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6/25 c4 102ChibiDawn23
Okay I'm totally onboard with this. Giselle is creeping me out and I'm genuinely worried for Davenport. Guy's my favorite character and he's in mortal danger lol.

My only suggestion would be to split out your dialogue, every time someone new talks, or it on a new line, just helps with readability. It'll also help ratchet up that tension that you're building so well and give more punch to those good Donald lines and the funny Salem ones :)

Looking forward to more!
6/25 c3 ChibiDawn23
"Plus it was just Douglas." XD I love this family.

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