for The 34th Knight6/11/2022 c8 Guest
Rewrite about Dumbledore fucking his own asshole white his sister gets her cunt raped.
Rewrite about Dumbledore fucking his own asshole white his sister gets her cunt raped.
9/20/2021 c8 Sand Kitsune
I can’t wait. I already like it as is but if you say you’re going to improve it…. can’t wait
I can’t wait. I already like it as is but if you say you’re going to improve it…. can’t wait
7/27/2020 c8 Bailey
Will there be more chapters?
Will there be more chapters?
6/25/2020 c7 3697014
Oh boy. I'm betting money on Snape will try to insult and belittle Hadrian because his pathetic childish grudge, and he will mercilessly be beaten by Eydis.
Also, I would like to see the Knights purge most of the rotten elements of the wizarding in the near future.
Oh boy. I'm betting money on Snape will try to insult and belittle Hadrian because his pathetic childish grudge, and he will mercilessly be beaten by Eydis.
Also, I would like to see the Knights purge most of the rotten elements of the wizarding in the near future.
6/20/2020 c6 lara.niric
Okaaay, you had me till the kidnapping in chapter 6. I won't go into detail about why because a few others explained it already. But even so I'll wait and see how you go with this. Maybe you had reasons for writing it that way so I will just wait for the next few chapters.
Okaaay, you had me till the kidnapping in chapter 6. I won't go into detail about why because a few others explained it already. But even so I'll wait and see how you go with this. Maybe you had reasons for writing it that way so I will just wait for the next few chapters.
5/30/2020 c6 
3Ren-chan the otaku
I really like the premise of this story. Its interesting. However, I have problems with how passive Hadrian is about being kidnapped and just accepting everything that said kidnappers are saying.
Is he that naive? Or is he just going with flow for now but will definitely have plans and is gonna execute the moment they leave him alone?
Because in my opinion, as someone who spent his whole life with knights and training as one, Hadrian would have a stronger/more commanding presence than what you are currently showing. Even if he is a child, he still holds a rank so he will demand respect on that basis alone.
Acting childlike when alone with his family is fine and expected even. However, he must show two sides, the child and the knight commander. He is trained to lead and has been preparing for war. There's a certain degree of hardness that will show.
I'm just voicing out my opinion and hope that you'll take this as a constructive criticism. I really do enjoy reading this, I just want some thing made clearer.
Onto a lighter topic, my guess on who saw the kidnapping is Renly. He's still cowardly at this point will definitely run to someone else who will know what to do.
Ren
3Ren-chan the otakuI really like the premise of this story. Its interesting. However, I have problems with how passive Hadrian is about being kidnapped and just accepting everything that said kidnappers are saying.
Is he that naive? Or is he just going with flow for now but will definitely have plans and is gonna execute the moment they leave him alone?
Because in my opinion, as someone who spent his whole life with knights and training as one, Hadrian would have a stronger/more commanding presence than what you are currently showing. Even if he is a child, he still holds a rank so he will demand respect on that basis alone.
Acting childlike when alone with his family is fine and expected even. However, he must show two sides, the child and the knight commander. He is trained to lead and has been preparing for war. There's a certain degree of hardness that will show.
I'm just voicing out my opinion and hope that you'll take this as a constructive criticism. I really do enjoy reading this, I just want some thing made clearer.
Onto a lighter topic, my guess on who saw the kidnapping is Renly. He's still cowardly at this point will definitely run to someone else who will know what to do.
Ren
5/30/2020 c6 31Sakura Lisel
Um... Why is Hadrian just agreeing to go along with his KIDNAPPERS are suggesting instead of demanding they send him HOME? *lol*
Though I think Hadrian should ask/demand Sirius and Remus tell him exactly WHY in possible heck would make them think he would 'remember' them when he HASNT seen them since his parents deaths? Demand to know exactly WHY even IF he still had his 'Harry Potter' memories, would he 'remember' two men he hasn't seen since he was 15 months old, and now has YEARS worth of NEW memories completely replacing those long ago 15 months of memories that should have faded away since Remus and Sirius weren't around to help keep those memories of them going while he was growing up.
Hadrian should also respond to that 'your mom and dad are DEAD' comment Sirius made. Hadrian should point out to the mutt and EVERYBODY else who has the nerve to question his 'my parents said/did/etc.' comments that even if Hadrian's BIRTH parents are dead, he should demand to know exactly WHO does Sirius and everybody else think has been raising Hadrian all these years? Or do they all think that he wouldn't consider whoever has been raising and loving him all these years as his parents? That he wouldn't call THEM mom and dad, and instead remain faithful to parents who he can't remember at all as being his ONE and ONLY parents in the entire world, and that whoever has been raising him in the Potters place don't count as his parents now somehow? Or do they all think he's somehow been living on his own, living in dirt and squalor alone on the streets without a roof over his head or people who love him, despite how he looks when they kidnapped him? *lol*
31Sakura LiselUm... Why is Hadrian just agreeing to go along with his KIDNAPPERS are suggesting instead of demanding they send him HOME? *lol*
Though I think Hadrian should ask/demand Sirius and Remus tell him exactly WHY in possible heck would make them think he would 'remember' them when he HASNT seen them since his parents deaths? Demand to know exactly WHY even IF he still had his 'Harry Potter' memories, would he 'remember' two men he hasn't seen since he was 15 months old, and now has YEARS worth of NEW memories completely replacing those long ago 15 months of memories that should have faded away since Remus and Sirius weren't around to help keep those memories of them going while he was growing up.
Hadrian should also respond to that 'your mom and dad are DEAD' comment Sirius made. Hadrian should point out to the mutt and EVERYBODY else who has the nerve to question his 'my parents said/did/etc.' comments that even if Hadrian's BIRTH parents are dead, he should demand to know exactly WHO does Sirius and everybody else think has been raising Hadrian all these years? Or do they all think that he wouldn't consider whoever has been raising and loving him all these years as his parents? That he wouldn't call THEM mom and dad, and instead remain faithful to parents who he can't remember at all as being his ONE and ONLY parents in the entire world, and that whoever has been raising him in the Potters place don't count as his parents now somehow? Or do they all think he's somehow been living on his own, living in dirt and squalor alone on the streets without a roof over his head or people who love him, despite how he looks when they kidnapped him? *lol*