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19h c32 adfranke1
nice update
7/22 c32 Arial Wolf
totally fricking awesome bloody brilliant thank you for this amazing tale can't wait to see what happens next time thanks for being a brilliant wonderful genius writer thanks you rock
7/19 c32 Guest
Another great chapter! Glad Eddie is finally gone, though a bit worried about the situation with Victoria.

Looking forward to the next chapter!
7/19 c31 3Diana9922
Well written, I love this story.
When next?
7/19 c32 mhmm1749
Great chapter as always, and this one in particular was extra good
7/18 c32 5Jay aka Jordan
Poor Carlisle man’s dead heart probably broke
7/18 c6 andrewpine
I gather Jacob and the boys will lose their crap when they smell Rose's sweatshirt.
7/18 c3 andrewpine
What i see happening is that when Eddikins throws a fit because he lost his blood bag and Carlisle backs him Jasper can just knock them out and Rose can burn the pieces.
7/18 c32 1catgrl
Yay so Edward and Victoria have been taken care of finally. Bella’s after graduation plans sound like fun it would be cool if Paul and Angela went to. Hope everyone is ok. Can’t wait for the next chapter.
7/14 c31 mhmm1749
Fantastic story, it's very well written.. But...:
Somewhere near the beginning, Edward taunted Rosalie by saying that it was him that Bella called for in her sleep. There was no context for this, we didn't get to read about it and it wasn't explained so I'm not sure what that was about.

There were some inconsistencies, I assume because it's so long between when the chapters were written that it's hard to remember everything. Bella asked about what happens when vampires eat food, first on her date with Rosalie, and then again at the Museum with Jasper as if Rosalie hadn't already explained it. Then there's Bella's attitude towards becoming a vampire. She switched back and forth between being unsure if she wanted it at all and being certain about turning in a few years, this could make sense, but the way it was written seemed more like you just didn't remember what her stance was supposed to be.

Very minor detail but enough to bother me was when Jasper first visited Bella, he jumped through the window with no warning and scared the bejesus out of her for no reason. It seemed very out of character with how he was portrayed throughout the rest of the story so I thought it was worth mentioning.

Again, fantastic story and I look forward to the next update.
6/16 c31 Guest
so good
6/18 c31 5Jay aka Jordan
Bella and Angela are the best besties
6/17 c1 3Guddu tales
Love this story. Hope you continue writing
6/16 c31 AmbreCaldero
We're getting closer and closer. Can't wait.
Thanks for sharing.
I hope you have a nice day/evening
6/16 c31 1catgrl
Poor Charlie only wanting to help protect Bella. Hope this plan to get Victoria and Edward works and things are able to settle down. Can’t wait for the next chapter.
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