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4/27/2021 c2 21MerlinIsAwesomeDon'tArgue
Oooooooh. A winged beast you say?
I get teh idea of thsi chapter and I like it, but maybe add a bit more description to what's happening.
And also maybe use these: "
instead of saying
Me:
:
You get it?
4/27/2021 c1 MerlinIsAwesomeDon'tArgue
Ooh, I love it so far.
it was actually Nancy Bobofit but...

In the books grover is 27. Lol, I can't wait to see what's next.
2/11/2021 c30 4TheGirlofManyFloods
Yup! That would be awesome!
10/29/2020 c1 1Greekopolis Spark
Gr8 story, such a twist Artemis is said to be maiden but you well twisted it
10/4/2020 c1 Hehe
They’re kids of Artemis aren’t they
9/23/2020 c25 12StarOfOlympus
Yay we reached Hades! FINALLY
Can't wait to see how the whole thing goes :)
9/20/2020 c3 Percy Nightshade
I like the story I would like to let you know that if you break your neck you would be paralyzed or be dead
9/15/2020 c22 StarOfOlympus
I liked the whole bargainning thing
9/15/2020 c21 StarOfOlympus
Im just going to assume the bold chapters are on purpose
9/15/2020 c20 StarOfOlympus
Are you doing the bold chapters on purpose? Also, how much strategy is there to rock paper scissors?
9/15/2020 c19 StarOfOlympus
Again, the whole chapter is in bold. Also, that line doesn't seem particularly Ares, he always seemed like one of the gods that adapted to the modern era really well (i.e. motorbike), and that line seemed very old fashioned.
9/15/2020 c14 StarOfOlympus
Uhhh question, why is the entire chapter in bold?
9/15/2020 c10 StarOfOlympus
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUN
9/15/2020 c8 StarOfOlympus
All three of them getting claimed at the same time is a bit of a stretch, especially when the scene of Percy getting claimed is such a climax point in the original books.
9/15/2020 c3 StarOfOlympus
In the last chapter you used more of a script style, but in this one you've used a story format. Try to keep your writing styles constant.
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