for Sword after Spring4/24 c11 Guest
These pig authors use really annoying storytelling techniques, sometimes using first names, sometimes using last names, sometimes using physical characteristics. Fuck, can't you guys use normal storytelling techniques?
These pig authors use really annoying storytelling techniques, sometimes using first names, sometimes using last names, sometimes using physical characteristics. Fuck, can't you guys use normal storytelling techniques?
4/24 c9 sotamirentaro
Your way of telling the story is so complicated that it's annoying. There are many ways of telling stories that are both simple and good, but the author still likes to complicate things and as a result, it frustrates the reader, And many authors like to abuse the use of characteristics to describe characters and as a result, this way of telling stories attracts a lot of readers in some books, while the rest die young.
Your way of telling the story is so complicated that it's annoying. There are many ways of telling stories that are both simple and good, but the author still likes to complicate things and as a result, it frustrates the reader, And many authors like to abuse the use of characteristics to describe characters and as a result, this way of telling stories attracts a lot of readers in some books, while the rest die young.
4/20 c19 Guest
Very interested in learning more.
Shirou’s past life regression was as painful as one would expect for him. Him slowly piecing together how he lived, how identical it is to now, how he suffered, what and who he lost, how he failed and died, will he very interesting.
Maybe Issei will help him cope with having an entire past life’s worth of dead people. Or maybe his sister.
And I wonder how much Mephisto saw. Maybe now he’s gone full Hisoka. Idk.
Very interested in learning more.
Shirou’s past life regression was as painful as one would expect for him. Him slowly piecing together how he lived, how identical it is to now, how he suffered, what and who he lost, how he failed and died, will he very interesting.
Maybe Issei will help him cope with having an entire past life’s worth of dead people. Or maybe his sister.
And I wonder how much Mephisto saw. Maybe now he’s gone full Hisoka. Idk.
4/19 c16 Guest
I feel like Rin would say something like “hey, moron. You’re literally in your next life. Get those swords out of your head for once. And try to get laid. But I swear if you get with a girl hotter than me I’ll reincarnate into those world to beat the snot out of you.”
I feel like Rin would say something like “hey, moron. You’re literally in your next life. Get those swords out of your head for once. And try to get laid. But I swear if you get with a girl hotter than me I’ll reincarnate into those world to beat the snot out of you.”
4/19 c14 Guest
Very vast very complicated but very shallow
Sums up DxD in general.
Very vast very complicated but very shallow
Sums up DxD in general.
3/29 c19 
1Mighty Pen 20
I am of two minds as far as this story is concerned.
First off, is this a good story? Honestly, I don't know. Why? Because it is too soon to tell. So little has happened plot-wise that I'd have to read a lot more to figure it out.
And that brings us to the next point. Pacing. It is slow. That's not always a bad thing. It is a choice the writer makes and it is also a matter of taste. But in addition to the pacing it feels like you occasionally pad up your word count even more by making your descriptions long-winded. This issue was glaringly obvious in the first chapters but it has slowly been getting better.
On the other hand - technically speaking, this is very good. Your vocabulary and grammar are at a much higher level than most of the stories we usually encounter on this website. Good job.
Where does that leave us? I am definitely interested in the story. I want to find out what is going to happen next. But I also know that it will take a pretty long time for things to move forward, which means I'll have to wait for at least 100 k words of new content to be published before checking this out again.
I wish all the best to you and most importantly, have fun writing your story!
1Mighty Pen 20I am of two minds as far as this story is concerned.
First off, is this a good story? Honestly, I don't know. Why? Because it is too soon to tell. So little has happened plot-wise that I'd have to read a lot more to figure it out.
And that brings us to the next point. Pacing. It is slow. That's not always a bad thing. It is a choice the writer makes and it is also a matter of taste. But in addition to the pacing it feels like you occasionally pad up your word count even more by making your descriptions long-winded. This issue was glaringly obvious in the first chapters but it has slowly been getting better.
On the other hand - technically speaking, this is very good. Your vocabulary and grammar are at a much higher level than most of the stories we usually encounter on this website. Good job.
Where does that leave us? I am definitely interested in the story. I want to find out what is going to happen next. But I also know that it will take a pretty long time for things to move forward, which means I'll have to wait for at least 100 k words of new content to be published before checking this out again.
I wish all the best to you and most importantly, have fun writing your story!
3/26 c19 Guest
This was a very interesting chapter.
Shirou's really not liking the attention he's gotten. Have to get used to it.
Issei and his 2 friends really haven't learned their lesson. Can't believe he was trying to excuse his two friends when Shirou pointed it out how it was their antics that caused the Kendo Club to look at him and Shirou suspiciously. They can't get mad that Shirou is getting attention (or looked favorably) from others when they're the ones who continue to do actions that gets them despised by the school students (especially the girls). Can't believe Issei suggest using Kotetsu's popularity to do perverted actions. While I do agree that Issei and his 2 friends are good people at heart, I'm starting to think Kotetsu should hang out with other people during school, cause it feels like Issei is going to get despised like the other 2; and I'm not want Shirou to get dragged with them.
That meeting with Mephisto was really interesting. Time is running out fast regarding having to make a choice, so it's not surprising that Kotetsu is having this meeting despite his reservations. We got some bits about how Human Magic existed in this (DxD) world, and how it came about. It seems that Shirou being able to collect magical energy and store it inside himself automatically is another thing that caught Mephisto's attention.
The meeting in the inner world was really sad. When Shirou was mentioning of grieving his entire life, it reminds me of the first chapter, where Anastasia mention of Shirou's face when he first tried Kyudo early.
Looks like the confrontation with Freed (along with what other hidden agents of the church) is already being foreshadowed.
This is making me wonder how the story will progress in regards to Shirou and the magicians. Like you've said, I think he hasn't really opened his magic circuits in HF(it was only brought up in UBW when Archer was checking on Shirou's arm was numb after the confrontation with Kazuki and Caster, and Rin only gave him some basic teachings in Fate (not sure if she also did in UBW)). I wonder if having basic formulas and mathematical equations with benefit Shirou with his magecraft (like make things easier for him). Now that I think about it, Shirou reincarnating with his magic circuits (plus 10 from the arm) basically means that his body is ' naturally ' born with UBW (unlike in the VN, where (unless more information comes in) he comes from a normal family, and that his elemental affinity was forcefully changed that caused UBW to be 'born' in him); which could mean his body is more 'naturally' tuned to his UBW and magecraft. With this reveal of magic circuits, it makes me wonder in Samiya and Luvia (along with anyone else in the organization) with come up with ways to have magic circuits of their own; along with figuring out (if Shirou talks about it) about 'origin' and ' elemental affinity). With all this talk about magic 'circuits' and the mind being implants with formulas and mathematical equations, it's reminding me of computers for some reason.
This was an interesting chapter, thanks for the chapter!
This was a very interesting chapter.
Shirou's really not liking the attention he's gotten. Have to get used to it.
Issei and his 2 friends really haven't learned their lesson. Can't believe he was trying to excuse his two friends when Shirou pointed it out how it was their antics that caused the Kendo Club to look at him and Shirou suspiciously. They can't get mad that Shirou is getting attention (or looked favorably) from others when they're the ones who continue to do actions that gets them despised by the school students (especially the girls). Can't believe Issei suggest using Kotetsu's popularity to do perverted actions. While I do agree that Issei and his 2 friends are good people at heart, I'm starting to think Kotetsu should hang out with other people during school, cause it feels like Issei is going to get despised like the other 2; and I'm not want Shirou to get dragged with them.
That meeting with Mephisto was really interesting. Time is running out fast regarding having to make a choice, so it's not surprising that Kotetsu is having this meeting despite his reservations. We got some bits about how Human Magic existed in this (DxD) world, and how it came about. It seems that Shirou being able to collect magical energy and store it inside himself automatically is another thing that caught Mephisto's attention.
The meeting in the inner world was really sad. When Shirou was mentioning of grieving his entire life, it reminds me of the first chapter, where Anastasia mention of Shirou's face when he first tried Kyudo early.
Looks like the confrontation with Freed (along with what other hidden agents of the church) is already being foreshadowed.
This is making me wonder how the story will progress in regards to Shirou and the magicians. Like you've said, I think he hasn't really opened his magic circuits in HF(it was only brought up in UBW when Archer was checking on Shirou's arm was numb after the confrontation with Kazuki and Caster, and Rin only gave him some basic teachings in Fate (not sure if she also did in UBW)). I wonder if having basic formulas and mathematical equations with benefit Shirou with his magecraft (like make things easier for him). Now that I think about it, Shirou reincarnating with his magic circuits (plus 10 from the arm) basically means that his body is ' naturally ' born with UBW (unlike in the VN, where (unless more information comes in) he comes from a normal family, and that his elemental affinity was forcefully changed that caused UBW to be 'born' in him); which could mean his body is more 'naturally' tuned to his UBW and magecraft. With this reveal of magic circuits, it makes me wonder in Samiya and Luvia (along with anyone else in the organization) with come up with ways to have magic circuits of their own; along with figuring out (if Shirou talks about it) about 'origin' and ' elemental affinity). With all this talk about magic 'circuits' and the mind being implants with formulas and mathematical equations, it's reminding me of computers for some reason.
This was an interesting chapter, thanks for the chapter!
3/25 c18 Guest
This was an amusing chapter.
Despite it being unintentional, both characters seemed to remember their trauma. At least it shows Kiba's trauma and Rias (and everyone else in the Peerage) knowing about it before the Excalibur arc starts.
Found it questioning how Issei instantly thinks Kotetsu was aiming for Rias with perverted motives, when Kotetsu has shown to not be as perverted as him and his other two friends.
The Kyudo session was another scene of amusement. Shirou was there to give a lecture to Issei, and yet drew attention to himself with his archery skills. Kotetsu stating of Issei being more athletic than Issei thinks he does leaves more credits to Issei being a physical fighter. Also, kind of found it ironic Kotetsu felt the 'philosophical' side of Kyudo would self temper Issei, when it hasn't exactly temper his 'fate' incarnation with his recklessness.
This was a good chapter.
This was an amusing chapter.
Despite it being unintentional, both characters seemed to remember their trauma. At least it shows Kiba's trauma and Rias (and everyone else in the Peerage) knowing about it before the Excalibur arc starts.
Found it questioning how Issei instantly thinks Kotetsu was aiming for Rias with perverted motives, when Kotetsu has shown to not be as perverted as him and his other two friends.
The Kyudo session was another scene of amusement. Shirou was there to give a lecture to Issei, and yet drew attention to himself with his archery skills. Kotetsu stating of Issei being more athletic than Issei thinks he does leaves more credits to Issei being a physical fighter. Also, kind of found it ironic Kotetsu felt the 'philosophical' side of Kyudo would self temper Issei, when it hasn't exactly temper his 'fate' incarnation with his recklessness.
This was a good chapter.
3/23 c17 Guest
Well, the match was fun to read/watch.
Looks like Issei's 2 friends are already notorious. Issei did well to win the match, but I wonder if he'll even be staying in the club. Reason is wondering if he'll screw up by going back to his perverted antics again (plus, he wasn't actually a sword fighter in the original LN).
Found it funny that Sona was mainly there to call Issei's bluff of joining (looks like she's skeptical about his behavior). Found it heartwarming of Shirou being proud of Issei here.
While it's true that both were holding back, it seems that Kiba had the advantage in stats. Luckily for Shirou, his (future) experience helped him out. Sadly, Kiba's shame awakened a memory that made victory moot ...
Thanks for the chapter.
Well, the match was fun to read/watch.
Looks like Issei's 2 friends are already notorious. Issei did well to win the match, but I wonder if he'll even be staying in the club. Reason is wondering if he'll screw up by going back to his perverted antics again (plus, he wasn't actually a sword fighter in the original LN).
Found it funny that Sona was mainly there to call Issei's bluff of joining (looks like she's skeptical about his behavior). Found it heartwarming of Shirou being proud of Issei here.
While it's true that both were holding back, it seems that Kiba had the advantage in stats. Luckily for Shirou, his (future) experience helped him out. Sadly, Kiba's shame awakened a memory that made victory moot ...
Thanks for the chapter.
3/22 c16 Guest
Well, this chapter shows that (with Shirou's assessment) that Issei is a bit more athletic than Issei gave him credit for. Although, Shirou sensing vague magical energy foreshadows (most likely) his Sacred Gear.
As time moves onward, Shirou is remembering more and more. It's worrisome it's giving him pain.
Looks like Kiba is going to be a pain for a different reason...
Well, this chapter shows that (with Shirou's assessment) that Issei is a bit more athletic than Issei gave him credit for. Although, Shirou sensing vague magical energy foreshadows (most likely) his Sacred Gear.
As time moves onward, Shirou is remembering more and more. It's worrisome it's giving him pain.
Looks like Kiba is going to be a pain for a different reason...
3/22 c15 Guest
Another interesting chapter. Introduction to Luvia and what's going on behind the scenes is nice to know. It's obvious that something was going on 'in the shadows' in the previous chapters; this just adds more to it. It really brings the sense of an ongoing war that hasn't stopped. Also shows how each fraction has their good and bad(zealots) in them. Could probably guess who the zealots are in the Grigori.
Based on the conversation, it seems that Mephisto talked about Shirou to the others in the organization. So it seems that some others might develop interest in Shirou (which will just drag Shirou into possible other conflicts).
That soar against Issei was troubling. Can't tell if old memories are helping or going to cause issues...
Another interesting chapter. Introduction to Luvia and what's going on behind the scenes is nice to know. It's obvious that something was going on 'in the shadows' in the previous chapters; this just adds more to it. It really brings the sense of an ongoing war that hasn't stopped. Also shows how each fraction has their good and bad(zealots) in them. Could probably guess who the zealots are in the Grigori.
Based on the conversation, it seems that Mephisto talked about Shirou to the others in the organization. So it seems that some others might develop interest in Shirou (which will just drag Shirou into possible other conflicts).
That soar against Issei was troubling. Can't tell if old memories are helping or going to cause issues...
3/22 c14 Guest
So much for Shirou's wish of not being called a 'brownie'. He's back to fixing school appliances again. Issei shot himself in the foot with that kendi club statement. Could already see why Issei is hesitating a lot to interact with her. Aside from his shyness of speaking with girls, Sona's strictness and being an authority figure will cause him to be on guard with her( and his perverted antics (if he does them later with the other perverted duo) will probably earn him some disapproving statements/opinions from her).
Shirou's thoughts about his training regiment is interesting. It's no surprise he's not going to compare with Archer, as Archer has the benefit of having continuous battles thanks to his 'unlucky' circumstances. However, it doesn't change the fact that Kotetsu was given great physical training by someone experienced at an early age. I wonder if this'll cause Kotetsu to find his own style of fighting.
Interesting choice of including Luvia here. Your reasoning makes sense. There were some complaints I've heard about the series being large, but lacks depth. Plus, Luvia being there will provide Samiya some backup in case the Church tries something.
Thanks for the chapter
So much for Shirou's wish of not being called a 'brownie'. He's back to fixing school appliances again. Issei shot himself in the foot with that kendi club statement. Could already see why Issei is hesitating a lot to interact with her. Aside from his shyness of speaking with girls, Sona's strictness and being an authority figure will cause him to be on guard with her( and his perverted antics (if he does them later with the other perverted duo) will probably earn him some disapproving statements/opinions from her).
Shirou's thoughts about his training regiment is interesting. It's no surprise he's not going to compare with Archer, as Archer has the benefit of having continuous battles thanks to his 'unlucky' circumstances. However, it doesn't change the fact that Kotetsu was given great physical training by someone experienced at an early age. I wonder if this'll cause Kotetsu to find his own style of fighting.
Interesting choice of including Luvia here. Your reasoning makes sense. There were some complaints I've heard about the series being large, but lacks depth. Plus, Luvia being there will provide Samiya some backup in case the Church tries something.
Thanks for the chapter
3/22 c13 Guest
This chapter made some questions being formed. Normally, I would be irked about Shirou not sensing Sona being a devil. However, he has a lot of things that're working against his type of 'senses'. Kuoh is supposed to be a school that the supernatural is supposed to go to, along with Sona's 'smell' isn't as prevalent as Rias's (then again, Shirou met Rias's group in that lair with her wings out). Plus, he hasn't exactly trained his sensing..,
Rias's question for Shirou being there is troubling. Whichever one it is, it doesn't change the fact the church is plotting something. Shirou must've sensed this, which wouldn't surprise me if it's their actions that'll cause him to speak with Mephisto again.
Thanks for the chapter
This chapter made some questions being formed. Normally, I would be irked about Shirou not sensing Sona being a devil. However, he has a lot of things that're working against his type of 'senses'. Kuoh is supposed to be a school that the supernatural is supposed to go to, along with Sona's 'smell' isn't as prevalent as Rias's (then again, Shirou met Rias's group in that lair with her wings out). Plus, he hasn't exactly trained his sensing..,
Rias's question for Shirou being there is troubling. Whichever one it is, it doesn't change the fact the church is plotting something. Shirou must've sensed this, which wouldn't surprise me if it's their actions that'll cause him to speak with Mephisto again.
Thanks for the chapter
3/21 c12 Guest
Basically the introduction to Kuoh Academy. That dream sequence of Archer's memories was brutal.
The Church is really aggravating with these stunts they're trying to pull. It really makes me wonder if they truly believe things will work out so easily. Can see why Shirou is doing everything he can to consider possibilities when to prepare for his decision.
I see you're introducing Kiyotora really early (like you did with Lavinia). Things are going to be tense since he's related to one of the side characters.
As a sidenote: can't believe that Issei is trying to convert Shirou into being a pervert. Good thing Shirou is firm on his decisions.
Basically the introduction to Kuoh Academy. That dream sequence of Archer's memories was brutal.
The Church is really aggravating with these stunts they're trying to pull. It really makes me wonder if they truly believe things will work out so easily. Can see why Shirou is doing everything he can to consider possibilities when to prepare for his decision.
I see you're introducing Kiyotora really early (like you did with Lavinia). Things are going to be tense since he's related to one of the side characters.
As a sidenote: can't believe that Issei is trying to convert Shirou into being a pervert. Good thing Shirou is firm on his decisions.
3/21 c11 Guest
And now, we're introduced to the magician faction:Grauzauberer, learning the history of it's formation and goals (didn't think Merlin was going to be name-drop when meeting Mephisto, or a brief appearance of another magician).
Could see why Mephisto would want to test Shirou (for security reasons). However, based on Samiya's thoughts about Mephisto's eye for talent, that could also be another reason for the meeting (somehow, Mephisto was able to see the reaction (or image) Shirou had in that second, which seems to pique his interest). If Mephisto is this interested just for the small bit, it makes me wonder how him and everyone else will react if Shirou's magic is fully explored/awakened .
We first have the 'foundation' of the church in the story, now we have Grauzauberer. Wonder in what way they'll be explored/expanded upon (since the Church has the Excalibur Fragments arc to expand them).
And now, we're introduced to the magician faction:Grauzauberer, learning the history of it's formation and goals (didn't think Merlin was going to be name-drop when meeting Mephisto, or a brief appearance of another magician).
Could see why Mephisto would want to test Shirou (for security reasons). However, based on Samiya's thoughts about Mephisto's eye for talent, that could also be another reason for the meeting (somehow, Mephisto was able to see the reaction (or image) Shirou had in that second, which seems to pique his interest). If Mephisto is this interested just for the small bit, it makes me wonder how him and everyone else will react if Shirou's magic is fully explored/awakened .
We first have the 'foundation' of the church in the story, now we have Grauzauberer. Wonder in what way they'll be explored/expanded upon (since the Church has the Excalibur Fragments arc to expand them).