for If not for Umbridge12/17/2022 c19 raymond21
Dumbledore is good person,but i think in ootp book,he acted like he is commander of the army,not fun old headmaster,off course he didn't teaching Harry Potter,he have an army and school to manage,and teaching Harry occlumency is not his priority
This chapter clearly show why severus didn't want to ending his relationship with mulciber and Avery,they give him protection inside slytherin house when he didn't have much relationship with other students except for Lily. And off course he didn't want to be hexed By them,especially he is already unpopular and bullies mercilessly by marauders
Dumbledore is good person,but i think in ootp book,he acted like he is commander of the army,not fun old headmaster,off course he didn't teaching Harry Potter,he have an army and school to manage,and teaching Harry occlumency is not his priority
This chapter clearly show why severus didn't want to ending his relationship with mulciber and Avery,they give him protection inside slytherin house when he didn't have much relationship with other students except for Lily. And off course he didn't want to be hexed By them,especially he is already unpopular and bullies mercilessly by marauders
12/17/2022 c18 raymond21
Daphne,you cheeky slytherin woman. You really are so cunning to deceive Dolores and make her go in prison in very beautiful way. DA really lucky to have Greengrass in their group otherwise they messed up things like in canon
Daphne,you cheeky slytherin woman. You really are so cunning to deceive Dolores and make her go in prison in very beautiful way. DA really lucky to have Greengrass in their group otherwise they messed up things like in canon
12/17/2022 c17 raymond21
Well,Daphne isn't wrong. I mean from her perspective,Tracey can choose whoever man she wants and Tracey want to date Ron and Ron can choose any girl he wants. It is just unfortunate that the girl he wants is not Hermione. But Ron didnt have any obligation returning Hermione feelings towards him,just like like Lily didn't have any obligation to returning severus feelings about her.
I think Daphne can teaching occlumency better than severus because Daphne is already learning occlumency by her uncle, and she is teached by her family and have better relationship with Harry. Severus is clearly didn't want anything to do with Harry Potter,but he Will do what Dumbledore Asked him to do,to keep Harry save from Voldemort.
And Daphne acting in this chapter as strategist of the Dumbledore Army,and i clearly want to see how they handle out umbridge
Well,Daphne isn't wrong. I mean from her perspective,Tracey can choose whoever man she wants and Tracey want to date Ron and Ron can choose any girl he wants. It is just unfortunate that the girl he wants is not Hermione. But Ron didnt have any obligation returning Hermione feelings towards him,just like like Lily didn't have any obligation to returning severus feelings about her.
I think Daphne can teaching occlumency better than severus because Daphne is already learning occlumency by her uncle, and she is teached by her family and have better relationship with Harry. Severus is clearly didn't want anything to do with Harry Potter,but he Will do what Dumbledore Asked him to do,to keep Harry save from Voldemort.
And Daphne acting in this chapter as strategist of the Dumbledore Army,and i clearly want to see how they handle out umbridge
12/17/2022 c41 SvenTheDecoy
I'll happily wait for the story you want to write, as opposed to the story others want to read.
I'll happily wait for the story you want to write, as opposed to the story others want to read.
12/3/2022 c41 
1Pogonia And Medusa
Thanks for being honest with us and for not giving up on the story. I look forward to seeing what you do with it when you have the time and energy to come back to it.
1Pogonia And MedusaThanks for being honest with us and for not giving up on the story. I look forward to seeing what you do with it when you have the time and energy to come back to it.
12/2/2022 c41 Guest
Whoever thought the story was rushed hasn't the since of a lame goose. If anything, sometimes you get bogged down in excess verbiage. Several times you have plowed the same field - I refer to the repeated question "Am I really good enough for the other?" I've always thought a writer should write the story paying as little attention as possible to outside wishes for the direction the story would take. I have one int the works, but NO part of it will see the lite of "fanfiction" until it is finished. I understand the need to spread the publication out. If I dumped it all at once I'd miss the maximum exposure this sight could give all the work needs to be something I am proud of. Otherwise, I would unload the entire content and let it fall where it may.
Whoever thought the story was rushed hasn't the since of a lame goose. If anything, sometimes you get bogged down in excess verbiage. Several times you have plowed the same field - I refer to the repeated question "Am I really good enough for the other?" I've always thought a writer should write the story paying as little attention as possible to outside wishes for the direction the story would take. I have one int the works, but NO part of it will see the lite of "fanfiction" until it is finished. I understand the need to spread the publication out. If I dumped it all at once I'd miss the maximum exposure this sight could give all the work needs to be something I am proud of. Otherwise, I would unload the entire content and let it fall where it may.
12/1/2022 c41 phineasn
I’m proud of you!
I think art in general and specially writing is done with passion. Passion is what YOU feel and like. You cannot be passionate writing what you think others will like. And there is always someone that will like what you do. Be yourself, enjoy it, and the rest will come by itself.
I’ll be here waiting for your update!
Best wishes!
Phineas
I’m proud of you!
I think art in general and specially writing is done with passion. Passion is what YOU feel and like. You cannot be passionate writing what you think others will like. And there is always someone that will like what you do. Be yourself, enjoy it, and the rest will come by itself.
I’ll be here waiting for your update!
Best wishes!
Phineas
12/1/2022 c41 Hank1967
Don't worry about it - get it finished when you can and make sure that you are happy with it. I would suggest going back to the beginning and reworking the story along the original lines you had conceived. Don't write to please your reviewers - write to please yourself. If you lose a few reviewers, you'll likely gain some more because the quality of the story will go up. Don't be afraid to be original. Nothing bores me more than a story that is nothing more than a rehash of canon with an extra character or situation thrown in. Take for instance Bobmin's story "The Queen Who Fell to Earth". It's a blend of Anne McCaffrey's The Dragon Riders of Pern series with Harry Potter and it ends up being a prequel to all of Ms. McCaffrey's work. Fantastic story. Bobmin absolutely jettisons the canon after the beginning of the fourth year (burns it with dragon fire really). If you get a chance, read it. It's awesome and well-received by the FFN community. Please write YOUR story and just let the chips fall where they may. Cheers!
Don't worry about it - get it finished when you can and make sure that you are happy with it. I would suggest going back to the beginning and reworking the story along the original lines you had conceived. Don't write to please your reviewers - write to please yourself. If you lose a few reviewers, you'll likely gain some more because the quality of the story will go up. Don't be afraid to be original. Nothing bores me more than a story that is nothing more than a rehash of canon with an extra character or situation thrown in. Take for instance Bobmin's story "The Queen Who Fell to Earth". It's a blend of Anne McCaffrey's The Dragon Riders of Pern series with Harry Potter and it ends up being a prequel to all of Ms. McCaffrey's work. Fantastic story. Bobmin absolutely jettisons the canon after the beginning of the fourth year (burns it with dragon fire really). If you get a chance, read it. It's awesome and well-received by the FFN community. Please write YOUR story and just let the chips fall where they may. Cheers!
12/1/2022 c41 21Oniton
The golden rule, is never to change your direction because the audience is unhappy. Write what you like, and then the reader can take the whole work on its merits. Good luck!
21OnitonThe golden rule, is never to change your direction because the audience is unhappy. Write what you like, and then the reader can take the whole work on its merits. Good luck!
12/1/2022 c41 Andr Le Ntre
I would like first to thank you with your excellent work that is clearly shown in all of your stories!
Concerning what you said, I definitely approve your decision to go on hiatus for a while to rewrite this story,take as much as you need to fix it to your liking, and of course I will wait for you meanwhile, I'm actually grateful about this decision because it shows the extense of your resolve to write a satisfying content and at the same time allowing us readers to enjoy a High-Quality story which is very kind of you!
Best regards!
I would like first to thank you with your excellent work that is clearly shown in all of your stories!
Concerning what you said, I definitely approve your decision to go on hiatus for a while to rewrite this story,take as much as you need to fix it to your liking, and of course I will wait for you meanwhile, I'm actually grateful about this decision because it shows the extense of your resolve to write a satisfying content and at the same time allowing us readers to enjoy a High-Quality story which is very kind of you!
Best regards!
12/1/2022 c41 7goldfish demon
Take all the time you need. I've been reading this since the first chapter was published and I'll wait as long as I need to for more. I'm sorry to hear about all the difficulties you've been having with this story; I've always thought it was excellent, if a bit emotionally heavy at times. I'm curious to know what your original plan was, and what exactly got changed in the name of reader satisfaction.
I'm excited to hear that 'It All Starts With a Dance' will be getting more focus, if I had to choose between your two Daphne-centric stories, I'd say I prefer to lighter one most of the time.
I'm pretty sure I already have alerts set for both you and this story, but I'm doubling down just in case.
Have a great day,
GD
7goldfish demonTake all the time you need. I've been reading this since the first chapter was published and I'll wait as long as I need to for more. I'm sorry to hear about all the difficulties you've been having with this story; I've always thought it was excellent, if a bit emotionally heavy at times. I'm curious to know what your original plan was, and what exactly got changed in the name of reader satisfaction.
I'm excited to hear that 'It All Starts With a Dance' will be getting more focus, if I had to choose between your two Daphne-centric stories, I'd say I prefer to lighter one most of the time.
I'm pretty sure I already have alerts set for both you and this story, but I'm doubling down just in case.
Have a great day,
GD
12/1/2022 c41 BillBrink
I was enjoying this. I hope you don't get discouraged and listen to the naysayers.
I was enjoying this. I hope you don't get discouraged and listen to the naysayers.