for A New Life9/9/2024 c1 the Juicer
I think the world issue is like the spider man: spiderverse cannon event not happening.
I think the world issue is like the spider man: spiderverse cannon event not happening.
10/20/2021 c8 DeathWing-GPV
I'd be quite interested to see where you take this story. Not often that I find a nymph Harry in any kind of crossover.
I'd be quite interested to see where you take this story. Not often that I find a nymph Harry in any kind of crossover.
1/22/2021 c8 APridefulSin
oh shxt... yeah I'd be bothered by that alone too. comparing someone to zeus isn't a good thing in my book!
oh shxt... yeah I'd be bothered by that alone too. comparing someone to zeus isn't a good thing in my book!
8/14/2020 c8 
13Have a Little Feith
And just like that, I suddenly don't want to read this anymore, with that reference to Zeus' well known atrocity. Specifically the one that Naofumi was accused of by the uncrowned first princess. If Harry was r*ped by Aultcray, congrats, you are now a yaoi writer. Harry was male originally, and still identifies himself as male. If a male r*pes someone who identifies as male, that's still gay. And don't get me wrong, it's not the yaoi hint that's pushing me away, it's the r*pe as a plot point, the fact that it was a male doing that to another male just pushes it further. And boy, is the queen going to be super pissed at the king, for violating hospitality rules, especially since Harry was a guest of the queen, if I'm reading the situation correctly.
13Have a Little FeithAnd just like that, I suddenly don't want to read this anymore, with that reference to Zeus' well known atrocity. Specifically the one that Naofumi was accused of by the uncrowned first princess. If Harry was r*ped by Aultcray, congrats, you are now a yaoi writer. Harry was male originally, and still identifies himself as male. If a male r*pes someone who identifies as male, that's still gay. And don't get me wrong, it's not the yaoi hint that's pushing me away, it's the r*pe as a plot point, the fact that it was a male doing that to another male just pushes it further. And boy, is the queen going to be super pissed at the king, for violating hospitality rules, especially since Harry was a guest of the queen, if I'm reading the situation correctly.
7/31/2020 c7 black spring lotus
Now as much as I am enjoying this story, or at least the concept (Harry Potter being crossed over with Rise of the Shield Hero is already a great idea). I've noticed that Harry kind of seems more like an afterthought than an actual character at this point in the story.
What I mean by that is, his connections with Naofumi and Raphtalia seem extremely shallow at best and shoehorned at worst. Being with Naofumi, he should've immediately been noticed by his side since after the rape accusation, anyone "choosing" to be by his side would raise eyebrows. All eyes are always on Naofumi, especially if he's being called out by one of the other Cardinal Heroes.
I find it hard to believe that they didn't notice him immediately and only did when the Shield Party is leaving, and Naofumi calls out his name along with Raphtalia's. Unless I missed something and he's going around invisible on purpose (I doubt it, but maybe I'm missing something).
Tbh, Harry, despite being the POV, seems to be the one who is the most neglected out of the three. I'd like to see him become more active (actively contributing to the story) opposed to passive (only contributing in response to something) character he has been for all the current chapters. At least a mix of both would be good, because right now he is only the latter.
Here's to hoping that this changes sooner rather than later. Otherwise, someone could honestly go with canon.
Now as much as I am enjoying this story, or at least the concept (Harry Potter being crossed over with Rise of the Shield Hero is already a great idea). I've noticed that Harry kind of seems more like an afterthought than an actual character at this point in the story.
What I mean by that is, his connections with Naofumi and Raphtalia seem extremely shallow at best and shoehorned at worst. Being with Naofumi, he should've immediately been noticed by his side since after the rape accusation, anyone "choosing" to be by his side would raise eyebrows. All eyes are always on Naofumi, especially if he's being called out by one of the other Cardinal Heroes.
I find it hard to believe that they didn't notice him immediately and only did when the Shield Party is leaving, and Naofumi calls out his name along with Raphtalia's. Unless I missed something and he's going around invisible on purpose (I doubt it, but maybe I'm missing something).
Tbh, Harry, despite being the POV, seems to be the one who is the most neglected out of the three. I'd like to see him become more active (actively contributing to the story) opposed to passive (only contributing in response to something) character he has been for all the current chapters. At least a mix of both would be good, because right now he is only the latter.
Here's to hoping that this changes sooner rather than later. Otherwise, someone could honestly go with canon.
7/24/2020 c6 SailorSenpai156
i really like this concept! just a small nitpick, but i kinda wish that the chapters were longer. anyways, keep up the good work! i cant wait to see were this story goes :)))
i really like this concept! just a small nitpick, but i kinda wish that the chapters were longer. anyways, keep up the good work! i cant wait to see were this story goes :)))
7/23/2020 c5 I. P. Frealy
Imagine using the term intersex in 2020. Intersex has been out dated since 1998
Imagine using the term intersex in 2020. Intersex has been out dated since 1998
6/24/2020 c2 Guest
Change paragraphs when you switch speakers.
Change paragraphs when you switch speakers.
6/25/2020 c2 Marshman101
This is interesting I shall follow you till you make more, and then continue till it’s done
This is interesting I shall follow you till you make more, and then continue till it’s done