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6/18 c1 CacioEPepe
Thank you so much for this fanfic! I was desperately looking for a Jac fic that I didn't read, the timing of your publication is perfect ;)
The storyline is great, the end is lovely, and I really apreciated the way you portraied the existing characters.
However, it took me ages to read it, as I had to reread some paragraphs to understand the whole of it. Your fic is written as a succession of events, most of them without any transition. And you really get the reader lost when you switch from one location to another without explaining it properly (without even leaving a blank line actually).
Also I was a bit confused about the fact that we are not given a lot of background about Alice.
I think it was important for me to tell you about it, because it has the potential to be a hell of a story, and I really enjoyed reading it :) I don't know if you are planing to write a chapter two, but if you do I will gladly read it!

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