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7/9/2020 c8 Guest
Fantastic AU journey
Like What-If scenario the author kindly plot. Although I’m really sad for Nami mother. One piece in majority is a bloody anyway.

Wandering how Luffy will start his adventures ; maybe by planning ahead with Dragon . What is interesting is the identity of that woman in Nami village, just guessing, could it be Moodie who accompanied Fullbody to the Baratie and dined with him.

Cannon plot becoming boring and different start will be awesome , where the author is very kind to share this story with innovation.

Now he meet Nami earlier, how about Zoro and Sanj and ... . Maybe the timeline will be shifted in this AU somehow for some events as decided by the author.

But how about Merry and could it be different larger design. I like it in this story that the outcomes is better with shank. Thank you

Maybe :
- savo Koby earlier and maybe at Alivia island
- brilliant for the map Luffy had that mad Buggy one useless. I don’t like Buggy

Sorry, I’m running out of ideas at the moment

Best Regards
7/9/2020 c8 Mystery56
Sabo and Ace are in-character and you're doing a good job with Luffy so dont worry. Otherwise a great chapter hope you keep making these
7/9/2020 c8 sasukesdoom
i like your characters so far! like what you did with garp. that was pretty cool :D
7/9/2020 c8 2sess18
I wonder is the first thing he is going to say is Hey Dad
7/9/2020 c8 2Kintin23
This is a really great story. Good Peggy Sues are rare and most of them are super short, so I'm glad that this one is still going strong!

To answer your question, the characters are all well done. The thing with Garp kicking Jinbe's ass was unexpected but it really is something he would do, so good job thinking that one up. You also did a good job making Luffy seem more mature without making him un-Luffyish which is generally hard to do. Most bad Peggy Sue fics fail at that and suffer for it, but you did it well.

Definitely excited for more!
7/9/2020 c8 Nami4Life
Wow ,you packed this chapter with goodness ,I was glad it was Garp that picked them up ,but I bet the boys were not so happy about it ,haha . Was not expecting Garp to beat the shit out of Jimbei and almost start a war with Whitebeard ,that part was sick ,it did not bother me because it was not strawhat Jimbei ,I felt it was Garp’s obligation to do so for what Jimbei indirectly did ,just as Whitebeard was obligated to go to fishmen island as a result ,really liked all that Twist . I knew Sabo had to leave at some point to continue with his path to and with the revolutionary army ,let’s see what happens with Luffy and Dragon ,all in all another damn good chapter . Ps ,Luffy should modify and wear that seastone bracelet ,it will surely help him.
7/9/2020 c8 Abdur Rauf Aymaan
they're about 80% or more in character id , thanks for the chap and i hope you update soon.
7/9/2020 c8 CharmingButIrrational
wait they didn't kill Arlong? just shoot him in the head or chop his head off? i mean it sounds they're gonna kill him but with drugs but why? sounds too much effort. just chop him into pieces or whatever and then burn him.
7/9/2020 c8 WhiteyWolf26
Ok, question first! Hmmm... I'd say they're definitely mostlly in-character. More importantly, any deviation has a /reason/ and comes as a natural progression/consequence of altered circumstances as well dynamics between people.
Like, the core aspects of their personalities are still there, but they're wheigted differently? Does that make sense. I mean, Ace for example is still protective of his brother to the point of a complex, and can still get irritated to the point where he'd like to hit Luffy over the head. But due to Luffy's changes the dynamic between them changed (for example Luffy being stronger than Ace alters the "weak, crybaby btother that needs to be protected" aspect of their relationship).

Which... is a very convoluted way to say that any changes to their characterisation I witnessed so far -as far as they exist in the first place- are fine and don't worry, you're doing a good job. :)

As for the rest... I liked this chapter a lot! :D You handled your "resources" (meaning, the canon aspects reasonably available to you at this point in the story) very well to resolve a few things and to interesting results at that, that will certainly bring forth their own interesting little changes later on. Yep, I like this, definitely.
7/9/2020 c8 Zeke Jones
Thanks for the chapter!
Another another timeline error. This was all happening after the world noble and the fire and Sabo "dying", yet is this first time Sabo meets Garp? In Canon, Garp actually met Sabo, adopted him with fists of love and everything. Heck, he is the reason why the 3 moved out of Dadan's place and built themselves their treehouse base. Speaking of which, before all that trouble in Goa, they had been living together for quite some time, yet in the previous chapter, you wrote Luffy and Ace living at Dadan's and Sabo in a hideout in the forest.
Other than that, no misses.

Qotd: they are mostly perfectly in character! The only ooc thing I notice in Luffy, is that he is keeping the time travel secret. Canon Luffy is terrible at keeping secrets, would not think of the consequences of telling them, would probably not consider it important enough to warrant secrecy, and even if he did, he wouldn't keep it from his Nakama or family.
7/9/2020 c8 Eminated
I’d say your depiction of the characters are splendid. One thing I especially like is that you’re luffy is not some huge cry baby. For some reason a lot of authors like to make luffy out to be someone who needs to be coddled and cries a bunch when really luffy only needs minutes to release his emotions and then he’s completely back to normal. I also really liked that you made nami not addicted to money since she hasn’t had to have hoarded it for a decade in this timeline, I’m excited for the other changes to her character and can’t wait for the next update. Stay safe
7/9/2020 c8 Schey-Drin Abusaman
can you please stop with the fucking cliffhanger ? it's annoying as shit ...
7/9/2020 c8 Gwendolyn Montrose
I really like your story. And I totally agree that the pacing of the story is perfect. To your question, I think that with the exception of Nami and the later characters (I don't know until what arch you want to include the crew members) should stay as much in character as possible:)
7/9/2020 c7 Nami4Life
First ,the pacing is really good ,I’m not overwhelmed by anything you wrote nor am I wishing it to be faster . Second ,what you wrote was really good ,give yourself more credit . If that does not make Nami join him ,then all hope is lost ,haha ,Luffy now has 8 years to get back close to his original strength ,please keep writing , because I don’t wanna stop reading.
7/9/2020 c6 Nami4Life
You need to give yourself more credit ,the whole chapter and the fight scenes ,Sabo and Ace vs fishmen and Luffy vs arlong were very well written ,the duration of the fights was pretty spot on ,they weren’t too short and they did not drag out and become tedious ,the objective was achieved and Nami does not suffer the same fate ,love it ,so good but what happens next ?.
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