry between your characters is great.
Seeing Daddy Naruto is going to be fun, when the children grow up. Imagine Cinder bringing a boy home. Or her beeing protective of her siblings. I pity the fool who tries to date Winter or Weiss
Good Story so far, especially the chemistry between your characters is great.
Seeing Daddy Naruto is going to be fun, when the children grow up. Imagine Cinder bringing a boy home. Or her beeing protective of her siblings. I pity the fool who tries to date Winter or Weiss
10/6 c29 1Scrawl the Penguin
Finally found a moment to catch up with this story. As always your writing is awesome Hoping for the others in the rwby section to be updated as well.
1Scrawl the PenguinFinally found a moment to catch up with this story. As always your writing is awesome Hoping for the others in the rwby section to be updated as well.
10/2 c29 dpx6101
I feel like Salem is going to take things into her own hands and have it backfire immediately. Naruto meets blonde Salem?
I feel like Salem is going to take things into her own hands and have it backfire immediately. Naruto meets blonde Salem?
9/28 c29 yesyesyes
let go, you returned
let go, you returned
9/28 c29 6ChubbyNingen
I need you to come back to ya RWBY stories, theyve all got potential and i love them. Especially the world building your doing its kinda amazing to see it done.
6ChubbyNingenI need you to come back to ya RWBY stories, theyve all got potential and i love them. Especially the world building your doing its kinda amazing to see it done.