for Is it wrong to hunt monsters in a dungeon and adventure outside it?9/19/2023 c8 Boghog
So far I do like this story and wish for it to be updated.
I do have a pet peeve with your style of writing.
It's that your characters talk way too much and in massive run on sentences.
An example being that you constantly mention that Ais is considered a quiet child yet every time she talks it's a massive paragraph of every single detail possible that honestly isn't even required for said conversation.
I find my eyes start to glaze over whenever characters start talking to each other in massive paragraphs that never end.
So far I do like this story and wish for it to be updated.
I do have a pet peeve with your style of writing.
It's that your characters talk way too much and in massive run on sentences.
An example being that you constantly mention that Ais is considered a quiet child yet every time she talks it's a massive paragraph of every single detail possible that honestly isn't even required for said conversation.
I find my eyes start to glaze over whenever characters start talking to each other in massive paragraphs that never end.
1/17/2023 c2 Isekaiboi
This is a pain for the eyes, I wanted to give this story a chance but really the more I read the worse it got, that's as far as I get, good luck.
This is a pain for the eyes, I wanted to give this story a chance but really the more I read the worse it got, that's as far as I get, good luck.
1/10/2023 c1 Onxio
Honestly I would've red this if Bell was one of those henta thicc hip and ass girly traps he's not even canonicaly close to looking like a trap
Honestly I would've red this if Bell was one of those henta thicc hip and ass girly traps he's not even canonicaly close to looking like a trap
25/26/2021 c8 Bluemage3
Stats change letters every 100 points in a stat for a total of 999 baring exceptions that break the soft cap
Per level
I0 to I99
H100 to H199
G200 to G299
F300 to F399
E400 to E499
D500 to D599
C600 to C699
B700 to B799
A800 to A899
S900 to S999
SS1000 to SS1299
Stats change letters every 100 points in a stat for a total of 999 baring exceptions that break the soft cap
Per level
I0 to I99
H100 to H199
G200 to G299
F300 to F399
E400 to E499
D500 to D599
C600 to C699
B700 to B799
A800 to A899
S900 to S999
SS1000 to SS1299
4/8/2021 c1 BlackStarMage
This sounds great so far, and I look forward to what's written so far. I just have one question. Who in the world names a child Feline? that completely threw me off. Other wise, like I said, completely looking forward to what else is written.
This sounds great so far, and I look forward to what's written so far. I just have one question. Who in the world names a child Feline? that completely threw me off. Other wise, like I said, completely looking forward to what else is written.
10/4/2020 c9 BravoEchoVictor
Kekekeke, Its great seeing a bunch of random characters I know and trying to remeber and place them all :DDDDDD
Kekekeke, Its great seeing a bunch of random characters I know and trying to remeber and place them all :DDDDDD
6/16/2020 c3 Rafafalafa
Oh gawd, multiple pov switches in quick succession? I am triggered. I'm not even kidding, I have to stop reading. Sorry; other than that thing's have been great so far.
Oh gawd, multiple pov switches in quick succession? I am triggered. I'm not even kidding, I have to stop reading. Sorry; other than that thing's have been great so far.
6/16/2020 c2 Rafafalafa
Most of the chapter being nothing but exposition was a little frustrating, but I'm not sure what else you could have done other than skip the walk all together. Besides we got a little character development from those two - the pov shift at the end though was... well, it was bad practice. Don't shift pov in a chapter, if you don't need to shift pov for long enough that you could write most of a chapter from the pov, then you probably shouldn't do it. That's just writing tips from some rando, but I'm being legit about it.
Use your google powers to find writing tips if you don't believe me.
Most of the chapter being nothing but exposition was a little frustrating, but I'm not sure what else you could have done other than skip the walk all together. Besides we got a little character development from those two - the pov shift at the end though was... well, it was bad practice. Don't shift pov in a chapter, if you don't need to shift pov for long enough that you could write most of a chapter from the pov, then you probably shouldn't do it. That's just writing tips from some rando, but I'm being legit about it.
Use your google powers to find writing tips if you don't believe me.
6/16/2020 c1 Rafafalafa
Okay, I was skeptical at first; but I think I'm into this.
Okay, I was skeptical at first; but I think I'm into this.
5/28/2020 c6 BravoEchoVictor
Yay the inventory is not one of those stupid ones, It is waht makes the most sense, a vacuum dimention that can be accessed by the user, being a vacuum it would be cool and there is no air for the bacteria to travel in either that or its just sterile
Yay the inventory is not one of those stupid ones, It is waht makes the most sense, a vacuum dimention that can be accessed by the user, being a vacuum it would be cool and there is no air for the bacteria to travel in either that or its just sterile
5/27/2020 c1 BravoEchoVictor
This is pretty interesting, I mean I hate harems but I am more than happy to give this a shot, It looks really interesting with a lot of small things that make it extremely interesting well that and having a female MC makes it look good in my books :D
This is pretty interesting, I mean I hate harems but I am more than happy to give this a shot, It looks really interesting with a lot of small things that make it extremely interesting well that and having a female MC makes it look good in my books :D