for If not for Umbridge4/27/2020 c1 
12Freudentraene
Really nice chapter. Your writing style is great. Only the marriage thing with Goyle made me cringe. That's not funny, even as a joke xD
I liked your Daphne POV. She feels like a real person with her own ambitions, dreams, hopes, worries and fears. It seems she doesn't have the best relationship with her family. I'm curious what's that all about, even if the chapter has some hints. Some sentences have given me the impression that Daphne may have a crush on Harry.
One thing I've always found illogical is people don't knowing who Daphne is. Even if Harry and Ron had nothing to do with her, after four years, they should nevertheless at least know the names of the 50 students or so in their class.
I was also worried for a moment that "Ron's typical hatred of all Slytherins" could be seen here again. Ron hating all Slytherins doesn't make senste considering his own grandmother was Slytherin. I would even say that Harry would have most reason to hate Slytherin. However, it seems that Ron accepted Daphne something more in the end.
I also liked that it is now known that the parchment is enchanted. That made no sense in the canon. The parchment as "leverage" or "sword of Damocles" can only serve its purpose if people also know that it exists.
Maybe kind-hearted Gryffindors do not recognize this xD
Looking forward to the next chapter! This could become a great fic.
12FreudentraeneReally nice chapter. Your writing style is great. Only the marriage thing with Goyle made me cringe. That's not funny, even as a joke xD
I liked your Daphne POV. She feels like a real person with her own ambitions, dreams, hopes, worries and fears. It seems she doesn't have the best relationship with her family. I'm curious what's that all about, even if the chapter has some hints. Some sentences have given me the impression that Daphne may have a crush on Harry.
One thing I've always found illogical is people don't knowing who Daphne is. Even if Harry and Ron had nothing to do with her, after four years, they should nevertheless at least know the names of the 50 students or so in their class.
I was also worried for a moment that "Ron's typical hatred of all Slytherins" could be seen here again. Ron hating all Slytherins doesn't make senste considering his own grandmother was Slytherin. I would even say that Harry would have most reason to hate Slytherin. However, it seems that Ron accepted Daphne something more in the end.
I also liked that it is now known that the parchment is enchanted. That made no sense in the canon. The parchment as "leverage" or "sword of Damocles" can only serve its purpose if people also know that it exists.
Maybe kind-hearted Gryffindors do not recognize this xD
Looking forward to the next chapter! This could become a great fic.
4/27/2020 c1 Surya
Awesome
Awesome
4/27/2020 c1 4RJ Griot
Really fun start. Nice character building. Novel way to introduce Daphne. Looking forward to more
4RJ GriotReally fun start. Nice character building. Novel way to introduce Daphne. Looking forward to more
4/27/2020 c1 6Mad Library Scientist
Ok, this is a VERY interesting start to what looks like a well-written story (caught a misspelled Daphone) near the end, but that was it.
I’m curious to see what Daphne's reaction would be if Harry would happen to drop the nugget of knowledge that he could have been sorted into Slytherin. The fact that your delving into her internal thoughts speaks well to your talent as a writer.
Anyway, I’m going to drop a Fave and a Follow, and I hope to see Chapter 2 soon!
6Mad Library ScientistOk, this is a VERY interesting start to what looks like a well-written story (caught a misspelled Daphone) near the end, but that was it.
I’m curious to see what Daphne's reaction would be if Harry would happen to drop the nugget of knowledge that he could have been sorted into Slytherin. The fact that your delving into her internal thoughts speaks well to your talent as a writer.
Anyway, I’m going to drop a Fave and a Follow, and I hope to see Chapter 2 soon!