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6/6 c4 15spongecake 2
Hey ho,

Also a really good one. I like the turn from serious and moody to lighter and more casual, usually it's the other way around but I like the change. All of the Garrus stuff was great, you write him really close to the game. Just... really really strong. Looking forward to the next one!
Favourite line: "I'd love to hear more about your mother. When it stops hurting."
"When the job is done."

Thumbs up to you.
6/4 c3 Squid
Really beautiful work! :3

Good luck with this fantastic project. Already I can tell It's gonna be exiting. Keep up with the amazing work!

Squid!
6/5 c3 spongecake 2
Hey ho! Given that I've read all these today, thought I'd drop my review of each chapter in one go;

Day One: I like the imagery of describing Garrus as mercury; the contrast between anger and composure, the line about toxicity, it's good. Also, both her and his thoughts very much capture a "Oh no they're hot" moment. Would've liked some connection between Shep's first thought and Garrus' last thought, though. Feels odd to start with mercury and metal and contrasts, then end with stars on skin.
Favourite line:

Day Two: "Why not use your omni-tool? You can get millions of books and not be motivated to read any of them," Garrus sneered, sipping from his coffee. "Also, you know the Beatles are overrated, right? Also, I have a Macbook."
Sorry, I feel like it's 2010, reading that line.
This is probably my favourite one. Despite the very casual contents, there's the constant reminder of the dangerous universe around them, which adds a great thread through it.
Favourite line: He says it with such conviction that, for three seconds, Shepard almost believes him.

Day Three: Another really good one. The heavy weight of the conflict is a big theme of ME, and it feels like you really capture that. This stuff feels like dialogue from the game itself.
Favourite line: In a galaxy at war, he was her piece of peace.

Thumbs up to you!
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6/3 c1 Pie high
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Milky seat
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