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10/6/2020 c4 7jh831
So far, its interesting, though not enough to keep my interest.
The team placements could have gone better. There have been many ino-Iichi-Cho teams and it would make sence to split them up so enemy ninja don't get used to a certian team dynamic.
I agree there are many stories were hiruzen gets walked over.
The change from the bell test was a good change of pace.
Longer chapters would be appreciated. It makes it difficult to get interested when the chapters are so short.
Backing up your story is a great idea. I have seen to many authors "loose" their progress or stories due to something happening. Its funny that a majority of the time people loose their work around school start, or vacation time. I hope more people start backing up their work.
A suggestion, also write down chapter ideas on paper.
I'll wait to see how this story goes before i decide to follow or not
10/4/2020 c4 4El Publicano
Es interesante que Mizuki le haya jugado a Naruto de esa forma.
10/4/2020 c1 El Publicano
Aunque tienes razón de que las cosas son demasiado convenientes para la trama, supongo que a Kishimoto no se le dió por buscar una mejor manera de hacer las cosas, sino que busco la forma de mover y avanzar en la trama.

Si hubiera hecho bien, pero bien, las cosas como por ejemplo, la relación de Naruto y Hinata, que en vez de forzarla a ser después de matar a Neji, pudo haberla construido de otra manera... No sé, que Naruto hablara sobre ese tema antes de la guerra y le dijera a ella que lo esperara un poco más hasta después de que todo acabe y así muchas situaciones...

PD: no busco forzar una opinión sobre el NaruHina, es solo un ejemplo que se me ocurrió :v
10/4/2020 c4 Gordon's Ramsay
Good so far. Sorry about your dead dog lol.
8/13/2020 c3 d1n0s
Wow that was sadly realistic.
8/11/2020 c1 deniswanheda
Muy original y realmente me gusta el giro que le diste, ya quiero ver cómo continuas
Supongo que ahora el saidame tendrá que decidir si decirle o no a naruto sobre el kyubi
También podrías cambiar los equipos
También quisiera saber los emparejamientos
8/11/2020 c1 d1n0s
Good first chapter.
A regular story would be more difficult but also more interesting.
8/11/2020 c1 WhiteyWolf26
Interesting! Personally, I'd especially like to see how all those accumulated consecutive ripples change the whole picture as time goes by. How much would canon change? What stays the same?

This would of course be quite the mammoth project though. And the plot could run itself into the corner called "all the drama" and get stuck or simply lose quality.
Given the whole premise of this fic, you could manage and prevent that, since it quite explicitly goes against what you want to write here, but it's still a danger.

And a hell of a lot of work as this would basically amount to a canon rewrite.

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