for Akane no Mai4/8/2020 c1 Guest
Do you know about Scramble yet?
Do you know about Scramble yet?
4/6/2020 c1 
67Sovereign64
That's a great start so far. I love how you describe every scenery and every action scene without any dialogue at all. Keep up the good work.
67Sovereign64That's a great start so far. I love how you describe every scenery and every action scene without any dialogue at all. Keep up the good work.
4/2/2020 c1 2God Emperor Of GAR-halla
Question: Alongside Nioh, will Nioh 2 be referenced at all as well, like with our Avatar from that game appearing at all?
2God Emperor Of GAR-hallaQuestion: Alongside Nioh, will Nioh 2 be referenced at all as well, like with our Avatar from that game appearing at all?
4/2/2020 c1 The Anguished One
A fitting revision, considering Persona 5 has received one itself in the from of Royal. I'll admittedly be avoiding reading this until I've had the time to play Royal, I am excited for more.
A fitting revision, considering Persona 5 has received one itself in the from of Royal. I'll admittedly be avoiding reading this until I've had the time to play Royal, I am excited for more.
4/1/2020 c1 Dracul1789
This is written very well, I'm impressed and intrigued to se where this goes! I don't have any criticisms other than how rin reacted to being attacked, in the game once you complete her vestiges it is explained that she is extremely gifted in combat, I'd go as far as to say she's the best there is! I'm sure she'd be able to handle herself even without an immediate weapon.
This is written very well, I'm impressed and intrigued to se where this goes! I don't have any criticisms other than how rin reacted to being attacked, in the game once you complete her vestiges it is explained that she is extremely gifted in combat, I'd go as far as to say she's the best there is! I'm sure she'd be able to handle herself even without an immediate weapon.
4/1/2020 c1 5Darth Necron
Ah wow, figured you would finish Urban Legends first but here we are.
Well the first of many groups are getting ready for one wild , brutal ride, should be fun to see how things collide, and also how much you will adapt from Royal and Scramble, as that's the side I still am most versed in lol.
Should be fun to see how this comes together while Urban Legends also reach's its climax, best of luck, keep up the good work and till next time.
5Darth NecronAh wow, figured you would finish Urban Legends first but here we are.
Well the first of many groups are getting ready for one wild , brutal ride, should be fun to see how things collide, and also how much you will adapt from Royal and Scramble, as that's the side I still am most versed in lol.
Should be fun to see how this comes together while Urban Legends also reach's its climax, best of luck, keep up the good work and till next time.
4/1/2020 c1 Guest
Have you seen Scramble properly?
Have you seen Scramble properly?
3/31/2020 c1 7Chaosblazer
I wasn't expecting this so soon, at least not until the main story was complete.
Still good job on this, it's a great start.
You definitely know your stuff even if your not playing the games.
Keep up the awesome work dude
7ChaosblazerI wasn't expecting this so soon, at least not until the main story was complete.
Still good job on this, it's a great start.
You definitely know your stuff even if your not playing the games.
Keep up the awesome work dude
3/31/2020 c1 Generic Reviewer
So far so good. I really like the short and simple background for the Persona Vein arc. Hyped for how you flesh out Ford's original work.
Later days!
So far so good. I really like the short and simple background for the Persona Vein arc. Hyped for how you flesh out Ford's original work.
Later days!
3/31/2020 c1 15Allfather-Ford
At last, after a year of conceptualized planning, and writing the early drafts of Persona Vein and Urban Legends, we have made it. The prologue of Akane no Mai that you wrote that kickstart the real, revised, and official version of the pseudo-novel franchise. This clearly represents what you want in the new phase after years of writing fanfictions for so long.
This is the first time you use the ‘show, don’t tell’ writing style in this prologue, it’s one of the technical ways for readers to first draw in to a fictional story. Learning ‘show, don’t tell’ is indeed a challenging process, and I realize and remember that this style is not just used in literature, but also other popular culture like movies and even video games. So it is complicated at times, but once you have gotten used to it to improve yourself as a writer in taking it seriously in the official world, you’ll do fine.
One of the biggest Author’s Saving Throws is that this prologue finally and properly takes place after Code Vein, where the Revenants are now exploring the outside world of the red mist to help humanity against the horrors, known as the Aragami in the God Eater franchise. Along the way, they fight and slew the Lost. As they catch a breather, a wormhole appears in front of the Code Vein Protagonist as he is sucked through in venturing into another dimension.
Phila-Del-Phia! Yes, this catchphrase was from a friend of ours named LazerWulf which he once used back in the day of his past reviews. With his consent, I decide on using that catchphrase of me becoming his successor and honoring his legacy. From here on in my AnM reviews, I’m using this catchphrase at the end of each review to bring the legacy of this uniqueness.
15Allfather-FordAt last, after a year of conceptualized planning, and writing the early drafts of Persona Vein and Urban Legends, we have made it. The prologue of Akane no Mai that you wrote that kickstart the real, revised, and official version of the pseudo-novel franchise. This clearly represents what you want in the new phase after years of writing fanfictions for so long.
This is the first time you use the ‘show, don’t tell’ writing style in this prologue, it’s one of the technical ways for readers to first draw in to a fictional story. Learning ‘show, don’t tell’ is indeed a challenging process, and I realize and remember that this style is not just used in literature, but also other popular culture like movies and even video games. So it is complicated at times, but once you have gotten used to it to improve yourself as a writer in taking it seriously in the official world, you’ll do fine.
One of the biggest Author’s Saving Throws is that this prologue finally and properly takes place after Code Vein, where the Revenants are now exploring the outside world of the red mist to help humanity against the horrors, known as the Aragami in the God Eater franchise. Along the way, they fight and slew the Lost. As they catch a breather, a wormhole appears in front of the Code Vein Protagonist as he is sucked through in venturing into another dimension.
Phila-Del-Phia! Yes, this catchphrase was from a friend of ours named LazerWulf which he once used back in the day of his past reviews. With his consent, I decide on using that catchphrase of me becoming his successor and honoring his legacy. From here on in my AnM reviews, I’m using this catchphrase at the end of each review to bring the legacy of this uniqueness.