1/26 c132 Ked
Enjoyed the chapter as usual.

I will say that much of it felt just slightly off-kilter.
1) Liz goes to the Order meeting because:
2) Sev wants her to go, and convinces her by pointing out that:
3) They will be talking about her, and maybe trying to make decisions about her.

I had to go back and reread the top part because I'd missed points 2 and 3 the first time, which left me at the end wondering wtf she was there for.

But... it still seems like a bad idea. Liz went to the meeting. The Order meeting. She wasn't invisible in the background, she sat at the table and participated. People saw her there, people interacted with her. She was not (in this text) specially introduced as not-really-an-Order-member, just "everybody knew who she was". But part of the running point of the whole story is that the world doesn't know who Liz really is, so do the people in the meeting - even Dumbledore - know that she isn't there to be a member? Who will they tell that she's on board with Dumbles?

Now Liz isn't quite always wise or savvy enough to anticipate details like this. That's fine. That Severus hasn't considered the optics involved feels a little (or a lot) sketchy. That he's so... blase through the meeting feels really weird - likely Dumbledore isn't going to want him to try to spy this time, but why he's willing to plant his flag on the Order's side this time hasn't been well-established in this setting. At best he's putting himself into a position where a lot of powerful people will consider him a target.

And why Liz couldn't trust Sev to defend her interests is also strange. "She will treat watchers as hostile. No, she doesn't want a fidelus, you idiot. I've made sure she has good fallback plans, no, you can't know what they are. Scan her wards and she'll sic the whole village on you. Are you trying to get her killed?" Liz knows she doesn't want to be in a room with all the Light bigots (and doesn't that send the wrong message too, if she doesn't push back at Doge just a little?), and doesn't this lock her into going to more in the future?

Tamsyn is just the punctuation mark in this weird communication loop - instead of things leaking and taking a week to reach Voldy, she'll just give her report when she heads back. Maybe this level of Liz involvement is okay, maybe it isn't, but the moment Liz sat down at that table it's up to the other side to figure out how to react.

Maybe this is all is already baked in to your outline, I dunno. But it just seems off.

Still, I'm looking forward to more. Love all your settings but this one is def top 2.

1/17 c131 james.89.smy
Get well soon. Thanks for another great chapter. :)

1/13 c95 asjblackthorne
About time Dorea pulled her head out.

1/8 c72 asjblackthorne
I've decided I hate chapters from Dorea's pov, she's such a bigoted little shit.
Will there be any chapters from Snape's pov? That would be neat.

1/2 c51 asjblackthorne
The more scenes you write from Dorea's point of view, the more I can't stand that narrow-minded little homophobe. So glad Liz stopped being friends with her.

12/31/2024 c129 james.89.smy
Thanks for the chapter. :)

12/23/2024 c127 Auguruj
Kind of feels weird seeing Liz in such an uplifted mood. :D