for Mischief to manage HIATUS5/18 c5 AngrySama
This is stupid, why would he even go to Hogwarts? Take his gold out of gringotts(probably spelled wrong but screw this goblins) and travel somewhere else. Loki knows the back roads between realms he would be able to go to another realm where he could teach Harry everything the boy need to know. Also future sight, the goblet of fire would not work on Harry as the goblet is mortal magic.
This is stupid, why would he even go to Hogwarts? Take his gold out of gringotts(probably spelled wrong but screw this goblins) and travel somewhere else. Loki knows the back roads between realms he would be able to go to another realm where he could teach Harry everything the boy need to know. Also future sight, the goblet of fire would not work on Harry as the goblet is mortal magic.
2/19 c12 DragoonPhil
Cant continue this story it has/had potential but the plot feels clumsy put together, the timeline makes no sense since your not including anything about marvel other than loki’s banishment for 50 years something you added and you seem to be following the harry potter timeline which Harry is 11 in 1991 so why is he 7 in 2002.
Cant continue this story it has/had potential but the plot feels clumsy put together, the timeline makes no sense since your not including anything about marvel other than loki’s banishment for 50 years something you added and you seem to be following the harry potter timeline which Harry is 11 in 1991 so why is he 7 in 2002.
2/19 c3 DragoonPhil
I really hope you have a better explanation for why loki couldn’t find harry at privet drive than blood wards because unless you are completely changing how magic is once again cannon magic breaks it not story not plot, tom was able to get through the blood wards because he used harry’s blood in his ritual as the father why would the blood wards work to hide harry from loki. The story is ok so far and even if it wasnt my normal rule is to try to read 3 chapters past the point i truly disliked to give it a chance though my reviews may get less constructive since right now im trying to find what makes your plot possible in the worlds you are writing in. Since if you are trying for a somewhat cannon harry yes he needs to be raised by the dursleys but so far the reason that this is happening isnt possible cannon wise for James to not know about oblivate reversal so dumbledores excuse and loki just not ripping his mind to pieces looking for even the slightest hints of a location is unbelievable for the setting you are placing this story in.
I really hope you have a better explanation for why loki couldn’t find harry at privet drive than blood wards because unless you are completely changing how magic is once again cannon magic breaks it not story not plot, tom was able to get through the blood wards because he used harry’s blood in his ritual as the father why would the blood wards work to hide harry from loki. The story is ok so far and even if it wasnt my normal rule is to try to read 3 chapters past the point i truly disliked to give it a chance though my reviews may get less constructive since right now im trying to find what makes your plot possible in the worlds you are writing in. Since if you are trying for a somewhat cannon harry yes he needs to be raised by the dursleys but so far the reason that this is happening isnt possible cannon wise for James to not know about oblivate reversal so dumbledores excuse and loki just not ripping his mind to pieces looking for even the slightest hints of a location is unbelievable for the setting you are placing this story in.
2/19 c2 DragoonPhil
Well cannon destroys your set up and im not even talking about anything other than oblivate, the spell that can be reversed but for your plot, it stopped loki from finding his son and dumbledore was just somehow able to decieve the trickster god because really he forgot where he placed him but no mention of any other memory that would have told him exactly where harry is. You may say your the writer i can do whatever i want is wrong since you placed your story in already very well defined worlds but apparently your world mind magic is absolute. Really you could have just given dumbledore a minion from another realm unknown to any other wizard and still place him where he wanted without anyone knowing it was him boom it would have solved so much but no lets ignore cannon magic but keep cannon beginning basically the same. Im going to keep reading but my hope for the story has fallen drastically.
Well cannon destroys your set up and im not even talking about anything other than oblivate, the spell that can be reversed but for your plot, it stopped loki from finding his son and dumbledore was just somehow able to decieve the trickster god because really he forgot where he placed him but no mention of any other memory that would have told him exactly where harry is. You may say your the writer i can do whatever i want is wrong since you placed your story in already very well defined worlds but apparently your world mind magic is absolute. Really you could have just given dumbledore a minion from another realm unknown to any other wizard and still place him where he wanted without anyone knowing it was him boom it would have solved so much but no lets ignore cannon magic but keep cannon beginning basically the same. Im going to keep reading but my hope for the story has fallen drastically.
7/1/2023 c10 
6TimberlineWolf
i feel the need o point out that Fumbledoor gave Dudley the wrong password in "Noble Blood", as last chapter Snape told Harry it was "Blue Blood"
other than that i'm lovin' this story so far!
6TimberlineWolfi feel the need o point out that Fumbledoor gave Dudley the wrong password in "Noble Blood", as last chapter Snape told Harry it was "Blue Blood"
other than that i'm lovin' this story so far!
6/5/2023 c23 Warmaiden777
Love the story so far. Hilarious and entertaining. Can’t wait for the next chapter.
Love the story so far. Hilarious and entertaining. Can’t wait for the next chapter.
5/9/2023 c1 3XXxxxadisxxxXX
The basic English, grammar, and sentence structure in this fic are not up to par. It is to the point of actively getting in the way of reading the story and not being able to understand what the author is trying to convey at times.
3XXxxxadisxxxXXThe basic English, grammar, and sentence structure in this fic are not up to par. It is to the point of actively getting in the way of reading the story and not being able to understand what the author is trying to convey at times.
4/4/2023 c11 Keres47
I'm hoping you don't start the relationship between tonks in Remus until shes at least 24. shes only about 18 now
I'm hoping you don't start the relationship between tonks in Remus until shes at least 24. shes only about 18 now
3/1/2023 c6 dabrakadabra
Loki sends Harry to Hogwarts so he can have a normal childhood?
Is it just me or is Loki getting dumber with every chapter? Could this be related to their time in Magical Britain?
In other countries, there are no good schools without an obsessive old man who spits on the law, common sense, and just morality and child torture, all just to control your son? Even when he knows about your real personality - he doesn't care, he still does whatever he wants, he doesn't care about the consequences.
And why is Dambs Harry's magical guardian when Sirius is a free man and, according to James/Lilly will, custody is transferred to him? Another plot hole...
And Doubledore stealing from Harry's trust vault? Seriously? I understand that Dumbs is incredibly brazen, but stealing from an orphan when he has people who will support him (Sirius, Loki) and can fuck Dumbs for it? The insanity keeps going...
Loki sends Harry to Hogwarts so he can have a normal childhood?
Is it just me or is Loki getting dumber with every chapter? Could this be related to their time in Magical Britain?
In other countries, there are no good schools without an obsessive old man who spits on the law, common sense, and just morality and child torture, all just to control your son? Even when he knows about your real personality - he doesn't care, he still does whatever he wants, he doesn't care about the consequences.
And why is Dambs Harry's magical guardian when Sirius is a free man and, according to James/Lilly will, custody is transferred to him? Another plot hole...
And Doubledore stealing from Harry's trust vault? Seriously? I understand that Dumbs is incredibly brazen, but stealing from an orphan when he has people who will support him (Sirius, Loki) and can fuck Dumbs for it? The insanity keeps going...
3/1/2023 c5 dabrakadabra
Oh fuck, now Loki admits that he TRUSTED Dumbledore, even after his son was stolen from him and his friend was thrown into Azkaban.
And their whole gang is still hiding from Dumbs. Why? Why should they do it? It didn't make any sense even before.
Especially now that Harry has been found. Make an epic exit, destroy the old man's reputation and kill him quietly at the end... But no, we need a pointless drama, so we will play fools by the old man's rules to please him, right?
Oh fuck, now Loki admits that he TRUSTED Dumbledore, even after his son was stolen from him and his friend was thrown into Azkaban.
And their whole gang is still hiding from Dumbs. Why? Why should they do it? It didn't make any sense even before.
Especially now that Harry has been found. Make an epic exit, destroy the old man's reputation and kill him quietly at the end... But no, we need a pointless drama, so we will play fools by the old man's rules to please him, right?
3/1/2023 c4 dabrakadabra
So, Loki knew about Dursleys, but didn't even bother to check them out? It took Loki 5 years and the help of a superhuman from another continent to visit Lily's relatives, whom he already knew about?
This is stupid as hell. You show a feeble-minded man, but calling him Loki. Loki is smart as hell, he is the GOD of lies and deceit.
Not to check the most obvious place - relatives, especially since he knows where they live, is so stupid that it's just beyond idiocy.
As for Dursleys... They beat Harry, starved him, humiliated him, mocked him, made him a slave.
What should be God's response to such treatment of his son? Well, of course, to make their son a wizard. What cruelty! How dare he? Ugh...
Fuck, that's just pathetic. Your Loki is a perfect illustration for the dictionary under the word "wuss".
So, Loki knew about Dursleys, but didn't even bother to check them out? It took Loki 5 years and the help of a superhuman from another continent to visit Lily's relatives, whom he already knew about?
This is stupid as hell. You show a feeble-minded man, but calling him Loki. Loki is smart as hell, he is the GOD of lies and deceit.
Not to check the most obvious place - relatives, especially since he knows where they live, is so stupid that it's just beyond idiocy.
As for Dursleys... They beat Harry, starved him, humiliated him, mocked him, made him a slave.
What should be God's response to such treatment of his son? Well, of course, to make their son a wizard. What cruelty! How dare he? Ugh...
Fuck, that's just pathetic. Your Loki is a perfect illustration for the dictionary under the word "wuss".
3/1/2023 c3 dabrakadabra
Threats to Dumbledore are simply ridiculous. Loki believes the old man at his word, even after he threw Sirius into Azkaban, although he knew about his innocence.
And what does Loki do? Just growls at Dumbledore, over and over. No action. This is not Loki, this is Harry Potter - a hysterical nonentity who is not able to stand up for himself in front of adults.
Threats to Dumbledore are simply ridiculous. Loki believes the old man at his word, even after he threw Sirius into Azkaban, although he knew about his innocence.
And what does Loki do? Just growls at Dumbledore, over and over. No action. This is not Loki, this is Harry Potter - a hysterical nonentity who is not able to stand up for himself in front of adults.