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8/28 c5 enderchem.oss.jr
Ok, so far is actually getting good and interesting to read, the interaction of those two universes is quite intriguing indeed
So I will continue to read it
Keep up the good work!
8/28 c2 enderchem.oss.jr
Heh, Ok, you got me, good work
8/28 c1 enderchem.oss.jr
Ok, fist of all, it's not a bad beginning, but really... mc-chan?! Come on at least make it a OC, it but still, I could be interesting to read, let's see where this one goes
7/11 c5 Guest-Questioner
Well if THIS doesn't scream mary-sue, i don't know what does!

Ahem,

Will these "power's" at the VERY LEAST, be "awakened" ONLY during, critical, story moving, moment's?

It DOES in fact, get boring when a character can just about, brutalize their opponent so very easily
and come out completely unscathed.

Extra service advice:

The story, depicts Ophis was, like Great Red, a dragon, HOWEVER,

how, could an organic life-form, come into existence in a realm, of literal nothingness?

They can't, so-to-speak.

in another story, ophis is depicted as a brand new form of life energy,
forged from the thought's, emotion's, all thing's alive, in the universe, when Great red,
first entered into, that emptiness, the energy of life, also poured in, and eventually,
it coalesced, and gained an individual consciousness (Ophis)

SORRY, MY BAD, NOT THE POINT!

Ahem, will this O.C, be just as if not more so, powerful than Great Red himself?

I mean like, Trihexa powerful, outright or not, at the end of the day, that is to say?

I have an "desire" to follow this story, but not because i want,
just another overpowered character, but because, i want to see, how the original canon story-line,
can be flipped on it's imaginary head, with something that could "break" the flow of thing's!

End Review.
7/11 c4 Guest
So when will MC meet her Zanpakuto spirit
7/11 c3 blbla
This is a fun story
7/7 c3 Peroroncino
Can't wait for your next update Andi hope the MC won't join Rias Peerage cuz that would ruin the Plot of The story she could just go solo and maybeake the 3 factions nuts
7/6 c3 Peroroncino
More Plsssssss
7/5 c3 Guest-Questioner
So the question is, That this female O.C... Is a mary-sue in the making?

My reasoning:

Well, having overwhelming power to take on a creature,
with power enough to destroy whole island's, with the same level of power.

Now, becoming so relied upon by the main cast, that the story cannot, move forward,
in ANY way, without her being at center of it all.

Next, having herself, be so "perfect" that story character's could never go beyond a certain point,
the other character's eventually, becoming one-dimensional, in favor of this original character.

End reasoning, End review.
6/28 c2 123ABIR123
Please update more and make the mc fuck up the canon story
6/28 c2 123ABIR123
Pls update more and make the mc fuck up the canon story
6/28 c1 Guest
The third jumpchain fic I see

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