for Brockton's Celestial Forge8/6 c162 
2Lord Roustabout
Once again, I’m sorry to have to announce a delay, but I’m going to need another week to finish the chapter. I haven’t been able to write as much as I wanted and the next few days will be too hectic for me to be able to close out the chapter in the final stretch. I’m hoping that soon things will calm down enough to get back on my usual schedule and I apologize for the recent delays.
2Lord RoustaboutOnce again, I’m sorry to have to announce a delay, but I’m going to need another week to finish the chapter. I haven’t been able to write as much as I wanted and the next few days will be too hectic for me to be able to close out the chapter in the final stretch. I’m hoping that soon things will calm down enough to get back on my usual schedule and I apologize for the recent delays.
8/2 c162 Guest
Wow. What a read. Took me about three days to blaze through this gigantic story (I'm so glad I found it while I was on holiday and could focus on it properly!). Amazing story! You've built a remarkably understandable progression for Joe to become incredibly, unnaturally powerful. I'm not very familiar with either Worm or Jumpchain (but I'm a big SI fan and this started off as simply an innovative version of SI work to me) but I followed the whole story and got totally sucked in - I'm off to go and find some more Worm fanfic to devour now!
So impressed by the way you weave Joe's powers together to have crazy, hilarious and powerful results. You manage to keep him really connected to a lot of the people around him as well, and the Celestial Forge power-ups never actually overshadow the difficult family situation he's struggling with, or the various interpersonal relationships Joe is stumbling through.
I love the team you've built around him as well - did not expect Tybolt at all but he's brilliant! I think my favorite team member is between Fleet and Aisha - Aisha is very funny and adds a sense of both wonder and grounding to the team, but Fleet is also rather funny with his laid-back nature and the self-awareness of his own focus on vehicles/driving.
There's so many great underlying story threads as well - from the Panacea debacle, to Brian and Aisha's siblinghood not yet revealed, and of course the Sabah/Parian identity. Looking forward to seeing how these pan out around the story!
I think the one point you almost lost me was when Joe got several crazy power-ups in one chapter, and ended up some kind of Titan-dragon-monster thing? I was really enjoying seeing Apeiron/Joe interacting at a really human level even in the craziest situations, and I was wary the story was drifting from that. Thankfully I kept going, and the couple of chapters after that helped me get a better handle on the fact that Joe is all of these madly powerful titles/beings, but he's also still human and part of the wider human society. And particularly this last few chapters, attending Garment's benefit and managing to click woth Crystal Pelham, and then even managing to ask her out properly!
I really admire how well you've balanced the interludes, preambles and addendums as well - there is a lot of humour seeing how different people view things and seeing the different plans and power levels in play. Also really humanises characters like Miss Militia, Weld and Gully, Director Armstrong and Alec brilliantly.
Realising this is rather a long review, but your story is so good and I only just discovered it! Really enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing all your hard work!
Wow. What a read. Took me about three days to blaze through this gigantic story (I'm so glad I found it while I was on holiday and could focus on it properly!). Amazing story! You've built a remarkably understandable progression for Joe to become incredibly, unnaturally powerful. I'm not very familiar with either Worm or Jumpchain (but I'm a big SI fan and this started off as simply an innovative version of SI work to me) but I followed the whole story and got totally sucked in - I'm off to go and find some more Worm fanfic to devour now!
So impressed by the way you weave Joe's powers together to have crazy, hilarious and powerful results. You manage to keep him really connected to a lot of the people around him as well, and the Celestial Forge power-ups never actually overshadow the difficult family situation he's struggling with, or the various interpersonal relationships Joe is stumbling through.
I love the team you've built around him as well - did not expect Tybolt at all but he's brilliant! I think my favorite team member is between Fleet and Aisha - Aisha is very funny and adds a sense of both wonder and grounding to the team, but Fleet is also rather funny with his laid-back nature and the self-awareness of his own focus on vehicles/driving.
There's so many great underlying story threads as well - from the Panacea debacle, to Brian and Aisha's siblinghood not yet revealed, and of course the Sabah/Parian identity. Looking forward to seeing how these pan out around the story!
I think the one point you almost lost me was when Joe got several crazy power-ups in one chapter, and ended up some kind of Titan-dragon-monster thing? I was really enjoying seeing Apeiron/Joe interacting at a really human level even in the craziest situations, and I was wary the story was drifting from that. Thankfully I kept going, and the couple of chapters after that helped me get a better handle on the fact that Joe is all of these madly powerful titles/beings, but he's also still human and part of the wider human society. And particularly this last few chapters, attending Garment's benefit and managing to click woth Crystal Pelham, and then even managing to ask her out properly!
I really admire how well you've balanced the interludes, preambles and addendums as well - there is a lot of humour seeing how different people view things and seeing the different plans and power levels in play. Also really humanises characters like Miss Militia, Weld and Gully, Director Armstrong and Alec brilliantly.
Realising this is rather a long review, but your story is so good and I only just discovered it! Really enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing all your hard work!
7/31 c162 ArachnidHiveMind
The fact that Dauntless’ meeting with Apeiron was “yesterday” says things about this stories pacing. Like i love this story dont get me wrong, but we’re (completely spitballing here) like over 200k words later and probably something like a year of uploads, for a day of story.
The fact that Dauntless’ meeting with Apeiron was “yesterday” says things about this stories pacing. Like i love this story dont get me wrong, but we’re (completely spitballing here) like over 200k words later and probably something like a year of uploads, for a day of story.
7/28 c150 fanreader18
I hate this bitch so goddamn much. This self-absorbed piece of shit doesn't matter.
I hate this bitch so goddamn much. This self-absorbed piece of shit doesn't matter.
7/25 c162 Guest
wow
wow
7/25 c162 Guest
Christ, an Aperion level Garden of Eden Creation Kit. That could probably turn Mercery or Jupiter into paradise worlds.
Glad to see more of this fic, the other fics based off this thing just don't hold a candle to it.
Christ, an Aperion level Garden of Eden Creation Kit. That could probably turn Mercery or Jupiter into paradise worlds.
Glad to see more of this fic, the other fics based off this thing just don't hold a candle to it.
7/26 c162 Jack1nTheBox
war, war never changes.
Let's go Fallout tech! Gimme Mister Handy! Pretty please?
Anyway, thanks for the update, it was great, even if treatment felt a bit like an afterthought.
war, war never changes.
Let's go Fallout tech! Gimme Mister Handy! Pretty please?
Anyway, thanks for the update, it was great, even if treatment felt a bit like an afterthought.
7/26 c1 1DevilAreBack
Nice Chapter, getting some progres done.
Although i dont understand your hangup on the case 69.
Sure some internet trolls would find it funny and the recipient itself(a teenage girl) might feel some annoyance but the fact that even high level government officials seem to cringe at it makes no sense. For most adults it should simply be a number. If the government had a problem with it they wouldnt have plastered a big fat 69 on the tower of the USS Eisenhower.
1DevilAreBackNice Chapter, getting some progres done.
Although i dont understand your hangup on the case 69.
Sure some internet trolls would find it funny and the recipient itself(a teenage girl) might feel some annoyance but the fact that even high level government officials seem to cringe at it makes no sense. For most adults it should simply be a number. If the government had a problem with it they wouldnt have plastered a big fat 69 on the tower of the USS Eisenhower.