for The Advent of The Great Devourer1/19 c6 
4darklordVerasaltrazi
Your doing great this story is one of my favorites don't let the people get you down he'll 99 percent of English speakers got worse grammar so the people complaining are nitpicking if your worst complaints are grammar errors you know your doing great keep up the great work and don't let your fans rush you I'd rather have a long wait for a great chapter than a short wait for rushed work
4darklordVerasaltraziYour doing great this story is one of my favorites don't let the people get you down he'll 99 percent of English speakers got worse grammar so the people complaining are nitpicking if your worst complaints are grammar errors you know your doing great keep up the great work and don't let your fans rush you I'd rather have a long wait for a great chapter than a short wait for rushed work
1/19 c1 SneakyDevil
Did you learn to write English from a machine-translated web novel? because it certainly reads like it. Maybe actually pass an English class before writing in it.
Did you learn to write English from a machine-translated web novel? because it certainly reads like it. Maybe actually pass an English class before writing in it.
12/31/2020 c6 Frost
I think the cult idea is funny and that magnus will change Keno
I think the cult idea is funny and that magnus will change Keno
12/28/2020 c4 Koshiro Unohana
Will he be using assimilation on a summoned angel to get perks and skills?
Will he be using assimilation on a summoned angel to get perks and skills?
12/25/2020 c6 IncognitoMinerals
Personally I'm of the view Keno was added as a love interest purely to check his growth. Be it author inflicted, or something more insidious happening in the background manipulating him. Not only that, but he seems to simply lack a true hunger for power. He may be immortal but there's no reason for his lackadaisical approach to growing ever stronger. The elf slaves also seem like they'll end up as annoying baggage unless he deals them an invite to the party, and even then they'll still be limited by their mortal needs for food and sleep.
Personally I'm of the view Keno was added as a love interest purely to check his growth. Be it author inflicted, or something more insidious happening in the background manipulating him. Not only that, but he seems to simply lack a true hunger for power. He may be immortal but there's no reason for his lackadaisical approach to growing ever stronger. The elf slaves also seem like they'll end up as annoying baggage unless he deals them an invite to the party, and even then they'll still be limited by their mortal needs for food and sleep.
12/24/2020 c6 ted
What you need to do is to put dots after the end of each and every sentence.
This is not even grammatical or spelling mistake, but a very basic one that reduced the reader's enjoyment and immersion because of the uncomfortable dissonance and abruptly breaks from what you expected to see and what actually is displayed. The dot also breaks every sentences apart instead of making them blend together into a mess.
Also makes sure not to forget the commas in the proper places. They're pretty important, too.
You're using the latin alphabet, use latin rules instead of creating your own.
What you need to do is to put dots after the end of each and every sentence.
This is not even grammatical or spelling mistake, but a very basic one that reduced the reader's enjoyment and immersion because of the uncomfortable dissonance and abruptly breaks from what you expected to see and what actually is displayed. The dot also breaks every sentences apart instead of making them blend together into a mess.
Also makes sure not to forget the commas in the proper places. They're pretty important, too.
You're using the latin alphabet, use latin rules instead of creating your own.