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1/31 c1 Guest
This is the most fucked up story I ever read. I always hated comedy story like yours.
3/20/2022 c1 32M. R. Parkerson
Hey Calvin,
Seeing as you've reviewed my Lola story (as well as help me make it better), I thought I'd drop you a line saying I've read your story and I found very well written. As a guy loves The Lion King, this is *INDEED* what should have in The Lion King 1 when Nala told both Timon and Pumbaa about Simba going back to Pride Rock; Pumbaa going with Nala that is, and not all by himself. Great Job!
I just have only two very small nitpicks, I'm not sure if you do re-editing to check for typos or whatever, but here I go:
1) Et tu needs to be italicized as it's Latin for 'You too/And you'.
And 2) When Timon said, "What's going on here!? Where's the monkey?!", in the movie, Timon said "Who's the monkey?!", not 'where', it's 'who'.

Other than that, as I said, fantastic job with this story, and keep up the good work.

Also, not sure if you've been reading my Lola AU there of late, fill free to check it out as I've been updating it quite a lot. Let me know what you think of it so far, thanks a bunch.

Your pal and fellow writer:
M. R. Parkerson/Max
1/20/2022 c1 5Shian1998
Liked this short Lion King story. Felt bad for Nala and Pumbaa when Timon went on that rant and refused to help. Glad that Timon was remorseful and came around in the end.
11/28/2021 c1 48HoneyGoddess57
This was a very nice one-shot! I really liked it and that's what I think if Nala had stayed longer to witness this. Anyways, great work with this.
4/3/2021 c1 AnonymousvWriter
I must admit, that was a fabulous one-shot! Timon may seem like a jerkass from time to time, but his heart is very much in the right place. And we know that he comes around in the end ).
12/29/2020 c1 367TheWriterForGod42
I thought it was pretty good.
9/13/2020 c1 ExGeneration35
Lol, I expected this to happen if Nala would react to this in 1 1/2. Great one shot by the way :)
9/12/2020 c1 Frozenwolfheart22
Not bad. One idea for you if Rafiki met timon before he says the line who's the monkey? Why does he say it? He doesn't know Rafiki's name he has met him.

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