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for Nobody be stealing my sissy

5/6 c1 12Goji House
Okay...I have a few things to say or ask.

How old is Jack-Jack in this story?

Why is Alex from Walking With Dinosaurs here? If he's in here, it should be a crossover.

Now onto the things I have to say. You're still breaking guidelines, you're not allowed to write in script form. It's not like it's gonna turned into a cartoon or something. The idea itself isn't bad, but make sure it doesn't turn into those trashy romance fics on this site, have some twists. But don't go too crazy on twists.

Overall, it's not completely bad, but it needs serious improvement.

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