for Harry Potter and the Summer of Learning and Growth1/19 c2 qwirky101
this is a good start. it got my interest right away. i don't know why you stopped and (sadly) doubt you'll finish. still i can't help hoping. no matter what i wish you well.
this is a good start. it got my interest right away. i don't know why you stopped and (sadly) doubt you'll finish. still i can't help hoping. no matter what i wish you well.
4/9/2024 c2 Books85
Hi, it's been over three years since this was posted. It is unlikely that you are still looking for a beta reader for this, but I feel it shows promise, and would like to volunteer to beta for you. I am better at word choice and basic grammar, and not as strong at plots and fine-tuning creative writing. I really can't do creative writing well, If I could, I would be looking for a beta.
Thanks for this nice start.
Hi, it's been over three years since this was posted. It is unlikely that you are still looking for a beta reader for this, but I feel it shows promise, and would like to volunteer to beta for you. I am better at word choice and basic grammar, and not as strong at plots and fine-tuning creative writing. I really can't do creative writing well, If I could, I would be looking for a beta.
Thanks for this nice start.
3/9/2024 c2 
11Nanchih
Suggest the Healer says something like "The better method is more costly." Just because it costs more does not make it better, so she needs to emphasize which it is she recommends.
11NanchihSuggest the Healer says something like "The better method is more costly." Just because it costs more does not make it better, so she needs to emphasize which it is she recommends.
1/2/2024 c2 Elfin69
Why did he not ask about what each treatment was and which was better. Will they be able to make it so that he will not have to go back to the Dursleys. Hope that you will get a chance to update again one day.
Why did he not ask about what each treatment was and which was better. Will they be able to make it so that he will not have to go back to the Dursleys. Hope that you will get a chance to update again one day.
1/2/2024 c1 Elfin69
This sounds like it will be really good, glad to see that Harry and his friends are actually going to start thinking of getting better at school and getting stronger.
This sounds like it will be really good, glad to see that Harry and his friends are actually going to start thinking of getting better at school and getting stronger.
9/21/2023 c2 mumphie
stepped, not stept
seems, not seams (a seam is where two pieces of cloth are sewn together)
glanced, not glansed
copy, not coppy
Again, I didn't mention issues with capitalization or grammar.
It's a good beginning. You should think about continuing. Perhaps use a free Grammarly to help you with spelling and grammar issues?
stepped, not stept
seems, not seams (a seam is where two pieces of cloth are sewn together)
glanced, not glansed
copy, not coppy
Again, I didn't mention issues with capitalization or grammar.
It's a good beginning. You should think about continuing. Perhaps use a free Grammarly to help you with spelling and grammar issues?
9/21/2023 c1 mumphie
Your story was recommended as a good one, even though it is just starting.
If you wish -here are a few issues -
"...in [their] compartment" - not there
they're - they are
there - a place - over there
their - shows ownership - his spot, their spot
typos/mispellings -
heading, not headinng
enjoyed, not enjoied
himself, not him self
knowledge, not knoledge
Guys, not Guies
mind, not mine
Privet Drive, not Privit
I didn't comment on missing punctuation, or missing captial letters.
Your story was recommended as a good one, even though it is just starting.
If you wish -here are a few issues -
"...in [their] compartment" - not there
they're - they are
there - a place - over there
their - shows ownership - his spot, their spot
typos/mispellings -
heading, not headinng
enjoyed, not enjoied
himself, not him self
knowledge, not knoledge
Guys, not Guies
mind, not mine
Privet Drive, not Privit
I didn't comment on missing punctuation, or missing captial letters.
8/3/2023 c2 jhollon
you have a great start you definitely need a beta I would be happy to help you have misspelled Gringots and have seams instead of seem.
you have a great start you definitely need a beta I would be happy to help you have misspelled Gringots and have seams instead of seem.
5/29/2023 c2 Gina
Excellent beginning!
Excellent beginning!
2/23/2023 c2 12mackiechandler
If you need someone to help you I am a retired secretary and can force engineers to add verbs.
12mackiechandlerIf you need someone to help you I am a retired secretary and can force engineers to add verbs.
1/31/2023 c2 Millie072
Read this on the recommendation of Slytherinsal. When other authors praise your work, it's usually worth reading. Try using Grammarly for help, there are also several built-in spelling formats that can assist. Good start for the plot. A bit more depth in building characters could be added. A Ron who is actually trying to grow up, refreshing. A Harry who realizes early on that he is going the wrong direction is a great device for growth. Hope to see an update soon. Thanks
Read this on the recommendation of Slytherinsal. When other authors praise your work, it's usually worth reading. Try using Grammarly for help, there are also several built-in spelling formats that can assist. Good start for the plot. A bit more depth in building characters could be added. A Ron who is actually trying to grow up, refreshing. A Harry who realizes early on that he is going the wrong direction is a great device for growth. Hope to see an update soon. Thanks
1/26/2023 c2 6ImUpToNoGood
Before he decides on the more expensive treatment, he should find out what the differences are. What does the more expensive one do that the cheaper one doesn’t? What are the costs?
Lots of spelling and grammar errors:
To name a few:
Certainly, not sertainly
Showed, not shoed
Ma’am, not Mam
Properly, not propperly
Spell out numbers in writing. Two, not 2, etc.
Capitalize the first letter sentences and of each word in names.
I suspect you aren’t writing this anymore, so probably aren’t looking for a beta anymore, but I want to say that the story has a promising start, and would be worth both continuing and getting a beta reader for.
Good luck and joy to you.
6ImUpToNoGoodBefore he decides on the more expensive treatment, he should find out what the differences are. What does the more expensive one do that the cheaper one doesn’t? What are the costs?
Lots of spelling and grammar errors:
To name a few:
Certainly, not sertainly
Showed, not shoed
Ma’am, not Mam
Properly, not propperly
Spell out numbers in writing. Two, not 2, etc.
Capitalize the first letter sentences and of each word in names.
I suspect you aren’t writing this anymore, so probably aren’t looking for a beta anymore, but I want to say that the story has a promising start, and would be worth both continuing and getting a beta reader for.
Good luck and joy to you.
1/22/2023 c2 47DaniMason
I would put more than a space between your chapters. It is a very promising story so far
47DaniMasonI would put more than a space between your chapters. It is a very promising story so far
1/22/2023 c1 12mackiechandler
I like this. I am retired and was a secretary so I can proof read. So if I can help, I would be delighted.
12mackiechandlerI like this. I am retired and was a secretary so I can proof read. So if I can help, I would be delighted.