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4/5 c1 1M-chanchen
Hi!
This is a really interesting story. You did good at writing. Well done!
That took so much courage for Harry to go to Snape who constantly insults him. But he did and Snape is willing to help him, that is great. I wonder where Harry will stay from now on during the summer.
1/13 c1 Luminous-Wave
This is nice, but it needs some work. Have you ever heard of 'show don't tell'? You kept writing Snape saying what he thought, when you should have been depicting his opinions in a more subtle way. Also, his attitude towards Harry changed way too fast. Of course he would change his opinion, but he wouodn't hug him. It would have been better if you made the compassion something that happened over time.
10/31/2020 c1 shinigami.grelle
This is one of the very few stories that made me cry! Good job!
9/27/2020 c1 UPDATE
This is great, write a sequel?
9/4/2020 c1 98mandancie
This was good. :) I enjoyed reading this.
8/25/2020 c1 36Zeugma412
J'ai bien aimé ce texte. Merci pour le partage !

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