for Selling Your Soul For Pleasure and Profit8/24/2021 c3 Guest
Decepticon's - Decepticons
Again, don't use apostrophes in plural forms.
Decepticon's - Decepticons
Again, don't use apostrophes in plural forms.
8/24/2021 c3 Guest
get out attention - get our attention
a spell it Pact weapon, they take an addition - a spell or Pact weapon, they take an additional
get out attention - get our attention
a spell it Pact weapon, they take an addition - a spell or Pact weapon, they take an additional
8/24/2021 c3 Guest
the beings faith - the being's faith
the beings faith - the being's faith
8/24/2021 c2 Guest
refusing to look at any one - refusing to look at anyone
the mans chest - the man's chest
Droideka's - Droidekas
(plural forms shouldn't have apostrophes)
do it's thing - do its thing
(posessive pronouns shouldn't either)
Please get yourself a proofreader, I've seen far worse polish, but it can always become better
refusing to look at any one - refusing to look at anyone
the mans chest - the man's chest
Droideka's - Droidekas
(plural forms shouldn't have apostrophes)
do it's thing - do its thing
(posessive pronouns shouldn't either)
Please get yourself a proofreader, I've seen far worse polish, but it can always become better
8/24/2021 c1 Guest
Repeating yourself a bit here with the can't hurt/couldn't hurt, I would suggest rewording the paragraph:
it can't hurt, even if I don't become a reincarnated devil, making allies with the sister of a Great Satan couldn't hurt
Repeating yourself a bit here with the can't hurt/couldn't hurt, I would suggest rewording the paragraph:
it can't hurt, even if I don't become a reincarnated devil, making allies with the sister of a Great Satan couldn't hurt
5/9/2021 c3 doubledamn
Azure? Oh that is going to be FUN!
Side note: anyone else want to see what happens if you feed a Galvanic Mechamorph liquid Energon?
Azure? Oh that is going to be FUN!
Side note: anyone else want to see what happens if you feed a Galvanic Mechamorph liquid Energon?
15/7/2021 c1 NotYourDad
Your writing didn't seem to improve. Like what i commented before, you tend to pace your story a little too fast. Your story still doesn't feel immersive, you tend to jump from one idea to another without expanding the first one and that leads to the readers losing touch with your story.
Your writing didn't seem to improve. Like what i commented before, you tend to pace your story a little too fast. Your story still doesn't feel immersive, you tend to jump from one idea to another without expanding the first one and that leads to the readers losing touch with your story.