for Lucy Alone5/21/2020 c1 
10Yuoaj009
Well done. Her despair was really evident, especially after Natsu’s first sentence. Maybe I was the only one, but a bit more background information about the mission might have enhanced the understanding of her breakdown. The actual reason. For instance, was it only the outcome or only her ‘lack of power’. The ending was good and gripping emotionally :)!
10Yuoaj009Well done. Her despair was really evident, especially after Natsu’s first sentence. Maybe I was the only one, but a bit more background information about the mission might have enhanced the understanding of her breakdown. The actual reason. For instance, was it only the outcome or only her ‘lack of power’. The ending was good and gripping emotionally :)!
4/29/2020 c1 93Jedi Jelsa777
This was really good! I could "see" it all unfold in front of me as I read. Well done!
93Jedi Jelsa777This was really good! I could "see" it all unfold in front of me as I read. Well done!