for Black Feather Song9/23/2020 c33 Guest
Ah yes. Sandwiches
Ah yes. Sandwiches
9/17/2020 c1 XenoLucifer
So... a slut musician? gotcha, no need to read this story then. Why is it so difficult to find a story where the female doesn't fuck every creature she comes across? this is why I prefer male OC stories smh.
So... a slut musician? gotcha, no need to read this story then. Why is it so difficult to find a story where the female doesn't fuck every creature she comes across? this is why I prefer male OC stories smh.
9/9/2020 c30 Tery11
I really like your story..Don't know why it doesn't have more rewies but keep up the good work!
I really like your story..Don't know why it doesn't have more rewies but keep up the good work!
8/19/2020 c23 
6Nightfire1023
This is a pretty good story. Well written well set up, some flaws but nothings perfect. The part between point of joining the crew and to after the time skip was a little funky but you controlled it with logic. Over all so far 7/10.
6Nightfire1023This is a pretty good story. Well written well set up, some flaws but nothings perfect. The part between point of joining the crew and to after the time skip was a little funky but you controlled it with logic. Over all so far 7/10.
8/19/2020 c23 Guest
hope u make a good song with Brook and funny part
hope u make a good song with Brook and funny part
8/16/2020 c1 Vergil Leonidas
TL;DR - it's a good story with a couple of flaws but, I liked it.
I have to be honest, one of the reasons I clicked on this story was the fact that it had no reviews, 1 favorite and 1 follow as well as 25k words and currently 19 chapters. You've written 19 chapters with basically no feedback and I have to acknowledge that. It must have been difficult to keep going.
Here's a thing, the story has some problems, potential deal-breakers and I'll get to that, however, it's not so bad that it doesn't deserve reviews. I've written far worse stories when I first started and even they were getting reviews. Now, let's get to the story, shall we?
I like the idea of a musician OC, it's not overused and it looks like you're not going with the usual Straw Hat OC, so it's an interesting idea. Next up, you set up the story in Sabaody, which really helps set the stage, it allows Katya to get involved with the plot and it doesn't feel forced, she's there for a reason. Also, I like her name, it has this strange mixture of Japanese-sounding last name and Russian/Slavic-sounding first name, and it's easy to remember and it just stuck with for some reason.
So, overall, it's really nice, it's definitely good enough to give it a chance, which I'm definitely going to do tomorrow because I really need sleep now.
Still, I do need to address some things. Katya slept with Kid because she was bored, first of all, it's a bit off-putting, I just started liking the character and she just, kind of seems like she sleeps around for no good reason. It almost feels like you were looking for one thing that could make her not perfect. Combine that with the idea that pretty much everyone likes her in this chapter, the exception being Law likely due to broken heart or something, and you could get an OC that's just, sort of boring.
The biggest problem might actually be the way you write, I find it hard to picture anything, people ask, sigh, gasp, but I don't really see much of body language, gestures, actions, it's mostly dialogue with very little description.
Well, that's what I got from this chapter, I'm eager to read more tomorrow and I'll be sure to leave more reviews. Maybe not as long as this one, but reviews nonetheless. If for no other reason, then because you really deserve them for tenacity. I'm sorry if this review came off as a bit too critical and negative, it's in no way my intention to discourage you. In fact, I'd appreciate it if you continued the story because there really is a potential here. Honestly, despite focusing on some of the flaws I noticed I really did enjoy it.
TL;DR - it's a good story with a couple of flaws but, I liked it.
I have to be honest, one of the reasons I clicked on this story was the fact that it had no reviews, 1 favorite and 1 follow as well as 25k words and currently 19 chapters. You've written 19 chapters with basically no feedback and I have to acknowledge that. It must have been difficult to keep going.
Here's a thing, the story has some problems, potential deal-breakers and I'll get to that, however, it's not so bad that it doesn't deserve reviews. I've written far worse stories when I first started and even they were getting reviews. Now, let's get to the story, shall we?
I like the idea of a musician OC, it's not overused and it looks like you're not going with the usual Straw Hat OC, so it's an interesting idea. Next up, you set up the story in Sabaody, which really helps set the stage, it allows Katya to get involved with the plot and it doesn't feel forced, she's there for a reason. Also, I like her name, it has this strange mixture of Japanese-sounding last name and Russian/Slavic-sounding first name, and it's easy to remember and it just stuck with for some reason.
So, overall, it's really nice, it's definitely good enough to give it a chance, which I'm definitely going to do tomorrow because I really need sleep now.
Still, I do need to address some things. Katya slept with Kid because she was bored, first of all, it's a bit off-putting, I just started liking the character and she just, kind of seems like she sleeps around for no good reason. It almost feels like you were looking for one thing that could make her not perfect. Combine that with the idea that pretty much everyone likes her in this chapter, the exception being Law likely due to broken heart or something, and you could get an OC that's just, sort of boring.
The biggest problem might actually be the way you write, I find it hard to picture anything, people ask, sigh, gasp, but I don't really see much of body language, gestures, actions, it's mostly dialogue with very little description.
Well, that's what I got from this chapter, I'm eager to read more tomorrow and I'll be sure to leave more reviews. Maybe not as long as this one, but reviews nonetheless. If for no other reason, then because you really deserve them for tenacity. I'm sorry if this review came off as a bit too critical and negative, it's in no way my intention to discourage you. In fact, I'd appreciate it if you continued the story because there really is a potential here. Honestly, despite focusing on some of the flaws I noticed I really did enjoy it.