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11/6/2020 c2 2k+Hawki
-"At every step, the undead, orcs, trolls, and Tauren..."

Not sure why tauren is capitalized there when the other races aren't.

-Apart from that, there's not really much to say. The chapter's effectively one big action scene, and as action scenes go, the action feels kept at arm's length. Like, it often describes what's going on in a macro sense, but less time is spent on the individual characters.
11/3/2020 c1 Hawki
The writing is okay. A main issue is that you're using OCs, and while that isn't bad in of itself, there's not enough time to get to know them. So while I understand the global stakes (Scourge invasion), the personal stakes, not so much. That might improve if more chapters are added.

So, structurally it's fine, just not so strong on emotional connection.

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